Rarity's always prided herself on her generosity. Then she discovers something that both she, and her friends, have been neglecting: their sexuality. Rarity seeks to remedy that. How else could she consider herself 'generous'?
This was the last thing I ever expected to see in my notifications.
Ill just squeeze right outta here.. Pardon me, excuse me... yes thank you. *crowd watches me as I awkwardly leave the room, squeezing through everyone.* Yes thank you, goodbye. Pardon me, yes thank you... Excuse me.
(I'm not saying I don't like the story, I bet its interesting.... But I have.... read... I guess you could say... I have read Fifty Shades of Grey... Not a big fan.)
7514762 Can't really blame the thought, I'm also very harsh on my own work. I can never be satisfied. Pretty sure any artist of any kind feels the same.
It's kinda good, since it leads to major improvements in ones work.
7514762 i kinda wonder at this point, if all good writers hate their own work and think it's terrible and people are just playing a really elaborate joke on them
Comment posted by SNUFFLEZZ deleted Aug 28th, 2016
7515455 is that something you looked up specifically for the use of it there or is it something you already knew? regardless, new words are worderific.
7515671 pneumonoultramicroscopicsilicovolcanoconiosis, essentially it is referring to a disease caused by breathing in silica dust. is this your favorite?
I think this is awesome, it so well...written! i mean it, this story is well done, it's touching and how everyone reacts, talks or expresses themsevles, wow! This is a very well written Lemons tory, and love how Rarity wants to help her friends and maybe form greator bonds with them. I love to see Rarity do them all, one by one and all together later, if possible.
Interesting. I wouldn't be too disheartened by the downvotes. I strongly suspect that 80% were done with just a glance at the title and not reading the story itself.
ok First Im sorry for grammar misspells and inconsistency in this Writing on my phone and still not comfortable with it But before I could get home most of the things i want to say would evaporete from my mind. I had to admit Ive missed thos few times simply because of the name. Honestly Ive read a bit of fifty shades of grey and it is terrible so the name is bit unfortunate. Especially because this is NOT LIKE ORIGINAL (needed to say that for the sake of others who may skip it becuse of name) it is different and not the same topic at all. Also for those who may skip because it is anthro... please dont judge it for this word alone. Yes Im former furry so i have no problems with this department but simply anthro does not need to mean weird or intrusive. In this specific instance I think it is well done and present oportunities to make story deeper and and explore all matters present inside that may be impossible to do with hooves. I like characters that are decently fleshed out and understandable. it is kind of work that makes one wonder and not just jerk. Story combines sex, relationship issues with process of discovering oneself and growing as a new more mature individual. Like i said in comment to the first part ther iis difference between clop and erotica and writing erotica is not easy. This is about much more than sex and I personally think that term clop used in description to this story is derrogative here. You know Somber, you are a decent author and Ive read several of your stories including PH. I would be glad if you stop degrading yourself and your work and stop giving potentional readers reasons to skip some of your good works justbecause you dont think it is good enough or because you may think they may not like it. It leads to the loss of potentional comments and constructive criticism and as such to loss of readers. I think i is work of your readers to decide what is worhy of their time and if they evolve from casual readers to fans. I personally am happy to check this one out and I want to see it continued, evolved and finished === Inlustris Nox ===
You may want to make a little margin below in the description stating that this is not at all like 50 Shades, It'll keep people from skipping or down voting it out of spite because of the parody title. Shit, if it gets to be that bad, I'd put it right at the top.
7518669 Sorry. I'll add that. I hope it helps. Sorry. I thought the name was a playful bit on that horrible story.
7517995 I hope so. I have a hard time with pure clop too. I love stories like Grimm's Misshapes, or Illusive Badgerpony's Diamond Tiara Gets Filthy. where it talks more about the character's psychology than just the fact these characters are having sex.
Ok, just gonna say straight up, there wasn't a moment of this story I didn't love. The title had me expecting something kinkier, but this story already has so much heart and, dare I say, adorableness that I'd hate to change a thing. Looking forward to the rest
7518845 Well I really think it is one of your better works and it has massive potential The only fear I have is that it ends as a shipfest... but judging by your other works, you are experienced enough to not kill amazing idea with "everybody needs a partner" or flat out clop so far it is well done and just going for new chapter after rereading previous ones - and let me tell you I was happy to see new chapter
Whaaat? From what I'd heard, this was never seeing the light of day!
I guess now I get to find out just what it is.
7514659 I was mind controlled into releasing it. I swear!
Actually, after someone commissions cover art for you, you kind of have to...
I'ma just call bullshit now.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Well then.
This was the last thing I ever expected to see in my notifications.
Ill just squeeze right outta here.. Pardon me, excuse me... yes thank you.
*crowd watches me as I awkwardly leave the room, squeezing through everyone.*
Yes thank you, goodbye. Pardon me, yes thank you... Excuse me.
