Spike has now become of age where he his noticing all the females around him in a new perspective. Too bad Dragons have needs ponies can't fully satisfy.
If I may offer some feedback: your writing is good in a structural standpoint, you have good vocabulary and sentence building. But, when it comes to writing the "action", you go waaaay too fast. You set up the scene well enough, and then rush through the actual play. In a few lines you go from the first thrust, to the pounding, to the climax, to the aftermath, without taking the time to give some details.
After reaching puberty Spike had sensed the disturbing lack of pony/dragon hybrids in Equestria, and upon reaching the only correct conclusion, he decided to take the matter into his own scaly hands (and loins). In only a few weeks a certain princess will be in for a shocking surprise--merely the first in line of the many more mares to cum...
Go get them, boy
You might want to go over the story to get rid of some typos. Also, the actual clop scenes could be a bit more fleshed out.
GOOD HISTORY, I do not usually like clop. but this is a good if the story was anthro certainly would be great but one with the issue of pregnancy not many stories have that. finally I hope the update soon
I also agree with ArmadilloEater you need to give a little more detail at the time of the "action"
“Deal.” Twilight said, yawning as she took the book. Spike smiled as she turned around and began walking to the door. As she made it to the door, har aura around the book faded, the book falling to the ground as she did, a light snore telling Spike she was out cold.
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Spike paused for a moment…”So...she dreams about having sex with her own brother...but wouldn’t have actual sex with me...Oh you are so having twins.” Spike grumbled, taking both psnises out of her and aligning them and thrusting both of them into her again, this time his second split off penis entering her now flooding pussy as well.
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If I may offer some feedback: your writing is good in a structural standpoint, you have good vocabulary and sentence building. But, when it comes to writing the "action", you go waaaay too fast. You set up the scene well enough, and then rush through the actual play. In a few lines you go from the first thrust, to the pounding, to the climax, to the aftermath, without taking the time to give some details.
After reaching puberty Spike had sensed the disturbing lack of pony/dragon hybrids in Equestria, and upon reaching the only correct conclusion, he decided to take the matter into his own scaly hands (and loins). In only a few weeks a certain princess will be in for a shocking surprise--merely the first in line of the many more mares to cum...
Go get them, boy
You might want to go over the story to get rid of some typos. Also, the actual clop scenes could be a bit more fleshed out.
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Yeah. Sorry. I am new to writti g clop, so I don't know exactly how to strech it out. I'll figure it out though.
Not a bad story. Not one for rape though. But a good story still.
Would be funny if a pregnant Rainbow and Luna sees Spike and be like "YOU DID THIS TO US!!!"
Okay normally I do not read clop, buuut this made me giggle a little bit.
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GOOD HISTORY, I do not usually like clop. but this is a good if the story was anthro certainly would be great but one with the issue of pregnancy not many stories have that. finally I hope the update soon
I also agree with ArmadilloEater you need to give a little more detail at the time of the "action"
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i like what im reading, continue
Is this anthro?
Add Rape Dragon in the Legends of History.