Oooooo... I have to say that, for a chapter focused around a site user (apparently), this was really quite good. I was a bit leery when this started out, but you kept it very much to the quality showcased in the first chapter. So, I did very much like.
My one complaint would be that there wasn't much space devoted to the gooey aftermath of some acts. For instance, after Shining's and Spike's first round with Ranko, which would likely have ended in a wonderful mess, there was pretty much nothing; the story just moved on.
I might have succumbed to the beginning writer's (this is my first clop story) overambition in putting in everything all at once, leading to some things feeling rushed. Something to consider for future clop projects, I suppose. Still, in general I think this chapter was very good
Glad to see this story finally published. Before I forget, I was supposed to give you a message on behalf of my avatar:
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Glad she liked it! She was a joy to work with
Thank you what a way to start the day before work lol
Too much Unf? There is no such thing as too much Unf.
I wonder what's gonna happen next.
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Oooooo... I have to say that, for a chapter focused around a site user (apparently), this was really quite good. I was a bit leery when this started out, but you kept it very much to the quality showcased in the first chapter. So, I did very much like.
My one complaint would be that there wasn't much space devoted to the gooey aftermath of some acts. For instance, after Shining's and Spike's first round with Ranko, which would likely have ended in a wonderful mess, there was pretty much nothing; the story just moved on.
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Thanks.
I might have succumbed to the beginning writer's (this is my first clop story) overambition in putting in everything all at once, leading to some things feeling rushed. Something to consider for future clop projects, I suppose. Still, in general I think this chapter was very good
plz continue! this story is great!
Ranko??
Lovely name.
Rango's sister. Jango's cousine.