(I'm not saying I don't like the story, I bet its interesting.... But I have.... read... I guess you could say... I have read Fifty Shades of Grey... Not a big fan.)
I guess I'll just click the little button to track this and see where it heads.
7514762 Can't really blame the thought, I'm also very harsh on my own work. I can never be satisfied. Pretty sure any artist of any kind feels the same.
It's kinda good, since it leads to major improvements in ones work.
7514795 So have I. This is a bit of a deconstruction of that.
7514762 i kinda wonder at this point, if all good writers hate their own work and think it's terrible and people are just playing a really elaborate joke on them
7515114 Hmm..
You may have persuaded me.
May have.
Ill add it to my Tracking and decide later.
7515061
True enough.
But it's nice to be told you're going in the right direction on improving and all.
7515324
Probably.
~Skeeter The Lurker
7515324
Floccinaucinihilipilification.
That is all.
7515455 is that something you looked up specifically for the use of it there or is it something you already knew? regardless, new words are worderific.
7515669
It's my second favourite word ever.
7515671 pneumonoultramicroscopicsilicovolcanoconiosis, essentially it is referring to a disease caused by breathing in silica dust. is this your favorite?
7515674
Nope. Moist is.
I think this is awesome, it so well...written! i mean it, this story is well done, it's touching and how everyone reacts, talks or expresses themsevles, wow!
This is a very well written Lemons tory, and love how Rarity wants to help her friends and maybe form greator bonds with them.
I love to see Rarity do them all, one by one and all together later, if possible.
7516127 okay. Is that better? Is there any way I can improve on the story?
I think I'll skip this one, Somber.
Interesting. I wouldn't be too disheartened by the downvotes. I strongly suspect that 80% were done with just a glance at the title and not reading the story itself.
7516674 That's fine. I know it's not as good as feral.
Well, I like, keep it up, I wanna see where it goes :3
ok
First Im sorry for grammar misspells and inconsistency in this
Writing on my phone and still not comfortable with it
But before I could get home most of the things i want to say would evaporete from my mind.
I had to admit Ive missed thos few times simply because of the name. Honestly Ive read a bit of fifty shades of grey and it is terrible so the name is bit unfortunate. Especially because this is NOT LIKE ORIGINAL (needed to say that for the sake of others who may skip it becuse of name) it is different and not the same topic at all.
Also for those who may skip because it is anthro... please dont judge it for this word alone. Yes Im former furry so i have no problems with this department but simply anthro does not need to mean weird or intrusive. In this specific instance I think it is well done and present oportunities to make story deeper and and explore all matters present inside that may be impossible to do with hooves.
I like characters that are decently fleshed out and understandable. it is kind of work that makes one wonder and not just jerk.
Story combines sex, relationship issues with process of discovering oneself and growing as a new more mature individual.
Like i said in comment to the first part ther iis difference between clop and erotica and writing erotica is not easy. This is about much more than sex and I personally think that term clop used in description to this story is derrogative here.
You know Somber, you are a decent author and Ive read several of your stories including PH. I would be glad if you stop degrading yourself and your work and stop giving potentional readers reasons to skip some of your good works justbecause you dont think it is good enough or because you may think they may not like it.
It leads to the loss of potentional comments and constructive criticism and as such to loss of readers. I think i is work of your readers to decide what is worhy of their time and if they evolve from casual readers to fans.
I personally am happy to check this one out and I want to see it continued, evolved and finished
=== Inlustris Nox ===
You may want to make a little margin below in the description stating that this is not at all like 50 Shades, It'll keep people from skipping or down voting it out of spite because of the parody title. Shit, if it gets to be that bad, I'd put it right at the top.
7518669 Sorry. I'll add that. I hope it helps. Sorry. I thought the name was a playful bit on that horrible story.
7517995 I hope so. I have a hard time with pure clop too. I love stories like Grimm's Misshapes, or Illusive Badgerpony's Diamond Tiara Gets Filthy. where it talks more about the character's psychology than just the fact these characters are having sex.
Ok, just gonna say straight up, there wasn't a moment of this story I didn't love. The title had me expecting something kinkier, but this story already has so much heart and, dare I say, adorableness that I'd hate to change a thing. Looking forward to the rest
i really like this, keep it up!
7517097
What is feral?
Guess I'll have to remind Ferret to convince you to write more.
I'm gonna guess Rarity is going to convince her friends to go to one of the parties with her at some point.
I'm really enjoying the worldbuilding in this. To think. Worldbuilding in erotica.
7518845
Well I really think it is one of your better works and it has massive potential
The only fear I have is that it ends as a shipfest... but judging by your other works, you are experienced enough to not kill amazing idea with "everybody needs a partner" or flat out clop
so far it is well done and just going for new chapter after rereading previous ones - and let me tell you I was happy to see new chapter