The year had been long and hard for the lavender mare but it was the best year Twilight ever had in her entire life! She had managed to find many good friends and she had saved all of Equestria from sudden doom, from both the hoofs of Nightmare Moon and the claws of Discord.
Now the year would soon be over as Xmas approached and soon after the new year would come, she wished that the next year would be just as if not even greater than this year had already been and it wasn’t even over yet!
It was winter now and everypony had been invited to the celestial sisters’ grand Christmas Eve party at their mighty sky castle. Twilight and all of her friends had received personal invitations from the solar princess Celestia herself.
Twilight was bouncing happily around in her tree library, she was really looking forward to see her mentor again. It had been months since they had last seen each other, but she was also very eager to meet Luna once more, since their last meeting at ‘Nightmare Night’ she wondered how the night goddess had been doing, learning how to fit in after her millennium long exile and cope with a modern Equestria. The lavender mare really hoped that her lessions of friendship had made a bit of an impact on Luna’s life and would aid her in her growth to become the moon goddess she was always meant to be by her sister’s side.
Twilight Sparkle looked at the clock noticing the time, she would soon have to take her leave for Rarity’s house, where she and her friends were supposed to meet and pick up their dresses before they would get a ride by a royal chariot set by the solar princess.
She decided to leave her home a little earlier than she needed, so she could enjoy a slow walk through Ponyville and enjoy the wintry scenery. She took on her red scarf and boots before she called for Spike to get him out of bed. It took a little while before she heard him dump onto the floor and making his way to the wooden door to their combined sleeping quarter.
“Isn’t this a little early?” He asked her while rubbing his eyes, remembering the time when Twilight wanted to help with the ‘winter wrap up’ where she had gotten out of bed and ran outside in the middle of the night hours before anypony else was even awake.
“Oh, I just wanted to take a small trip around ponyville, to kill time and enjoy the new snow!” Twilight cheerfully replied to her sheepish assistant.
Spike didn’t say anything as Twilight levitated him onto her back. She then walked outside and closed the door behind her. It was snowing outside, ever so softly a snowflake landed on Twilight’s nose, she giggled softly as the flake tickled her nose. Twilight set her course towards Rarity’s house, while enjoying December’s first snow falling down around her.
Twilight Sparkle thought back to this year’s ‘winter wrap up’ where she had been completely lost at first and felt really sad and lonely because she didn’t feel like she was fitting in with the villagers of Ponyville, at least not until she found her place as the organizer and had received the title of ‘all team organizer’. She was already looking forward to organize it all once more in the new year.
After a short and lovely trip; she and Spike now found themselves in front of Rarity’s home, it sounded as if quite a commotion was taking place inside. Twilight and Spike shared a short glance at each other, Spike just lifted his shoulders indicating that he too had no idea what was going on inside. So Twilight decided to open the door and walk inside.
All of her closest friends were there; Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, Rarity and of course Spike who now slid off her back, probably heading towards Rarity to drool all over her. She looked at her friends who seemed to be locked in a hearty discussion which seemed to have created the commotion one could hear from the outward the house. Twilight Sparkle just smiled at her sometimes silly friends as she walked over to join them, being the curious little mare that she is.
No one seemed to notice either her or Spike, even though she stood right next Applejack now. Celestia’s prized student just stood there for a moment thinking her friends would probably notice her, but after several minutes and nothing happening she grew restless and spoke up, making herself noticed. “Hi girls, whatcha doin’?” She asked, she hadn’t really been listening to whatever they were discussing with one another. She thought they would have noticed her right away, anyways.
Pinkie Pie looked at her quickly before she replied. “Hi Twilight.” She merely said as she looked back to the other mares talking. A few seconds passed before she looked back at Twilight again. “Hi Twilight!” She said like she had just noticed her for the very first time that day. “It’s good to see you! Aren’t you excited? I’ll never forget the Grand Galloping Gala where you acted like such a silly filly.” She said, probably more to herself than to Twilight.
Now Twilight was greeted by everypony, finally her presence to be known. “So what are we talking about?” She asked.
