9239957 Yeah wrote it on my phone well probably post a edited version soon. I’ll look for an editor ASAP wanted to get far in. You know make sure people found it interesting before having an editor work on something not worth there time.
9249357 Thanks, for all the advice I’ll work on those suggestions when I get the chance. And at the end I’ll just say that it wasn’t a dark elf and leave it at that. So if there’s anything I can do to repay you please let me know
Welp, too many errors, I recommend using Microsoft word to check words, or look for an editor, that works too.
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Yeah wrote it on my phone well probably post a edited version soon. I’ll look for an editor ASAP wanted to get far in. You know make sure people found it interesting before having an editor work on something not worth there time.
about time to let the gay joke drop, funny the first time but I find its welcome long past by this point.
remove "we"
plans
Especially is the word your looking for.
your
How one word.
Other than these maybe do something about the revenge monologue, seemed pointless from where I sit due to how little the dark elves were mentioned.
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Thanks, for all the advice I’ll work on those suggestions when I get the chance. And at the end I’ll just say that it wasn’t a dark elf and leave it at that. So if there’s anything I can do to repay you please let me know