Pretty good start buddy. Hope you continue it soon.

7747022
Thank you

Yes

More. Immediately.

Please. . . .

7747318 "liberal left-wing bullshit".

Yes, because no child in America has ever been killed with a gun.

If you'll excuse me, I rolled my eyes so hard they're now under the couch and I need to get them back.

"You're done with your job and nothing shall scare you unless I'm here."

I think you mean "when". Because it sound's like when she is not there, he cant be scared.

I like it though I do not see why everyone has to hate on Trump so much yes he is president well not yet but we none of us act this way when Obama was elected. Would you all have rather we elected someone who secretly works as a spy for the Russians or Chinese because quite frankly I could've cared less who became president because politics these days disgusts me I would've voted for the reincarnation of Franklin D Roosevelt

Hmm this kinda feels like a start to a random harem anime.....not that I'm complaining

Oboy. Prepar for the shit storm thats coming.
you hade to write Trump oboy.

7747726 Oh deal with it would you rather have had a spy who works for the Chinese or Russian to be elected instead

7747792 dont worry i like Trump.
Murica fuck yea!

This is awesome! I can't wait till the next chapter

7747810 okay personally I would have vote for the reincarnation of Franklin D Roosevelt

7747819 Abraham Lincoln.

I was enjoying reading it, and even added it to my tracking list after the first few minutes of reading.

But once you started shit-talking Trump, I removed it. Why'd you have to bring politics into this?

7747888
Well, Celestia doesn't know much about Earth, so why not. Sorry if it pissed some people off.

7747899
Yeah still you should edit that out.
Politics should be kept out it just gonna spark hate.

7747906

You're right. Will edit that out

7747888

Too be nice, I'd edited it out

7748013
Sorry

The kids were all so polite

These kids here are so polite

Wow! We got a bad ass over there.... the scene on my mine rolled more or less like that

"You wanna catch it?"

"That's what the cake is for."

"Are you out of your mind?" she said, giving the man on the other side of the counter a disbelief look and a little bit of fear too.

"Maybe i am"

I smiled and make my way out of the store.

"You're quite popular in the media lately and I wanted to know if this 'creature' is real. They say you like cake, so I got myself a cake to lure you."

Celestia expression:s2.quickmeme.com/img/ff/ff4b2bc99f8eb13890b3198e912736a4313b3cad2080032d31dc4d0f43351820.jpg

"You are such a gentleman," she said with a smile, "where is it, by chance?"

GentleMAN? She already is knows how to speak OUR english fluently? Oo
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Aside from that......good reading....keep looking foward to see more of them....just though that things are a bit rushed in the begining. but thumbs up! ^^b

This sounds more like a longer story rather that only have one or two chapters.

Celestia here is profoundly dumb. And don't Equestrian cities like Manehattan have their own Police Force? Vinyl Discs are also part of Equestrian Technology so concluding that Blu-Ray Disks are something like that wouldn't have been that much of a stretch.

Wouldn't Celestia worry about her country and her family first once she realizes that she is stuck in another world? You know, let the possible consequences of her being gone really start to sink in before she starts crying.

Also, as a sorceress with centuries of experience, wouldn't she know about the existence of other worlds, at least in theory?

7750741

Sorry if it irritates you and as for other worlds, Twiligt will have the knowledge for that

7750771 Don't get me wrong on a basic level the idea and the writing is excellent. But characterization wise it needed work with Celestia. I do apologize for the harshness though, I mean no I'll intent.

7750979
No prob. It's nice to get some advice from people

That's some great grade math right there mate

A customer buys one chocolate cake for his own reasons in the bakery. The cake costs $15.31.
If the customer hands to a vendor sixteen dollars in cash, what change should a vendor give back to a customer?
a) $0.31
b) $1.00
c) $0.59
d) Because the customer was bound to get things money can't buy, he should have paid with MasterCard™

can't wait what he and celastia have in store?

Image atoms in a balloon now shrink the balloon to the size of my brain and all the atoms in it plus the ones in the balloon. MIND STILL PROCESS THE INFO MIND OVERLOAD!!!!!!

" All in all it's just another prick in the law ."

That Pink Floyd reference to Another Brick in the Wall. I LOVE IT!

I got very boring of waiting. As I look over to my clock, it said 10:25 PM. I let out a sigh and scratched the back of my head.

I got very boring of waiting.