9470021 Maybe but where would the fun be in that XD beside not everything can happen by magic lol, don't worry i do have plans for the little marshmallow sister
I kinda wish that one Spike made for Lyra and Bob Bon would work for Sweetie Belle as well. I mean, it's obvious Belle's got it bad for Drakey, Spike should realize it as well instead of being so oblivious to her affections. Silva should has a lot of time and fun with Sweetie Belle...she probably can see this a country mile away, but needs to break the crush master has on Rarityand see what's right there in front of him. And I say this as a Sparity fan even after all this time.
9500661 Hahaha...guess we're kinda on the same vein; part of me does see Silva as a way for Spike to come to grips with his budding feelings--that he may have pining for the wrong white cute unicorn...though there's nothing wrong with Spike having more than one mare for him...And Silva turns out to be a rather effective teacher
9500714 again pretty close heh, I wanted to write something where SPike is seeing the world maturing in a sexual mannor and Silvia is there to help him out somewhat beside enjoying the bits of pleasure I'm a small fan of Sparity though it does get slightly stale, Also a fan of Applespike and Applebelle heh and I promise you this, with this next chapter its going to be fun and seductive
9511294 I don’t have prime. And I didn’t even need to use it to see all the errors. Incorrect captilization. Run-on sentences. Incorrect spelling. Not using punctuation in the right places. I honestly don’t know why you’re so against everything I’m saying. I’ve never once said you’re a shit writer, just that you could improve on grammar. The ability to comment isn’t just here to tell you you’re amazing. A good writer always want to improve. I’ve written academic journals, taken university courses just on writing, and I’ve read well over a hundred books meaning I’ve seen many examples of properly proofread works of literature. I’m not trying to be a dick. I’m trying to help you.
9511310 I don't expect to be told im the greatest im not expecting that and ive left comments that said i suck. No its claiming im a liar when i did something i know i did i ran the thing through Grammarly.
9511320 When I’ve seen physical evidence that proves the contrary, it’s hard to believe you. If all it takes to rub you the wrong way is have someone call you out for something or other, this may not be the place for you. If you provided a screenshot showing that Grammarly says you’re good, I’d believe you. But, I know I’ve run your story through it and I know it popped up with at least 20 errors.
9511353 you should still do one story at a time so you don't get ideas mixed up is all and if you lash out at people who try to help you improve your work then why are you here? hell even grammarly gets it wrong just because yours says its fine doesn't mean its fine and if a guy who has gone to school for writing says its littered with errors just by looking at it and his grammarly says its littered with errors then MAYBE just MAYBE you should run it through again and not jump to conclusions of people saying your lying when people just have to read their own work and fix mistakes....ether way the story is great and cant wait for more just in the future don't assume anything and just reread your chapter after putting it through grammarly just to be sure its perfect
Nice chapter.
Just from the picture on the front alone all I could think is, "Yes please."
9461260
lol well I'm glad you like it heh and all the yes XD
Half expecting Silvia to magic Sweetie into a harem girl for spike.
9470021
Maybe but where would the fun be in that XD beside not everything can happen by magic lol, don't worry i do have plans for the little marshmallow sister
I kinda wish that one Spike made for Lyra and Bob Bon would work for Sweetie Belle as well. I mean, it's obvious Belle's got it bad for Drakey, Spike should realize it as well instead of being so oblivious to her affections. Silva should has a lot of time and fun with Sweetie Belle...she probably can see this a country mile away, but needs to break the crush master has on Rarityand see what's right there in front of him. And I say this as a Sparity fan even after all this time.
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Lol how did you get ahold of my notes XD and yeah you are right wait till next chapter
9500661
Hahaha...guess we're kinda on the same vein; part of me does see Silva as a way for Spike to come to grips with his budding feelings--that he may have pining for the wrong white cute unicorn...though there's nothing wrong with Spike having more than one mare for him...And Silva turns out to be a rather effective teacher
9500714
again pretty close heh, I wanted to write something where SPike is seeing the world maturing in a sexual mannor and Silvia is there to help him out somewhat beside enjoying the bits of pleasure I'm a small fan of Sparity though it does get slightly stale, Also a fan of Applespike and Applebelle heh and I promise you this, with this next chapter its going to be fun and seductive
Bro, I didn't make those comments to make fun of you. I don't know why you're deleting them. You just have room for improvement.
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No it was for claiming im a liar saying i didn't use grammarly when i know i used the damn thing
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Like I said, I ran your story through it as well and it was littered with errors.
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So ether one if our grammarly is wrong or you've got prime
9511294
I don’t have prime. And I didn’t even need to use it to see all the errors. Incorrect captilization. Run-on sentences. Incorrect spelling. Not using punctuation in the right places. I honestly don’t know why you’re so against everything I’m saying. I’ve never once said you’re a shit writer, just that you could improve on grammar. The ability to comment isn’t just here to tell you you’re amazing. A good writer always want to improve. I’ve written academic journals, taken university courses just on writing, and I’ve read well over a hundred books meaning I’ve seen many examples of properly proofread works of literature. I’m not trying to be a dick. I’m trying to help you.
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I don't expect to be told im the greatest im not expecting that and ive left comments that said i suck. No its claiming im a liar when i did something i know i did i ran the thing through Grammarly.
9511320
When I’ve seen physical evidence that proves the contrary, it’s hard to believe you. If all it takes to rub you the wrong way is have someone call you out for something or other, this may not be the place for you. If you provided a screenshot showing that Grammarly says you’re good, I’d believe you. But, I know I’ve run your story through it and I know it popped up with at least 20 errors.
you should finish one story before starting another
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It was commissioned to me to start and technecly they're taking place at the same time
9511353
you should still do one story at a time so you don't get ideas mixed up is all and if you lash out at people who try to help you improve your work then why are you here? hell even grammarly gets it wrong just because yours says its fine doesn't mean its fine and if a guy who has gone to school for writing says its littered with errors just by looking at it and his grammarly says its littered with errors then MAYBE just MAYBE you should run it through again and not jump to conclusions of people saying your lying when people just have to read their own work and fix mistakes....ether way the story is great and cant wait for more just in the future don't assume anything and just reread your chapter after putting it through grammarly just to be sure its perfect
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Will do man ill make sure to remember