Before I Read this, is it DBZ based

This is pretty cool

Now we wait

So what do you guys think of the new cover picture?

Quotes need to have a double spacing between two speakers as to not confuse the readers. The way you wrote the dialogue made it look like it was only Dylan or Redheart speaking. It needs to be spaced out like this example below:

"(Dylan's quote.)"

"(Redheart's quote.)"

Because of this issue, it makes it hard to continue reading this. No offense intended, just pointing out a few flaws even if this is your first story. For now, this story will be on hold until some editing is done. Just let me know on my user page when you do.