Twilight has devised a new, low-energy cost spell that could replace teleportation: swapping! But she can only swap with other alicorns... hopefully that won't cause any complications or mishaps... what's the worst that could happen?
When she cast the swapping teleport spell, the energy rippled through Equus’s thaumic field, looking for another great source of magical energy, like an asteroid falling in toward a gravity well. In most circumstances, this would have been Celestia, located only a few hundred miles away from Ponyville… or her sister, located in the same castle… In this particular instance, Luina[Luna] just so happened to be closer to Ponyville - the tower of the moon was located further south in the castle layout than the royal dais.
"It's a me! Luina! The less know sister of Cellario!"
Also, when is Shakespearicles coming? The sun will fail to rise – wait, that's a bad phrase for Equestria – Twilight will destroy a library before he skips Twicest.
We just going to ignore the issue of how, before the swap, Twilight was not aroused at all, and therefore wasn't wet? That's a lot of potential chafing. There's a reason you need to get warmed up before you get going, after all.
“Well excuse me, Twily… I haven’t exactly practiced my responses to when a family-member magically appears on my…” He stopped short of saying the word… but it didn’t change the clenching squeeze around his stallionhood - Gods he could feel the ripple of milking mareflesh ripple down his length!
He did not?! I mean, he sure must have heard enough about Twilights (mis)adventures to expect something like this sooner or later, right?
“Oh… oh no…” Twilight despaired. Then her eyes blinked again and she looked up at her brother. “W-wait! You said… you said you took an enlargement potion, right?”
Shining: "Yes. After it is comsumed it it takes about fifteen minutes before it slowly starts to work." : "... When did you take it?" Shining: "About fifteen minutes ago. The effect should start every second now." : "..." Edit: Damn, you had that idea yourself. Well, they say great minds think alike...
“He took your virginity!?” Shining felt his temper rising.
: "Would you have preferred if I still would have it now? Because then our situation would be even tighter..." Shining: *throb*
I had a lot of fun with this chapter...
And I had fun reading it, too! Good work so far.
Hopefully we will later see what Cadance and Spike will do. Will they try to help poor Twi, or does Cadance needs Spikes help to cool her down first?
“See, this is why I never had any boyfriends through school! If you didn’t go so crazy all the time, maybe I wouldn’t have had to lose my v-card to Flash when I’m halfway to thirty! ”
“AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!” Their two voices echoed through the cabin, the sibling screaming in terror at the sudden scenario they found themselves in. Shining couldn’t help but buck and jump, instinct causing him to try to shake his little sister off of… him… as quickly as possible.
Oh... this scene is just begging for an omniscient narrator.
So Twilight has appeared where Cadance was. Twilight's pussy isn't wet. Twilight's pussy isn't expanded to accomodate a penis. So out of friggin nowhere, (and technically non-consensual but I'll ignore that for for the sake of wincest) she's taking a massive dicking and we get nothing from her perspective!? What an appalling waste! My mental image has her getting thighed for as nonchalant as her reaction is. This was only written a year ago! You went from writing this... to writing Strapping In. That's remarkable!
“Wh-why the buck are you… inside me!?” Twilight screeched, staring straight up at him, flicking her eyes downward with panic as she did so.
I really really really want to know what she's thinking and feeling here. More than you could ever know, Cloppy. I want the most vulgar details right now and I'm getting this! All Shining Armor ever thinks about when he's fucking something is caveman shit. He's a stallion! (sigh) Such letdown! She was even the perspective holder in the first chapter! You changed it just so I could get "My SIsTeR iS oN My dIIIICk!" for like the dozenth time!
No joke, this might be my least-enjoyed sex scene of yours I've ever read as of this point. I am praying for better later on.
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That's damn good alliteration. Well done sir!
“I… o-Oh… I m-must have… mnn…” Twilight tried to explain, but she kept pausing, her breath hitching. Each time she winced Shining could feel her… her… clench around him even tighter. “...s-s-wappped… into the Princess’s b-body...mmnf! B-buck it’s st-stretching me…”
Okay, I feel credit is due here. That's pretty hot!
Shining felt the heat in his own face burning and swelling with shame. A sickly feeling was quickly replacing the shock that he’d felt in his gut - here below him was his younger sister. The mare he’d given horsey-back rides to… the mare that he’d taught how to fly a kite… the little filly he’d grown up with, side by side… Affectionate, yes… but as siblings. As brother and sister.
