A new fantastic chapter dude! Can't wait to see what happens in the battle, and when twilight and the girls show up when thier not supposed to follow him. Xd
an epic story so far man. It would be cool (but not really original) if you'll give Dan a saw cleaver from bloodborn as a melee weapon, but it's your story, your rules. Just giving food for thought.
So, seeing as the bandana and the goggles set off som kind of warning bells in Dans mind, are there any other enchantments on these items that Twilight didn't tell him about? Like the goggles having some kind of "remote camera" enchantment that allows her and the girls to see what the goggles "see"?
8638373 Really? They do? Seemed like a character with good story potential to me, that’s why I added him in this chapter. Anyway I welcome the pm, I want my chapters as understandable as possible after all.
Another excellent addition to the story. Keep it up!
A new fantastic chapter dude!
Can't wait to see what happens in the battle, and when twilight and the girls show up when thier not supposed to follow him. Xd
an epic story so far man. It would be cool (but not really original) if you'll give Dan a saw cleaver from bloodborn as a melee weapon, but it's your story, your rules. Just giving food for thought.
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I do have Wish to give him a melee Weapon since it’s smart to have one lol
great chapter! sad that its over
So, seeing as the bandana and the goggles set off som kind of warning bells in Dans mind, are there any other enchantments on these items that Twilight didn't tell him about?
Like the goggles having some kind of "remote camera" enchantment that allows her and the girls to see what the goggles "see"?
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They wouldn’t do that..... ..... ...... Riiiiight?
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Right... of course. Twilight would never do something like this . Now I fell silly for even thinking such a thing.
I have a lot of edits if you want me to PM them to you. I'd just leave them down here, but the comment is pretty huge.
Love the chapter. Glad we got to see Steven Magnet. Some stories gloss over him.
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Really? They do? Seemed like a character with good story potential to me, that’s why I added him in this chapter. Anyway I welcome the pm, I want my chapters as understandable as possible after all.