959166 Okay , first, I know. I read it and am currently awaiting the next chapter. Your fic was the one that inspired me to do mine. Which by the way, when is the next chapter coming out hmm. second, your fic takes place in the mojave wasteland, mine takes place in the capital wasteland. Third, thanks for reading and commenting.Means alot.
Good so far. Interesting you started at the begging of Fallout 3. I'll be watching. 959166 It doesn't matter who does it first, second or thirty-fifth. All stories have some basic formant to them with only the author's touch making them different.
Thumbing this up without even reading it. Why, you ask? Nostalgia makes us do crazy things. You did something not too many authors do on here. You did your description with good grammar and spelling, you have a cover image, you didn't screw up your story name, and you did good on capitalizing the chapter names. Too many damn Fallout Equestria fics, and not enough Fallout goes to Equestria, or vice versa, fics. Also, Fallout 3 and Fallout New Vegas are within my Top Ten Games of All Time.
Let you know incomments, huh? OHMAGOSHOHMAGOSHOHMAGOSH!!! THAT WAS AWESOME!!! Moar. MOAR!!! Pwease :) It's good, It has good Intro *said it before, ah'know* and plot is good </pun>. I'm looking forward to next chapters. Don't screw it up pwease ;) Have a good life there, wontcha?
959361 You know you can join The Mojave Express group to keep up with all of the Fallout crossovers. Also there's not enough Fallout crossover with a female as the protagonist.
959402 Eh..I'm not against women or anything, but I perceive the Lone Wanderer and Courier to be male, mainly from the commercials and posters. Just like how the canon Commander Shepard in Mass Effect is male, with a shaved head and all.
959406 how often do you think you will be able to update this story? if often enough (not once a fucking month) il track, favorite and whatever the shit outa this story if i have to.
959826 no promises, but I plan to update this today or tomorrow, as for how long it will take me to update after every chapter? I'd say every five days or less, depending on how much I have to do. If it takes me longer, I will likely annoce that there will be a delay. Which hopefully there won't be. Anyway, thanks for reading!
I really want to like this, but come on, "A sudden realization hit her, more strongly than when Rainbow Dash crashed into her when that one time when they first met." "The human could speak, that means they were intelligent enough to speak." This is the kind of thing you write when you are doing a parody of bad writing.
I like it so far, but I agree with a couple of the other readers, I found the colored dialogue distracting and unnecessary. Other than that, keep up the good work.
959201 Next chapter hits soon sorry for the long wait. Also always happy to inspire people to write not just another run of the mill story. 959247 Aww twas just harmless fun. But I see your point my story more focused on the harsh reality of life in the wasteland. He or she is free to do as they wish.
959201 Also word of advice from your glorious overlord! Build up!!! Make shit tense. Example: The vault door scene. You could have elaborated crushing loss he felt as he is forced to leave the only home he ever knew and must tread into an unforgiving dead world...
Plus I find adding those little bits helps later... Example: Returning to the vault for vengeance, greed or simple rage at the abandonment. It leaves you insert story for when you can't think up some shit. Believe me SPOILER ALERT I will at some point have Darius go back to the brotherhood bunker... For better, worse or not at all. See it's like a chapter in a can. Pop the tab and mash some keys.
O and imma leave a full review later...... Because if you read my work then I have license to tear.... I mean... review your work.
961955 do we share the same mind? I had the idea of the lone wanderer having flashbacks as the adventure progresses. This eventually causes him to go back to the vault. Also a spoiler alert, twilight will reflect on what she thinks and dose by writing it down in letters. You will see what I mean soon.
962024....Gotta get it outta my head... (Runs away to find 870 and quell the rebellion of the new voice) On a happier note: Yay for people remembering to leave yourself room to have (Insert good plot device here)!
962024 Sad part about my story.... I haven't really wrote much more for the story... chapter 5 as it stands is only like 1.3k words in. Well below market value...
962107 one reason I starred at the beginning of fallout 3 was to give people a new sense, so when they see things from twilights point of view, they will feel sorry for her, being trapped in a world where almost everything is a backwards messed up version of Equestria. I intend to put a lot of emotion into this fic. As for your short chapter, I can relate, when I started this fic, I had a hard time trying to figure out, how the heck do I get twilight to Equestria and should I send just her, or do I send some other ponies. And plus, when I write this. It surprise me when I write stuff down on paper and later type it, how it looks so short on screen.
