You have my attention and endorsement, but I will be extremely disappointed if someone doesn't get beaten down with a thousand fists in the span of a few moments.
7930628 Manifestation of one's soul and mental prowess. Not everyone has the capability to harness both, so only the ones capable of having one can see them (or they can be gotten through other means, such as inheriting a fraction of someone's soul or through strange artifacts. No, they are NOT magic).
7930628 Most are unique in their own method of having powers, such as being made of sand, turning into a giant boat, existing only in dreams, there's one that's literally just a gun, plant vines, a fly, while specific types share similarities like fighting-types that have strong, fast punches, but little range (like the main character's [Stand]). There's one in Jojo where the user died and it's [Stand] used the corpse to fertilize a plant which it possessed.
I like it so far but theres a few problems i feel i need to point out. The first is that he feels a bit Garry Stewey but im not quite shure yet. The second is that i hardly know anything about this guy and im 5 chapters in...I have all these questions like was Celley a good mother growing up?,what was the orphanage like?,Whats with the rivalry between him and twi?,and most importantly how in the sam hell did he learn to use his stand? Was it from celestia? Another stand user? Is he self taught? I HAVE SO MANY QUESTIONS MAN!
Other than that the fight scenes are good and the conversations flow well even if they are a bit dry at times. All in all i have to say for some random HIE i got to say this is high quality for what it is especaly when you only have 2 or 3 story's worth of experience under youre belt.
So i hope to see more of this and i hope my nitpicking has helped in some way! Good luck and stand proud
Do not forget that [Stands] can be also be named through musical references or by symbolic means. Also one can perceive or receive [Stands] if they are spiritually enlightened,( though the clarity of which may vary), through birth, mystical objects of high spirtual worth, or of a desperate personal need as well.
So I bet Zecora, for instance would be able to see a [Stand], though weather or not she could have remains to be seen. Regardless [Stand] users tend attract [Stand] users. Hopefully no one made any meteor carved arrows or stone masks in the distant past. Unless you plan on using Princess Amore shattered Crystalized remains as a Holy Corpse Parts substitute. Sombra did scatter her remains in far across the country, in Fiendship is Magic #1. That could work in making more [Stands]. The other option is the Tree of Mark of itself. Also Celestia would make a great Hamon user if she was taught it. If Luna [Stand] were ever to evolve it should be the Tantabus. It is a part of her after all.
It seems to me that Platinum Bluetstar is a mixture of Part 2's Joeseph Joestar demeanor, Part 3 DIO's looks and Stand, and the ferocity and coolness of Part 3's Jotaro's Kujo. Plus Part 4's Josuke sincerity.
Is his [The World] based on DIO's, Alternate Diego's, or Over Heaven DIO's? Or an original Mish mash? Hopefully not too similar or over powered. I would like him to be unique enough on his own.
Finally would the Mane 6 gaining their Elements of Harmony cause them to be able to partially see [Stands] now?
... Alright, gimme a moment to decide which Joseph Joestar line to use here... Ah, screw it, I'll use 'em all. OOOH NOOO! OH MY GOOOOOOOOOD! HOOOOOOOOLY SHIIIIIIIIT! SONUVABIIIIIIITCH! There we go, got it outta my system.
Wait. what!? So Plat's pretty much Dio if he was born into the Joestars instead of the Brandos. I'm guessing [The World] here has aspects of his namesake and Star Platinum. I would be VERY surprised if Crazy Diamond or at least his counterpart was a med student.
WAMUU!!!!
You have my attention and endorsement, but I will be extremely disappointed if someone doesn't get beaten down with a thousand fists in the span of a few moments.
Also:
*spittake* Oh shit!
good job
Whats a stand?
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Manifestation of one's soul and mental prowess. Not everyone has the capability to harness both, so only the ones capable of having one can see them (or they can be gotten through other means, such as inheriting a fraction of someone's soul or through strange artifacts. No, they are NOT magic).
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Most are unique in their own method of having powers, such as being made of sand, turning into a giant boat, existing only in dreams, there's one that's literally just a gun, plant vines, a fly, while specific types share similarities like fighting-types that have strong, fast punches, but little range (like the main character's [Stand]). There's one in Jojo where the user died and it's [Stand] used the corpse to fertilize a plant which it possessed.
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Yeah, that was about my reaction to that name.
I like it so far but theres a few problems i feel i need to point out. The first is that he feels a bit Garry Stewey but im not quite shure yet. The second is that i hardly know anything about this guy and im 5 chapters in...I have all these questions like was Celley a good mother growing up?,what was the orphanage like?,Whats with the rivalry between him and twi?,and most importantly how in the sam hell did he learn to use his stand?
Was it from celestia? Another stand user? Is he self taught? I HAVE SO MANY QUESTIONS MAN!
Other than that the fight scenes are good and the conversations flow well even if they are a bit dry at times. All in all i have to say for some random HIE i got to say this is high quality for what it is especaly when you only have 2 or 3 story's worth of experience under youre belt.
So i hope to see more of this and i hope my nitpicking has helped in some way!
Good luck and stand proud
Do not forget that [Stands] can be also be named through musical references or by symbolic means. Also one can perceive or receive [Stands] if they are spiritually enlightened,( though the clarity of which may vary), through birth, mystical objects of high spirtual worth, or of a desperate personal need as well.
So I bet Zecora, for instance would be able to see a [Stand], though weather or not she could have remains to be seen. Regardless [Stand] users tend attract [Stand] users. Hopefully no one made any meteor carved arrows or stone masks in the distant past. Unless you plan on using Princess Amore shattered Crystalized remains as a Holy Corpse Parts substitute. Sombra did scatter her remains in far across the country, in Fiendship is Magic #1. That could work in making more [Stands]. The other option is the Tree of Mark of itself. Also Celestia would make a great Hamon user if she was taught it. If Luna [Stand] were ever to evolve it should be the Tantabus. It is a part of her after all.
It seems to me that Platinum Bluetstar is a mixture of Part 2's Joeseph Joestar demeanor, Part 3 DIO's looks and Stand, and the ferocity and coolness of Part 3's Jotaro's Kujo. Plus Part 4's Josuke sincerity.
Is his [The World] based on DIO's, Alternate Diego's, or Over Heaven DIO's? Or an original Mish mash? Hopefully not too similar or over powered. I would like him to be unique enough on his own.
Finally would the Mane 6 gaining their Elements of Harmony cause them to be able to partially see [Stands] now?
cant wait for more :)
So pretty much AU Dio in Equestria.
This is a fantastic story so far. One I'm hyped to keep reading in future updates.
Oh no.
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... Alright, gimme a moment to decide which Joseph Joestar line to use here...
Ah, screw it, I'll use 'em all.
OOOH NOOO! OH MY GOOOOOOOOOD! HOOOOOOOOLY SHIIIIIIIIT! SONUVABIIIIIIITCH!
There we go, got it outta my system.
bravo good sir, Can't wait for more! PRAISE THE SUN!
yare yare daze.....blueblood's going to be this stories dio..... i can feel it in mah bones
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How can he be Dio if there's already someone with [The World]?
No, Blueblood's not the Blueblood you think you know.
Wait. what!? So Plat's pretty much Dio if he was born into the Joestars instead of the Brandos. I'm guessing [The World] here has aspects of his namesake and Star Platinum. I would be VERY surprised if Crazy Diamond or at least his counterpart was a med student.