Yeah... Well it was worth a shot. But I think the entire vector of your attack is targeted on me being turned on by each repetion of the word 'sister' and barring any vulnerability there, this scene has nothing else going for it aside from the witty line here or there. The characterization of Twilight Sparkle is remarkably shallow and bordering on completely OOC, the believability scale of their conversation is further below zero than the mercury in Kamchatka in the dead of winter and the perspective is on the least-affected of the pair since he'd already been having intercourse. He went from one wet hole to... well, in reality, seriously damaging Twilight's vaginal tissue and sending her to the hospital with severe bleeding . Setting that aside and immersing myself in the fetish side of things, Twilight has the most to describe and she never got the chance.
There's no buildup at all either. I just got thrown into Shining Armor's head despite the first chapter being Twilight-focused. I mean, shit bro... it got 800 likes! It's that going for, I reckon.
Overused dialoge is the JAM that this chapter needed so funny i nearly choked. Automatically goes into favorites
"It's a me! Luina! The less know sister of Cellario!"
This shouldn't be arousing. Why is it arousing.
Also, when is Shakespearicles coming? The sun will fail to rise – wait, that's a bad phrase for Equestria – Twilight will destroy a library before he skips Twicest.
This is such a completely contrived situation purely for the sake of porn, I love it.
Wait, Twilight disappeared right in front of Spike...let's hope Cadence's appearance doesn't scar him for life.
This was perfect
We just going to ignore the issue of how, before the swap, Twilight was not aroused at all, and therefore wasn't wet? That's a lot of potential chafing. There's a reason you need to get warmed up before you get going, after all.
They aren’t moving though.
> halfway to thirty is fifteen, Twilight.
He did not?!
I mean, he sure must have heard enough about Twilights (mis)adventures to expect something like this sooner or later, right?
Shining: "Yes. After it is comsumed it it takes about fifteen minutes before it slowly starts to work."
: "... When did you take it?"
Shining: "About fifteen minutes ago. The effect should start every second now."
: "..."
Edit: Damn, you had that idea yourself.
Well, they say great minds think alike...
: "Would you have preferred if I still would have it now? Because then our situation would be even tighter..."
Shining: *throb*
And I had fun reading it, too!
Good work so far.
Hopefully we will later see what Cadance and Spike will do.
Will they try to help poor Twi, or does Cadance needs Spikes help to cool her down first?
Found two small typos:
Who is that again?
She is an alicorn since the season 3 finale.
This was adorable/sexy funny ,cute ,all at once
This chapter was so adorasexy!
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Alternatively, she was wet, because she just likes science/magic that much.
Hmm...Too busy laughing to actually clop. 0/10, Downvote.
Just kidding, of course. This chapter left me giggling like an idiot, and that's more than worth an upvote.
I've hit the comedy gold mine now I can't stop laughing
So she was only 15?
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I could see how it would be read that way... I meant 25
Oh... this scene is just begging for an omniscient narrator.
So Twilight has appeared where Cadance was. Twilight's pussy isn't wet. Twilight's pussy isn't expanded to accomodate a penis. So out of friggin nowhere, (and technically non-consensual but I'll ignore that for for the sake of wincest) she's taking a massive dicking and we get nothing from her perspective!? What an appalling waste! My mental image has her getting thighed for as nonchalant as her reaction is. This was only written a year ago! You went from writing this... to writing Strapping In. That's remarkable!
I really really really want to know what she's thinking and feeling here. More than you could ever know, Cloppy. I want the most vulgar details right now and I'm getting this! All Shining Armor ever thinks about when he's fucking something is caveman shit. He's a stallion! (sigh) Such letdown! She was even the perspective holder in the first chapter! You changed it just so I could get "My SIsTeR iS oN My dIIIICk!" for like the dozenth time!
No joke, this might be my least-enjoyed sex scene of yours I've ever read as of this point. I am praying for better later on.
That's damn good alliteration. Well done sir!
Okay, I feel credit is due here. That's pretty hot!
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Really?
Yeah... Well it was worth a shot. But I think the entire vector of your attack is targeted on me being turned on by each repetion of the word 'sister' and barring any vulnerability there, this scene has nothing else going for it aside from the witty line here or there. The characterization of Twilight Sparkle is remarkably shallow and bordering on completely OOC, the believability scale of their conversation is further below zero than the mercury in Kamchatka in the dead of winter and the perspective is on the least-affected of the pair since he'd already been having intercourse. He went from one wet hole to... well, in reality, seriously damaging Twilight's vaginal tissue and sending her to the hospital with severe bleeding . Setting that aside and immersing myself in the fetish side of things, Twilight has the most to describe and she never got the chance.
There's no buildup at all either. I just got thrown into Shining Armor's head despite the first chapter being Twilight-focused. I mean, shit bro... it got 800 likes! It's that going for, I reckon.
It doesn't need mine.
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No worries! I notice my comedic clop is not your cuppa as much as my other ones, you tend to like the realistic stuff more. Makes sense!