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You figure a guy.... or guys .... whos used to dealing with spies traitors and betrayal or from a military standpoint would be the first guy to notice a guard paying to much attention to whats being said and not doing his job. Drop and give me 100 push ups. Chrysalis is gonna be having wet dreams when she hears how ruthless he can be. His choice to just eradicate the 3 races and be done with them. Plus disembowling even pregnant women. Plus hes an alicorn male. Think of the changlings she could make with that. To bad she pretty much personifies everything he hates .... deceit lies manipulation... shes pretty much the pony devil. An incompetent one but what can you do.
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True that I'm more curious though on how Rising is gonna react if/when he and Chrysalis come face to face but I know the end result will be with blood.
Damn...you write such an enthralling story that I didn't notice I'd run out of chapters.
By the way, bravo on how you handled the ponification. Even though I suspected an alicorn to appear, you did it tastefully and tactfully. It wasn't shoved down our throats unlike other stories but persuaded to us with thoughtfully identified reasoning. Superb job 👏.
That's all I can think of for now. Thank you for the entertainment. I wait with bated breath for the next chapter release.
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Thank you very much! I've been hoping that what I did and made was a much better thought out way of doing these three tropes, rather than the usual expectations on how everyone considers HiEs, ponyfications and alicorn OCs. Its just a pity that they're always left in bad taste.
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I find that a lot of fans that first started watching after season 3 wants to be an alicorn because let's be honest, they're pretty cool. It led to a lot of brand new authors trying to write their first stories with alicorn OC's which, because they so new to writing, that it's put a lot of negative views toward the concept in general. Then there were people that could write pretty well but weren't all that unbiased when it came to their alicorn OC when writing them. So many gary and Mary sues. Even when they're backgrounds were contrived or unreasonable. The concept can be done well, but it takes time and/or lots of character development to make an alicorn a believable character. You've done this in a slightly different way to that by using the mind hive and his exceptionally well written background.
Looking at this I noticed I kind of started to rant so I'm just going to cut it short here with this. Keep doing what you're doing. You write incredibly well and think your writing through more than most I've read from on this site.
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Your reply might have been a rant but its a rather welcoming rant nonetheless, and it points out how much that fanfiction depends upon the writers themselves, not just getting readers and likes.
Way to destroy any semblance of a normal conversation and make yourself look like a psychopath. I'm seriously flabbergasted at how the other characters still consider him tolerable after that remark.
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Yeah I don't have much defense for it, either.
Probably thought it was good enough at the time, but its just another thing to add to the "rewrite" pile.