“Apparently Rarity couldn’t decide what kind of dresses to make us, so instead she made several dresses for each of us, but all of the different kinda dresses she made are made in series to match with each oth-” Applejack tried to explain as Rainbow Dash cut her short.
“Yeah! But I don’t like that red Xmasy stuff!” Dash said with a huff.
“You see?” Applejack told Twilight as she rolled her eyes at her mare friend.
“I don’t get it.” Twilight told them confused. “Then why doesn’t Rainbow Dash just use the one that isn’t all jolly red?” She asked.
“That’s just the thing!” Rarity informed her. “If one goes with the red then we all go with the red! Or else we won’t fit as a group! Helloo-oooo! It’s seasonal clothing?!” She told them all dramatically.
“Yep, Dash’s just being difficult… again.” Applejack added earning herself a glace from the rainbow pegasus.
Twilight thought for a moment before she came with her alternative. “Well since it is the Christmas spirit and we have been invited to a Christmas Eve party, wouldn’t it be more appropriate to follow the season’s style?” She asked her pegasus friend.
“Shush Twilight!” Rainbow Dash demanded. “Don’t fill their small pony heads with such logic nonsense.”
“I’ll go with the egghead on this one.” Applejack agreed with Twilight, earning narrow eyes from her. For some reason Applejack was always after poor Dashie and even if it was true or not Twilight didn’t like too much to be called an egghead.
“Fine, jeez!” Rainbow Dash replied with her best impression at Solid Serpent. After she had put on her dress she went for the closest mirror she could find, taking a closer look at herself. “So much red is definitely so not my thing…” Dash muttered.
“Stop being such a silly filly, that’s my job! Beside you look just oki doky loki! Almost like a Christmas sugarcane!” Pinkie Pie told her friend happily.
“I hope that we won’t make such a mess as we did the last time.” Applejack wryly added to the conversation. Twilight looked hurtful and shallow at this, but Pinkie Pie was fast to the rescue.
“Aw, don’t look so gloomy Twilight, Celestia said it was fun!” Pinkie Pie encouraged her nerdy friend but before Twilight could answer an abrupt knock was heard at the outer door.
“Oh, that’s probably Celestia’s sent carriage!” Twilight Sparkle exclaimed with a glee as she rushed towards the door but just as she had opened the door she was caught with surprise. Outside stood two dark figures, both tall and malice looking, they were both covered in dark purple armor and with batwings. They glanced down at Twilight with their wicked yellow eyes, earning a small gulp from the lavender mare. These ponies aren’t Celestia’s guards Twilight thought for herself, but before she could ask them one of them spoke up.
“We’re here to escort the bearers of the elements and their dragon associate to the celestial Xmas party.” One of Luna’s personal guards told Twilight. “So if you would all be so kind and come with us, so we may complete our task.” He then added with a small bow and a hoof pointing towards their chariot.
“How come Celestia’s guards didn’t come to pick us up?” Twilight asked the two intimidating stallions. The batpony didn’t answer, he just looked towards the other stallion as if he sought guidance from the other as to answer her question or not.
“We were out on an errand and were told to bring you with us on our return to the royal castle.” The other nightmarish batpony told her simply, not explaining anything further.
Twilight not wanting to push her luck simply turned around and called for the others, telling them that their escort had come a little early and that it was time to leave for the party.
The other mares walked cautious past the two tall stallions, as they left Rarity’s house. Not saying a word as they passed the two of them, well besides a sudden pegasus, which was quite unexpected.
“Hello sirs.” Flutteryshy gently greeted the two scary looking ponies as she walked pass them, giving them a polite nod. She could swear she almost got a smile in return from the two of them.
Now they were all sitting comfortably but maybe a bit too tight in Luna’s royal chariot, not really being designed to hold so many ponies at once. All of them now looking forward, staring at the well-shaped buttocks of the first batpony ‘the benefit of being a princess’ one might assume. They all blushed a little at the sight, probably seeing more than one should.
