Wait, did this happen on the human world side? Because I didn't notice when did Spike came back to Equestria. Also, I say dragon Spike should clean up his mess before coming back.
“Master, is there any fantasy you wish you try?” Spike would look over towards jimmy who seemed to be sitting in comfort on the couch her legs spread out as she appeared to be getting as comfortable as she possibly could.
Uh, when did Silvia become Jimmy?
This chapter needs some major edits. It's got a LOT of spelling mistakes. Like:
The way she said Dragon was menacing, her voice stretching out the U on it.
Uh, there is no U in Dragon...
He was standing away from Spike, at least sixty, or seventy feet. Stood a woman, or at least in the Dragon-shaped woman.
He was standing away from Spike? He who? Also immanently saying the woman was standing before him right after that seems a bit redundant.
Hate to say it, but I think this chapter needed more time to bake. At the very least it needs an editor badly.
9815059 yeah was originally going to be a chapter for human world but replaced it with Spike also it's ment for a diffrent book thanks for pointing out the Jimmy i can fix that insteantly lol it was my mistake XD but yeah I wanted to get a chapter out for you guys
Comment posted by mrmidnight deleted Sep 3rd, 2019
Wait, did this happen on the human world side? Because I didn't notice when did Spike came back to Equestria.
Also, I say dragon Spike should clean up his mess before coming back.
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Its kind of between where spike is now and before he went back to equeatria but nothing is really real here
Ooh, I like this fantasy chapter concept!
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Thanks heh its non cannon and this chapter will be used in my book for amazon lol ment to be an exclusive but i thought id share it some
Uh, when did Silvia become Jimmy?
This chapter needs some major edits. It's got a LOT of spelling mistakes. Like:
Uh, there is no U in Dragon...
He was standing away from Spike? He who? Also immanently saying the woman was standing before him right after that seems a bit redundant.
Hate to say it, but I think this chapter needed more time to bake. At the very least it needs an editor badly.
9815059
yeah was originally going to be a chapter for human world but replaced it with Spike also it's ment for a diffrent book thanks for pointing out the Jimmy i can fix that insteantly lol it was my mistake XD but yeah I wanted to get a chapter out for you guys
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Fixed those mistakes you pointed out
Love the new chapter.
Most excellent.