Celestia and Luna are rarely outside Canterlot plus they're more powerful than me for the moment, it will be suicidal to do this.

I don't get it when a character who has levitating or air bending kind of powers can't use them to the full extent, ways and limit themselves to the stupid basics

You don't have to force choke them, just take the air away from their lungs or create an anti-air bubble around their head.

Even better expend their lungs from inside to break them, explode

"Why do you heal it?" I look up to see Jack waiting for an answer. I can understand his reaction, that thing could have told the ponies we were hiding here but we can maybe question this thing.

"If we can have any information, we need to this creature to stay alive," I said to him, "When Mandalore arrives, we will tell them about that." It will be better if it's him who questions this thing.

Well, the hit wouldn't cause Thorax to bled out because the laser shot cauterizes the wound immediately.
He wouldn't need healing immediately but even then from that shot he shouldn't have healed and been able to walk
They don't have advanced medicine to heal laser wounds

goddesses

Not really, they can't be even considered demigods
Long living has nothing to do with that
For example, Yoda's species can live for a very long time

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For the first part of your comment, I really don't think about it plus I don't want the character to have all the force abilities or another power yet, I want him to learn like in the next chapter or the scene where he is alone and meditate for example. For the healing thing I thought it would make John and Jack more present and more humans than the other characters I don't have really developed (Aaron, Emma, and Astrid). And for the god part, I read a lot of stories with the sisters who where describe like goddesses so I don't really think about it.

PS: I really want to thank you, you made me realize some errors I made with all your comments so I sincerely thank you.

I'm not really into this, sorry. I think you should get an editor. There are groups on this site that will help you with that if you ask them. But other than that, I'm just not someone who likes the whole Equestrians are assholes to humans. The whole show is based around friendship and I know that they didn't react the best to Zecora and the other dragons, but they never once described them as beneath them. Unless you actually plan on having a pony ally join the group, which would probably be in the best interest, I don't plan on continuing.

It feels like English isn't your first language which is perfectly fine. I do think you should look up those groups with the editors so they can help you find easier ways to word things. Good luck in continuing this though.

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I understand man don't worry after all I didn't expect every reader to like or love this story.

If you just out right kill civilians everytime, the it's going to be very difficult because more ponies will join the military. But if opposite, then you'll have some unlikely allies.

Edit: or some inside information.

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on one hand you are right but on the other killing all does add the aspect of fear and unfeelingness to their side and with their armor and wepons and suficent training it might be possible to falt out terrify most avarage ponys into just running insted as it will most likly reach a point that enough of their numbers are trained to the point they can go up against whatever force celestia sends their way and not take casualtys

You really got to work on your spell check, cause I see a few mistakes here and there again. Also, great work.

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GlitchyFox is right about that
A number of ponies joining the military will be a little bit higher, sure but the thing is.......... they are still ponies
That's why only a minimal,small number of them will join the army because of the attacks,the rest will run away and hide from the unknown enemy that can appear and attack at any moment

Maybe Mandalore will spread a message with the help of changelings in disguises, that if the slaves in towns will be freed, then these towns won't be attacked and spared as long as there also won't be large military presence prepared to attack, invade so only a small number of guards would be allowed

The intel from ponies isn't needed when you have changelings on your side that can do the same and even better

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I'm glad you have seen what I wanted to do guys, in the next chapter you will have a surprise and I think it can be good. I just need to make the thing logic with the story of this Equestria.

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And those who do join the army will likely be the brave and good ones who want to defend for good reasons. The supremacists who think it will be easy and likely the ones doing it for an alterer motives( eg crimalels getting absolved of crimes)

Chapter 6(5?) When?

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I will begin to write it tomorrow so in 1 or 2 days I think

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Thanks. Besides the spelling errors, this story is amazing and I hope you keep it up!👍

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Thanks for the support!! It's good to hear you like it.

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Well what can I say. I'm a sucker for mandalorians.

Quick guestion. How long until the next chapter? It's been nearly 3 days. Just wanted to check that you haven't abandoned this fic.

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Don't worry I don't have abandoned the fic. It takes more time than I think. The other chapters will take time as well plus I take my time for the chapter to be cool to read without faults.

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Good to know.👍

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I will finish the chapter tomorrow. I need to sleep, all it needs is a battle scene and an end scene and it's finish.

"And since this event, I was treated like a Parrish, only my mother, and siblings were the only one to treat me like I was normal. I... I... I just wanted to be like my great parents." After that, he broke in tears so I make the only thing I can do: hug him. He was surprised first but hug back after a little moment.

Is it possible to visit his tribe at some point to prove his father and the village wrong

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I didn't think about that. This will be a possibility yes.

So it's been a while I can't reading your story about five or six times now and I'm kind of growing a little old or rereading it until the next chapter comes out so what does the next chapter come out cuz I'm dying to see what happens next and plus will there be a sequel to the story when you plan to finish it