“They sure stay in shape.” Rarity thoughtlessly said out loud earning them all a death glace from the batpony just in front of them, who’s behind most of them were all drooling over. In her dumbfoundedness Rarity couldn’t help but to simply wave a hoof to him while trying to give him an honest harmless smile, at which he just turned around again. Luna’s guards sure weren’t like Celestia’s, they would not even have flinched, but these batponies take hay from nopony.
Soon they found themselves flying through the darkening sky over the clouds. It was a sight to behold, Celestia’s sun could clearly be seen making its descent behind the cover of Equestria, slowly making room for the night with the moon and the astonishing constellations.
By the time they could see the majestic tall towers of the celestial castle. The sun had disappeared and thus the moon was slowly ascending, so far only showing half of itself. As they finally landed on the ground and arrived at the royal castle, Twilight’s little pony heart was burning with excitement. She and her friends thanked Luna’s two guards before they quickly made their way through the royal gardens to the entrance of the castle itself.
At the sight of the castle Rarity froze at the spot, remembering her encounter with the noble self-obsessed jerk prince Blueblood, surely he would also attend this party, which made her shivering for a moment. She shaked her head, clearing it of those unpleasant thoughts of the jackass and hurried up to her friends who had gotten ahead of her.
There were a lot of ponies all over the place, the gardens seemed almost filled with every kind of pony from every kind of the social ladder, royals as well as commoners. There were a lot of pretty decorated Christmas trees around as well, all with fine glowing stars at the top. Twilight noticed that they were made of magic which must have been why they had that extra glow to them.
They all made it inside the castle before they decided to split up for a moment to greet some of the other ponies they knew before they would get back together and enjoy Christmas Eve in the company of those they cherished the most.
Twilight of course went for the big hall where she knew Celestia would be greeting her many guests, and true enough there she was, at the top of the tall staircase overlooking the entire hall, greeting a long line of all kind of pony folk. Twilight thought for a bit, the right thing to do would probably get into the line and wait to get her turn, but that would take forever! Then suddenly she heard Celestia’s voice calling for her to join her. Twilight was a little unsure how to feel about this, she was clearly abusing her bond with Celestia, it’s not like she was more important than any of the others that sought her company, but right now she put those thought aside as she jumped up the mighty stairs getting many unpleasant glances by the many ponies she skipped past.
“Hello Twilight Sparkle, my faithful student.” Her mentor said softly as Twilight reached her, the two of them then shared a deep embrace, earning Twilight even further dislike from the nearby crowd.
“I’ve missed you Celestia.” Twilight told the solar princess as she nuzzled her, until she suddenly thought of something of equal impermanence. “Where is Luna?” She asked.
Celestia looked up breaking the contact as she looked over the halls. “Oh, she’s around… somewhere… mingling in the crowd, which is kind of odd knowing she isn’t very... you know, social.” The princess told her star student with a smile and a thoughtful expression. Maybe she was out there planning to pull a prank on somepony, Celestia thought for herself.
“I guess I’ll go find her then, I don’t want to take all of your time when so many else want to have a word with you.” Twilight said honestly but also with a sudden hint of regret.
“Sorry Twilight, I’ll see if I can make better time for you sometime so we can… what you call it these days ‘hang-out’?” She asked with a bit of a frown.
Twilight giggled at this. “Yes of course your highness! I’ll see you later!” She replied with glee, before she jumped down the stairs, now in search of the moon goddess. Twilight wandered around in the great hall where most of the visitors were in search of Luna, until Celestia’s prized student suddenly walked into somepony else, much to her surprise it was nopony else than Luna herself.
”Oh, hello there princess, I didn’t se-” Was all she got to say before the lunar princess planted a pair of soft lips on her mouth; cutting her speech a little short. At first the lavender mare was surprised and quite frankly also physically stunned by the unsuspected and sudden intimate forwardness shown by one of the celestial sisters, but she soon found herself lost in the affection she was given. They both closed their eyes at the contact and as if on reaction they both drifting off into the moment humming slightly.
