I love it, the clop is hot and really cute, Blitz and Berry are in character (apart from the whole Blitz being submissive thing but I reckon the dominant and bold ones in life are often submissive in bed) and the emotional development for Blitz is the best part as a story, it's the cherry on top (hehe, pun)
I look forward to seeing more of this, and Blitz and Berry coming out to the rest of the Male Six
Oh my god. I cant even clop to this. I dont want to.mIt would ruin it for me. It is just so perfect! So romantic and cute! The only thing that could be improved here is the actual grammar but it does not matter! Sir. I owe you all my Spikes you magnificent son of a bitch!
To all of you, thanks heaps for commenting. Getting comments just makes me write more of this, and helps keep me motivated so they are all more than welcome. I love hearing what people think of my story, so I've enjoyed them all. Back to working on chapter three, which has both anal and oral in it. 1 + 2 = 3 after all.
2675614 Glad you enjoyed the first chapter so much, and I hoped you enjoyed chapter 2 as well. Balancing the cute-factor with the rampant sex is taking up a lot of the effort on chapter 3. 2678425 Good to hear its has that, hope chapter 2 deserves it too. 2682626 At least you gave it a try, and thanks for the comment. 2682972 In this story, Blitz is gay. All gay, completely. Why? Because I want it so. 2683227 I bow before your image's compliment. 2684262 Its always great to get a comment like this. I'm so happy you liked it and I want to keep the sex and the emotional stuff balanced, but there will be a few chapters more about the sex than anything else, just so I can explore some fun kinks. Should be fun, I hope you continue to read. 2684737 Thanks! 2694630 I wish you could too! Thanks. 2705104 At first I was worried, then I read the rest. I'm happy another person enjoyed it enough to comment. 2707598 Good on you! 27122012712329 Cuteness, regardless of its homosexual equine anal sex, trumps all other concerns. A confusing erection, I will take that as a compliment. Glad you still enjoyed it so much. 2718409 Good point, added AU tag as I should have had since the part. My bad, thanks for pointing it out and thanks for the comments. 2720712 I feel like I really accomplished something, thanks for the comment and I hope you didn't make too big a mess.
I will definetly read, as long as you don't totally abandon the emotional content of this story in future chapters after the kinky sex, which I shall have a box of "Man-Size" Kleenex ready for
It's meant to refer to Thrust Vectoring, as in adjusting the direction of a Jet or Rocket Engine nozzle to turn a Jet or Rocket (My OC's an aerospace engineer)
But yeah, a lot of Bronies have pointed out it sounds like a Porn Star Stallion's name :P
You should think about making a there chapter if you haven't already. Maybe one where rainbow blitz comes out and tells the rest of his friends, and Mabry Berry will be able to throw the party he talked about.
... ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT!!!!!! Not only the exchange of the 'cool' Blitz to the completely submissive Itzy Blitzy is amazing. But a femboy Itzy Blitzy ohmygod!!! You capture the characters perfectly and oh wowweee I want Bubble Berry to fuck me!! The description of it ohfuck him losing his cherry just ohfuckedyfuck. The way he made him beg for it uhhhhhhh~~ you are amazing
I really do like how the story does focus on the important moments in their relationship as well as show how it develops. It makes it better when I see them so happy about taking things further at a good pace.
This story is very well written, the only thing i noticed is that the word boyfriend found it's way into this fic (specifically chapter two) when the correct term is coltfriend
Other than that you may have 10 mustaches on a scale of five
I gotta admit, dood. I got bored and walked into this one out of pure curiosity, dood.
I'm not sure if I should hate myself for thinking this was good, or give myself a pat on the back for reading male gay clop, dood.
It was sorta adorable, regardless of the answer, dood.
Blitz reminds me of my first boyfriend in a way. And me. Except he's gay, not bi.
Though he could be bi...
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I love it, the clop is hot and really cute, Blitz and Berry are in character (apart from the whole Blitz being submissive thing but I reckon the dominant and bold ones in life are often submissive in bed) and the emotional development for Blitz is the best part as a story, it's the cherry on top (hehe, pun)
I look forward to seeing more of this, and Blitz and Berry coming out to the rest of the Male Six
I dig this. Nicely done and fun!
