Oh my god she really exploded.

Half a ton is her right nut♪
Half a ton her left one too♪
Emptying her cum in her empty tummy♪
♪Pop- Goes the bim-bo♪

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Not quite what I had in mind, but yes.

Ok i kinda hope you make a chapter where she popped the rest of the mane 6 and the cutie mark crusaders and brought them back.

Uh, is getting blowing up by cum more pleasurable or painful?

Twilight NEEDS to get her own in the end.
This is sociopathic behaviour and literal enslavement.

Trixie is fighting a losing battle she can't win.

I'm hoping twilight rezzes her with ever bigger curves than before and less brain

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This guy gets it.

7742700 i was thinking twilight would do something to the new body so twilight could really let loose on her. Finally having a pony to release all her backed up cum into.

Personally I'm more into the cum pouring out of their mouth they were filled so much rather than them just bloating that big, but it was still hot.

7742700 will she explode a 2nd time or will the new trixie actually be able to take it all and is feeling like heaven all the way?

Well, at least this is somewhat tame enough to not make this 'climax' any gorier than it already is.

...is Twi a serial killer? Heck, I don't remember you ever having killed a character in your stories before, or at least the ones on fimfic.

Also, noticed some things:

And her curvy playmate moaned in simply, mindless pleasure.

Simple, methinks.

Trixie gave herself a magical boost in ramming, becoming almost a purple blur, nuts swollen much further than before in anticipation for a much larger load.

Unless you meant Twilight here, I am wildly confused.

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Thanks for spotting these! Just let me know if you'd ever like more stuff to preread!

7755853 Oh, I'd be happy to, just send a pm.

This was a fun read. I love over-the-top stories like this particularly when you find out it's not as life-threatening as it appeared

I'm sorry, what is popping?

7803891 Ah... never mind.

Lol made me think about Invader Zim: "He going to explode momma!"

So. Worth it.

I have a perfect joke, but eh. Not gonna happen in this story... might as well post it anyway. Why not?

this will be like taking candy from a baby

More like, "taking baby from a candy"

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I don't get the "less brain" thing. What's the point of it if one of the characters is too stupid to fully appreciate what's happening? A witty woman who can be challenging at times while at the same time being kinky enough to get into it and even bring in her own ideas seems a lot more exciting to me.

How's it coming?

Is this ever going to be finished?

Her breasts had creaked and expanded their way from a fairly sizeable G-cup to the deepest depths of the alphabet...

this small paragraph got me