If the kissing had just ended there it probably wouldn’t have created such a commotion and the few ponies that actually noticed would probably just think it was pretty cute and then move on. But what happened from there on; was a completely different story. The initial kiss was short and soft but as the two departed from their little blissful event they would soon find themselves gazing deeply into each other’s eyes. Luna was very proud of herself, she had managed to catch Twilight under her mistletoe dangling from the tip of her horn and did the traditional gesture, she had been waiting patiently ever since she saw Twilight leaving Celestia’s side for the right moment to strike.
Luna wanted to say her Christmas greeting, but no words came from her. What was supposed to be an innocent and traditionally little meaningless kiss; had suddenly turned into something else, something Luna couldn’t quite put her hoofs on, but her thoughts dangled behind her as she lost herself into those magical purple eyes and before she knew of it, she found herself engaged in yet another heart rhythm altering, soul shaking kiss. This time the lunar princess was the one in shock and now it was Twilight, who was the aggressor pressing forward, which resulted in sharing yet another blissful moment.
Luna much to her own surprise let out a soft moan as Twilight had forced the princess of the moon into their second kiss. This wasn’t according to traditions Luna pondered for a moment. Shouldn’t it be only a single kiss when one was caught under a mistletoe? But in truth she didn’t really feel like complaining as she let herself slide into the lovely feeling. Enjoying the tremendous gesture delightedly! Probably a lot more than she was supposed to, but right now nothing else mattered to Luna - this was simply too good for her not to enjoy! No matter what others might think of it, but such trivial thoughts as the concern of others were pushed aside as she lost herself into the moment.
They both simultaneously lifted their right hind leg from the white marble floor that covered most of the castle as they continued their transgression. Luna had grown bolder and soon found her tongue asking Twilight for permission to entrance, which she seemed more than happy to allow. Twilight’s mouth parted slightly without their lips breaking contact, just barely making enough space for Luna to enter her mouth, but she in turn found herself enter Luna’s mouth like it was the common thing to do, which it probably also was.
The two of them were wobbling a little bit back and forth as their tongues fought each other for dominance, unseen by the ever growing stares of the other guests at the grand Christmas party, all while the two of them were moaning and purring lowly.
As their mouths parted for the second time that evening a thick string of drool was hanging between them and as they once again opened their eyes and once again found themselves starting at each other’s eyes, now sharing a shy smile and a visible blush on both of them.
“My bedchambers, now.” Luna told Celestia’s faithful student teasing- and suggestively.
“After you, your highness.” Twilight said with a low bow and a giggle.
And with that Luna warped one of her wings around the lavender unicorn before the two of them left the great hall and the many stunned ponies including the solar princess whose jaw was now located on the floor, behind. All the time unknown to Twilight that Luna had the prettiest little mistletoe that she herself had spent all of Christmas’s morning to find in the forest just for her little saviour; Twilight Sparkle.
Twilight couldn’t help but smile brightly while she thought that her wish had been fulfilled, the next year would be even greater than this one, she just knew it!
Also she didn’t get to see her friends for the rest of the day, but that was okay. They had all walked in and seen the same as pretty much everypony else had.
You have been abstained from my wrath mortal...
TwiLuna gets auto 5 star
im jealous I want luna
Christmas gift appreciated.
You should write a new years sequel and merry Christmas to you to
For someone who's dyslexic first language isn't English you have written a nice little story. There are plenty of mistakes but they didn't murder the flow of the story that much so they can probably be forgiven
72772 Eyup!
72789Hold up I've just spoted the incomplete tag there will be more yay
Heh, I'm betting that Luna got her wish just as much as Twilight did.
if you ever do a second chapter to this fic I'd love to see it. Not just for the Twilight Luna ship but also to see the fallout of the two of them becoming a couple. I don't know who'll have more of a feild day with it Twilight's friends or the Press.
That was pretty nice
It's a quaint little story to get into the spirit in the holidays. Little grammatical errors aside, the story was pretty good
A second chapter would be interesting, especially to see her friends reactions to that little 'incident'.
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Teeh Hee.
This is cute
Cheers
~iraqlobstah
I read this and then I was like da fuck>? and then i was like YES HOH MY GOD!
Well, as long as the meaning is clear, I don't give a *£2% about spelling errors, punctuation or other such things.