That was awesome.
Hot damn I wish I could fave this more than once....
Oh my god. I cant even clop to this. I dont want to.mIt would ruin it for me. It is just so perfect! So romantic and cute!
The only thing that could be improved here is the actual grammar but it does not matter!
Sir. I owe you all my Spikes you magnificent son of a bitch!
I just gave the 69th like
I didn't know I could get an erection from homosexual, equine anal sex.
Huh.
But that was adorable! Soooooooooooooooooooooooo cute!
My OTP! I should think Blitz has got to try being top sometime.
Can we have the AU tag?
Not gonna lie that was super sexy and cute. Gotta change my underwear.
To all of you, thanks heaps for commenting. Getting comments just makes me write more of this, and helps keep me motivated so they are all more than welcome. I love hearing what people think of my story, so I've enjoyed them all. Back to working on chapter three, which has both anal and oral in it. 1 + 2 = 3 after all.
2675614 Glad you enjoyed the first chapter so much, and I hoped you enjoyed chapter 2 as well. Balancing the cute-factor with the rampant sex is taking up a lot of the effort on chapter 3.
2678425 Good to hear its has that, hope chapter 2 deserves it too.
2682626 At least you gave it a try, and thanks for the comment.
2682972 In this story, Blitz is gay. All gay, completely. Why? Because I want it so.
2683227 I bow before your image's compliment.
2684262 Its always great to get a comment like this. I'm so happy you liked it and I want to keep the sex and the emotional stuff balanced, but there will be a few chapters more about the sex than anything else, just so I can explore some fun kinks. Should be fun, I hope you continue to read.
2684737 Thanks!
2694630 I wish you could too! Thanks.
2705104 At first I was worried, then I read the rest. I'm happy another person enjoyed it enough to comment.
2707598 Good on you!
2712201 2712329 Cuteness, regardless of its homosexual equine anal sex, trumps all other concerns. A confusing erection, I will take that as a compliment. Glad you still enjoyed it so much.
2718409 Good point, added AU tag as I should have had since the part. My bad, thanks for pointing it out and thanks for the comments.
2720712 I feel like I really accomplished something, thanks for the comment and I hope you didn't make too big a mess.
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I will definetly read, as long as you don't totally abandon the emotional content of this story in future chapters after the kinky sex, which I shall have a box of "Man-Size" Kleenex ready for
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For the manly tears, of course!
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Hehe, of course
2684262 'Vectored Thrust'?
Dat name on this clop fic...
I loved this, it's articulate, well-paced with a good story and great clop. Faved and liked, eagerly awaiting next chapter.
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It's meant to refer to Thrust Vectoring, as in adjusting the direction of a Jet or Rocket Engine nozzle to turn a Jet or Rocket (My OC's an aerospace engineer)
But yeah, a lot of Bronies have pointed out it sounds like a Porn Star Stallion's name :P
2740150 I know what it meant, I was just in it for the joke.
You should think about making a there chapter if you haven't already. Maybe one where rainbow blitz comes out and tells the rest of his friends, and Mabry Berry will be able to throw the party he talked about.
Honestly, I don't s'pose I'd mind a few pure kinky chapters, but I'd like to have Blitz coming out to at least the other mane six beforehand.
(P.s. yes, I like the story =3)
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ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT!!!!!!
Not only the exchange of the 'cool' Blitz to the completely submissive Itzy Blitzy is amazing. But a femboy Itzy Blitzy ohmygod!!!
You capture the characters perfectly and oh wowweee I want Bubble Berry to fuck me!! The description of it ohfuck him losing his cherry just ohfuckedyfuck. The way he made him beg for it uhhhhhhh~~ you are amazing
I really do like how the story does focus on the important moments in their relationship as well as show how it develops. It makes it better when I see them so happy about taking things further at a good pace.
Also great clop, can't forget about the clop.
This story is very well written, the only thing i noticed is that the word boyfriend found it's way into this fic (specifically chapter two) when the correct term is coltfriend
Other than that you may have 10 mustaches on a scale of five
Well, Deborah Morrigan was put to shake with how much the word 'fuck' was just said. Good story though, loving it so far