No one is brought into this world equal, and it's made even harder for Dylan as he's thrust into a world not his own. But he will become the pillar this place needs, because that's what legends are known for, and he will be Equestria's newest legend!
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Tell me who they are and I'll kick their asses for you! Within reason because if I have to mapquest you, you live too far.
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I truly feel honoured that you would go to such lengths for one such as me. But the best thing you can do is treat others like they are apart of this great family that brings people together like no other community can. That is why I love making this story. For everyone of here to enjoy and share with others bringing even more people together creating this bond that will last beyond our own years. I think of you all as my own family, but I wish to see others act the same way. That is my dream.
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I'm trying with my story as well.
In the name of the Assassin brotherhood, I would gladly sink my blades into all that oppose you, and any other member of our great community.
we got you man and we will paint the walls with there blood
Lovin the story dude :D
:Facehoof: Ok this story is horribly written. I've tried giving it a chance but it's impossible. The grammar leaves something to be desired. More importantly though is how nonsensical it is.
The quoted text above is just one of many examples I could use. Let's set aside the dream sequence which appeared to be from the POV of Dylan as a young boy (like not even a teenager young) that was said to be shortly before his dad disappeared, even though later you find out Dylan was 15 when Ken disappeared. That's confusing enough. But then there's stuff like his dad's eyes widening in surprise when Dylan says it's only been 3 yrs since Ken disappeared. I mean it's not surprising in the least since it's OBVIOUS that time must run differently than it does Earth. Ken said it'd been 26 years since he arrived, yet his son doesn't look to be 26 years older. It's safe to assume that Dylan looked no more than 5 or 6 years older most likely. So there's no way Ken was surprised enough for his eyes to 'widen with surprise'. Especially considering how Ken has gotten back-to-back surprises. From finding the truck and being told a few times that somepony who looked like him only younger and then hearing Dylan's voice and finally seeing him.
I could point out many many more of this type of convoluted narrative, but I've already spent more time writing this comment than it took to read these first 7 chapters.