I rate based on how good I think the actual storry is (mostly objective), and fave depending on my personal opinion of the storry (like a lot/like a little).
Good story, by the way. 4 + fave (now that I AM commenting, I might as welladd this)
(note to self; stop thinking this much when writing comments - the 2'nd time a 10 minute track ends, just round up and press "add comment" - Don't continue thinking till it ends for a 3'rd time)
72972 and then you fainted, so I yelled, "CALL 911!"
Also, 'twas a very good short-story! I loved the fact that English is your second language AND your dislexic, but still wrote a good ship-fic!
This was indeed a very nic 'fic. I could see some errors where it's clear that Enlgish is your second language, but a single re-read fixes it nicely.
Like how you meantion 'seasoning cloth', but you really mean 'seasonal cothing'.
Also there was mention the 'costume to kiss' when you meant 'custom to kiss'.
Still, very nice and it flows well. Kudos to you!
Technically, this should be "Hearth's Warming Eve"...but, all the same, very cute! Despite all the errors, it was a nice little story to get in the spirit of the holidays. Nice job.
Twiluna is best ship. Seriously, a nice story you got here. Waiting impatiently for the next chapter.
For a non-native English speaker with dyslexia, you've written something that's quite good. A few errors, but it's easy to tell what you meant by context. Characterisation feels pretty spot on for the most part.
Maybe use the indent thing, though? Guess that's jst a personal qualm.
It was definitely a solid concept, and a pretty good execution. Personally, I'd suggest for the future that you either find a co-writer, or an editor. That way, you can bring the idea more fully into being, rather than leaving it as-is. You did a fantastic effort, considering the odds you were working against.
I loved it. glad I read.
If this is a finished story, consider changing the tag from 'Incomplete' to 'Complete'.
This was a great little story and I was drawn in for the duration, it felt a little fast though but that's a minor complaint and not something to be overly worried about.
There were a few little mistakes I noticed, but few indeed compared to some actual English writers who don't have any learning impediments like Dyslexia. So be happy/proud about that.
4 stars from me. Nice concept, done in a nice way, but could be better as most stories tend to.
Have a good Christmas!
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I liked it. It was romantic and humorous. Your self critique is pretty good, so you know what to work on. On the other hoof you deserve credit for comming up with a new and somewhat creative royal party. Jeg er desuden også glad for at måde andere danske bronyer, vi er alt for få.
me want more sexyness
I have to say, I'm impressed. The mechanical and/or spelling errors, while fairly common, don't detract from the story. The plot was amusing and intriguing, if a little too fast and somewhat vague and/or forced in parts (especially at the end when you tell the reader why Luna kissed Twi).
Overall, it was an enjoyable and worthwhile read, easily a 4.5 star story. Good job!
72772 Can never be enough of that.
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I liked the reference to this CLEARLY VISIBLE PICTURE SHOWN ABOVE.
So much fun! Gotta say this is an amazing TwiLuna ship! I'd sail on this boat any day.
Hello everyone,
First off I would like to ‘announce’ that I’m working on a second chapter of this story (which will cover New Year’s Eve), but I’ll take me some time finish as I have a report to finish by Tuesday for my exam, so I won’t be able to focus much on this story before I’m done with that (but I have already taken down notes and some dialog).
