Spike Drake: Age 18, a senior in Highschool, single, likes to play online games and music. One day he meets a player online and they grow close, so they try and meet IRL.
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They got dirty minds the bunch of them.
I like how aj is taking a interest in spike
~.~
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... what, girls don't get to have dirty minds? ;-] Since when?
The only issue I have with this chapter, overall, is that we're told a crapload of stuff. It feels extremely rushed. The previous chapter was flowing along, but this one... information overload.
It could be twice as long, if it took the "show, don't tell" approach - have some internal monologue, maybe some stage whispers, I don't know...
Look, like AJ and Rarity want da ass