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nice start to the war
Glorious.
I love this story and as such I have to say this: If you want an editor, I'm willing to work as your editor.
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I will contact you soon I think, thanks you to try to make this story better to read.
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No problem.
YOU HAVE MADE THE BEST STAR WARS/MLP STORY I HAVE EVER READ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!. KEEP IT UP OR YOU WILL BE EXTERMINATED!!!!!!
Yes, now we have a foothold in the field.
Continue plz
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don't worry it's just that highschool take a lot of my time.
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School first, no pressure. Take your time.
will he learn Sith Alchemy and Sith Magic ?
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Maybe
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Shut it and pipe down
And learn what 'criticism' is
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Yeah yeah whatever...
Just some salty random dude going all crazy...
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That's very ironic coming from you
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Tbh. Even your correction has errors in it...
If my english does not fail me it should be:
"I see you are awake, good."
Or:
"I see you have awoken, good.
Now to explain the situation: in this Equestria, the races have enslaved another species, and I've seen you hate that so that's why I brought you here."
What he said really pissed me off. I hate slavery, it's something disgusting and if I can stop it, I will for sure."
English is not my first language either and I think I'm a little rusty, so I hope I did not introduce new errors in my correction.
But what Xero said is still valid. There are a ton of small mistakes in your stroy, at least in the earlier parts of it. If you have an editor and some time a small overhaul would probably be best so new readers dont stop reading three chapters in.
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I know, that's why the next chapter takes time plus one of the readers who is also an editor proposed to help me with errors. I just need to do the chapter and to ask him.
Hay I hate to be that guy but when will the next chapter be up
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Don't really know for now with highschool it's quite hard to have the time to write.
Understandable