I must say that I’m really surprised that this has gotten so much… ehm… hype? I was like: “What the deuce?!” I had nothing planned for this, I was just sitting around one evening and I thought to myself it could be a cute little story to write that Luna somehow pull a little innocent prank on Twilight by kissing her under a mistletoe and it was pretty much a giveaway that they were suppose to take it a little further than just a little tradition Xmas kiss. So I wrote the kissing scene first (or at least most of it) and then I was like: “OMG! Who the hell wants to read this shit without at least some sort of story leading up to it?!” And that was when an evening project turned into a 5 day project… my brain was completely blank from any sort of ideas >_<
Normally when I write a story I have had several ideas and written some footnotes for the overall progress of the story, but I had nothing of the sort on this particular story, which is why (like some said) it felt rushed, because in all truth it was. The story was never suppose to be very deep nor very interesting, it was just suppose to be one of this “Aw, that’s cute <3” stories and nothing more. And now that I look over my notes for chapter two I can see its going to take a little more serious tune/tone. As much as I love to write stories about ponies/people being prejudiced this was just never the intent with this story as I wanted to make it all joy joy like, all fun and no pain. So yeah, my upcoming chapter probably won’t feel like it is a part of this story because it’ll be so much different. But I’ll try my best to keep the feeling (but I’ll probably fail horribly!). I also noticed someone suggesting making a new year sequel of this, but I always found it annoying when people write sequels, I’m not sure why really, I don’t mind when movies and books gets a sequel (or a prequel for that matter, as long as it doesn’t suck as bad as the prequel for ‘The Thing’ which was one of the greatest movies ever made!) but I’ve never seemed to like the idea of sequels for fanfictions… can’t say why really… anyway moving on before I start to confuse myself :D
But wow, I had no idea this story would get so many comments, I had expected like 200 people to read it and then get like 4-6 comments, so I’m sorry that I haven’t gotten around to reply everyone as much as I would love to do so, your comments are always appreciated! <3 And now that so many have read it and commented on it I feel embarrassed about how poorly the story really is :( I could have made it a lot better if I had spent the time on it instead of just wanting to finish it… oh well, I’ll go finish chapter two and hopefully everyone will be happy with that and then I can go back to my other stories and hopefully have learned something from this one.
I was happy that I had finally finished this and thought to myself: “Never again will I write a story with no pre-planned plot!” And then you people demand a second chapter?! *sigh* You guys made me feel like I should rewrite all of chapter one and improve it, both so it does chapter two more justice and so it won’t feel as rushed now that I’ll put time into a second chapter (just for you guys!).
I also noticed someone told me that I a little to forcefully explain what was going on at the end, I too thought this when I wrote the story, perhaps I should change that… I dunno… to be honest I really didn’t want to do anything special with this story, I just wanted to make a little cute one-shot with not too much thought to it ;_; curse you people!
But nonetheless, thanks everyone for reading and for all those wonderful comments! <3 I hope that I’ll be able to do If someone ever said that the masses cannot move the heart of one man: Then they were lying! Filthy liars! For I have been moved! xD
PS. I want an honest answer to something that I need you guys to help me with:
In the first chapter I sort of hinted at a relationship between Luna’s guards. Would you rather have that I should delete that from chapter one and then not having any of it in chapter two? If no one replies I’ll delete it from chapter one as it will make it easier for me to write chapter two (beside it is a Luna slash Twilight fic after all). But like said I’ll have to write a report in next 2 days (from when posting this), so you can give it some thought before I change anything :)
Oh, I totally forgot to mention something!
My intent with telling everyone that I’m dyslexic and English is my second language, was never my intent to gain peoples pity, I merely wanted to inform everyone of this so those people that can’t live with poor spelling and bad grammas to simply spare them a heart attack :D
But still, thanks for your kind words! It is a bother to have a limited knowledge of the English language and it does suck to be dyslexic it does make things harder but not impossible! And I also want to prove that you can still become a writer even if you stand against such odds! But like someone said I’ll probably need an editor of some sort xD Any volunteers? :3
Fasaloft that picture is on the book flutterheart and flutterheart diaries
The report is done and has been turned in! So now I'm off to enjoy the holidays and write some juicy stuff xD
So, they have JESUS Christ in equestria. are they praying for his forgivence! LOLOLOLOLOO is celestia worshippin GOD OLOLOLOLO! get it? shippinn! ooh hohohhooo
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Gonna upload the last chapter sometime today :3
Well, that escalated quickly.
I just love these sort of "most likely unrealistic chain of events ever" stories with all the fluffy nonsense.
so stinkin CUTE
Rotflmao
10/10, would read again
This was so adorable!!
I loved how everyone saw it and they didn't give two shits! hmmmm... I wonder what what they did in Luna's royal chamber...
You have earned a favorite for making this adorable fic and for fully pulling me into this ship
That was so random for me. I mean it was still adorably cute but it I wasn't expecting this.