962167 I just straight type this shit up on a whim. And it's not that it's hard to write it's just I have been procrastinating the whole time for all my work...
959857 woopedy fucking do! but now... the reason i whuld love to read more of this story... i just love how you have made the story go so far, and im intrested as hell right now and i can wait for those epic moments where twilight meets other survivors, bandits, BoS, enclave and you name it. but not only that but just love the fallout series and ofc the addition of ponies in the fallout universe without turning it into equestria got fucked up insted of earth just makes it that much better. but now you may be asking "but there are other fallout crossovers out there, what about them?" as i said earlier, they are basicly equestria got royaly fucked up, i just lost intrest in them, for example i think i read about 32 chapters of the never ending fallout series Khat made and i just lost intrest in it. but anyway i just cant wait to read how everyone will react when they see twilight
Dude, a few things. Not saying this to be rude, but to help you. 1. Your idea of coloring the text is unnecessary and problematic. Reading Twilight's text in the black BG most people use is as hard to read as this without selecting text. 2. You got several spelling errors. I suggest a proofreader/beta. 3. Plothole: how come hasn't the Wanderer noticed that Twilight has a freakin' vault jumpsuit and a Pip-Boy?! Even to someone naive, checking the overseer's computer as it's only rational he would have done would have told him not everyone out there comes from a vault. Even if he didn't, after she talked about Equestria, it's impossible for him not to question how she got what she's wearing. 4. "Play this small track here." Really? Why not embed the link into the narrative itself? That breaks the flow of the story like nothing else.
loving it so far.
959046 You don't know how much that means to me.
Thank you!
. . . . . sorry for the emotional outburst.
Lol I made a better one. And did it first!
959166 Okay , first, I know. I read it and am currently awaiting the next chapter. Your fic was the one that inspired me to do mine. Which by the way, when is the next chapter coming out hmm.
second, your fic takes place in the mojave wasteland, mine takes place in the capital wasteland.
Third, thanks for reading and commenting.Means alot.
Looks good. Keep going. =3
Good so far. Interesting you started at the begging of Fallout 3. I'll be watching.
959166 It doesn't matter who does it first, second or thirty-fifth. All stories have some basic formant to them with only the author's touch making them different.
Loved it, can't wait for more.
I say keep the different colored dialog, its useful.
Thumbing this up without even reading it. Why, you ask? Nostalgia makes us do crazy things. You did something not too many authors do on here. You did your description with good grammar and spelling, you have a cover image, you didn't screw up your story name, and you did good on capitalizing the chapter names. Too many damn Fallout Equestria fics, and not enough Fallout goes to Equestria, or vice versa, fics. Also, Fallout 3 and Fallout New Vegas are within my Top Ten Games of All Time.
Lovin it. Some spelling mistakes here and there but solid first chapter nonetheless. Eagerly awaiting for more.
Let you know incomments, huh? OHMAGOSHOHMAGOSHOHMAGOSH!!! THAT WAS AWESOME!!! Moar. MOAR!!! Pwease :) It's good, It has good Intro *said it before, ah'know* and plot is good </pun>. I'm looking forward to next chapters. Don't screw it up pwease ;) Have a good life there, wontcha?
It touches my heart to see so many actually read my fic. Thank you! you rock! And you all deserve one of These.
959361
You know you can join The Mojave Express group to keep up with all of the Fallout crossovers. Also there's not enough Fallout crossover with a female as the protagonist.
959402 Thanks for reading!
Liking it so far, Tracking, Keep up the good work
959402
Eh..I'm not against women or anything, but I perceive the Lone Wanderer and Courier to be male, mainly from the commercials and posters. Just like how the canon Commander Shepard in Mass Effect is male, with a shaved head and all.
THIS IS... SAXEN HALE EPIC!
959406 how often do you think you will be able to update this story?
if often enough (not once a fucking month) il track, favorite and whatever the shit outa this story if i have to.
959826 no promises, but I plan to update this today or tomorrow, as for how long it will take me to update after every chapter? I'd say every five days or less, depending on how much I have to do. If it takes me longer, I will likely annoce that there will be a delay. Which hopefully there won't be. Anyway, thanks for reading!
will read later. courier caught my attention first.
I like it! Although what's with the "I'a" ??
960309 It was supposed to be " I'a, thank you for pointing that out. grammar error.
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I think the coloured dialogue is unnecessary, though.
I really want to like this, but come on, "A sudden realization hit her, more strongly than when Rainbow Dash crashed into her when that one time when they first met."
"The human could speak, that means they were intelligent enough to speak."
This is the kind of thing you write when you are doing a parody of bad writing.
960790 thank you for catching that, I believe that was a case of grammar errors.
"Rob Perlman"
uh i think you meant to type "Ron Perlman"
just saying
I like it so far, but I agree with a couple of the other readers, I found the colored dialogue distracting and unnecessary. Other than that, keep up the good work.
959201 Next chapter hits soon sorry for the long wait. Also always happy to inspire people to write not just another run of the mill story.
959247 Aww twas just harmless fun. But I see your point my story more focused on the harsh reality of life in the wasteland. He or she is free to do as they wish.
959201 Also word of advice from your glorious overlord! Build up!!! Make shit tense. Example: The vault door scene. You could have elaborated crushing loss he felt as he is forced to leave the only home he ever knew and must tread into an unforgiving dead world...
Plus I find adding those little bits helps later... Example: Returning to the vault for vengeance, greed or simple rage at the abandonment. It leaves you insert story for when you can't think up some shit. Believe me SPOILER ALERT I will at some point have Darius go back to the brotherhood bunker... For better, worse or not at all. See it's like a chapter in a can. Pop the tab and mash some keys.
O and imma leave a full review later...... Because if you read my work then I have license to tear.... I mean... review your work.
961955 do we share the same mind?
I had the idea of the lone wanderer having flashbacks as the adventure progresses. This eventually causes him to go back to the vault. Also a spoiler alert, twilight will reflect on what she thinks and dose by writing it down in letters. You will see what I mean soon.
962024....Gotta get it outta my head... (Runs away to find 870 and quell the rebellion of the new voice)
On a happier note: Yay for people remembering to leave yourself room to have (Insert good plot device here)!
962024 Sad part about my story.... I haven't really wrote much more for the story... chapter 5 as it stands is only like 1.3k words in. Well below market value...
962107 one reason I starred at the beginning of fallout 3 was to give people a new sense, so when they see things from twilights point of view, they will feel sorry for her, being trapped in a world where almost everything is a backwards messed up version of Equestria. I intend to put a lot of emotion into this fic. As for your short chapter, I can relate, when I started this fic, I had a hard time trying to figure out, how the heck do I get twilight to Equestria and should I send just her, or do I send some other ponies. And plus, when I write this. It surprise me when I write stuff down on paper and later type it, how it looks so short on screen.
962167 I just straight type this shit up on a whim. And it's not that it's hard to write it's just I have been procrastinating the whole time for all my work...
959857 woopedy fucking do!
but now...
the reason i whuld love to read more of this story...
i just love how you have made the story go so far, and im intrested as hell right now and i can wait for those epic moments where twilight meets other survivors, bandits, BoS, enclave and you name it.
but not only that but just love the fallout series and ofc the addition of ponies in the fallout universe without turning it into equestria got fucked up insted of earth just makes it that much better.
but now you may be asking "but there are other fallout crossovers out there, what about them?" as i said earlier, they are basicly equestria got royaly fucked up, i just lost intrest in them, for example i think i read about 32 chapters of the never ending fallout series Khat made and i just lost intrest in it.
but anyway i just cant wait to read how everyone will react when they see twilight
Great don't need the colors I ain't five
watching best not dissapoint
964294 In the words of the master chief: I won't.
Dude, a few things. Not saying this to be rude, but to help you.
1. Your idea of coloring the text is unnecessary and problematic. Reading Twilight's text in the black BG most people use is as hard to read as this without selecting text.
2. You got several spelling errors. I suggest a proofreader/beta.
3. Plothole: how come hasn't the Wanderer noticed that Twilight has a freakin' vault jumpsuit and a Pip-Boy?! Even to someone naive, checking the overseer's computer as it's only rational he would have done would have told him not everyone out there comes from a vault. Even if he didn't, after she talked about Equestria, it's impossible for him not to question how she got what she's wearing.
4. "Play this small track here." Really? Why not embed the link into the narrative itself? That breaks the flow of the story like nothing else.