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You should give him a normal sword to If you really looking for blood and gore Like an adamantium blade
10286445
yeah it's what I do in the second chapter and when he has used the DArsaber I didn't write there was blood, only members who were cut or something.
10286432
Thanks man I really appreciate I hope when you return the story will be better. See you soon.
10286453
Thanks for the grammatical help and I redone the prologue where you think it was not really correct.
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👍
10286457
One last thing, I just came in to let you know but I just noticed the new chapter is 3k words which is good, anyways back on point the first two chapters are short, and since first one is the prologue it needs to be bigger then a 300 word slap on filler for beginning of the story but you can always do this later, have a good day dude
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thanks again good day to you man.
Wait,what?
He just created advanced weapons and technology in a cave in primitive forge?
That doesn't make sense
I think it would have been better if Discord just gave him a multi device for crafting,building and other things, something on a wrist, like some kind of watch
A device that is a material recycler with means it scans martial then,absorbs it by changing into a kind of gas form, then absorbing it. And this device would also have fabricator function to crate ,like a 3D printer, but in the air, from a hologram
Think about games like Subnautica,Prey and No Man’s Sky
Fabricator from Subnautica
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Multi-tool from No Man’s Sky
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Hmm, nice. I am wondering with the add changeling part as a generic. I wonder if changeling could be a capture kingdom to. LIke something similar as treated as a pest. Since this is alter universe. Like a team up with the rebellion. Just my idea.
10287200
I will do that soon
10286889
I know there is a fault but thanks to Grammarly I will make fewer errors.
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and yes it's the google translate of my native language
10287196
I know it's not logic but it's how I see things let me explain: I want to make the character the most independent possible from Discord and for the forge I know it looks weird but in the CH 3 I will make the forge upgrade to be the forge you can see in the new Mandalorian series of Disney.
But I will take your idea with the device so the character can make more advanced weapons ( I forgot to say in the chapter the weapons are not the best qualities like the star wars weapons it's more like experimentation for the weapons. Thank you for this note I will rewrite the chapter and use what you think it's best.
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Like a laser musket from Fallout 4 but even worse and even more primitive , for example using crystals for basic ocmponents?
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more like the quality of the first gun of human history with the laser and without the long reload so yes like the musket of fallout 4 if you want and the use of the crystals the character finds in the cave. And it's the same thing for the detonators: it's not the star wars quality more like the first grenade humanity has created.
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That or a Vibrosword. Vibroblades and their derivatives have the metal alloy Kortosis integrated into it making it able to block lightsabers.
Heh heh, yeah good luck with that.
By the way, this story reminds me of this: