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I think we've all come to realize something. Ponies are delicious and everything wants to eat them.
7202472 The amount of emotion-eating baddies they have packed into MLP is quite astounding. We have love, fear, and anger covered by changelings, umbrum, and windigo. Throwing in deer that feed on confusion was a logical step.
Says much about the nobles and such that to keep hate feeding windigoes away usually requires the prescense of a star class thermal source.
If the Deer feed off cnfusion, how fat would they get off Dash and the windigoes being stuffed in the barn as well?
Applejack's word - Applejack's world
Okay, lets get - Okay, let's get
In the distance it - In the distance, it
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Light on the typos tonight, the ice and wind must have made them seek shelter.
Poor Gel, I want to give the little guy a hug. He's never been so isolated before, even though he's surrounded by friends and loved ones. Allegory for depression?
7202710 I was going with a whole lot of feelings in this, the sensation types as well as emotional. Rainbow Dash has gained a new sense, Gel has (temporarily) lost one. And as for Applejack, she has appeared to have lost ALL sense
As for typos, when I really get into a story I tend to typo less, that and I am being hounded by an awesome new reader about its/it's, so it makes me want to get them right more often
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7202631 Damn contractions, I am slowly getting better with them. Practice makes perfect
7202614 Hrmm, I guess it is a regional thing then, it seems to flow fine either way for me when spoken.
Are you enjoying the story?
Also, huge thank you for taking the time to point out the mistakes
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Hmm... I haven't caught you on the its/it's thing too much, but I have noticed that you miss on lets/let's with some frequency. If we were all perfect it would be pretty boring though.
7202670 Celestia isn't the source of the heat, she is a catalyst, like when you introduce palladium to methane
7202745 One thing you might have noticed, a lot less 'that' in my writing. My grammar checker is all over my back about using it and it is starting to bug me enough
thatI am actually starting to not write it.7202778
I'd never considered 'that' as being a bad thing, as long as it's not used incorrectly.
My personal pet peeve is the overuse of 'get', 'getting', 'got', 'gotten', when they take the place of a more descriptive verb. When it's used in dialogue, that's fine, because people speak that way, but when used in the prose between dialogue it
gets to bebecomes a burden.However, I recognize that
that isit's my personal demon to slay and I refuse to impose it upon others. The internets are already full of self-important trolls, and I have no desire to become one myself.Ooh, Rainbow should be careful, she's not yet experienced battling a Wendigo! (erm, WTF, my keyboard just corrected Windigo???).
Keep going! ;)
7203086 Wendigo is the correct name. Odd that your device would have it as something to correct to, however. But when has not knowing everything ever stopped Dash from doing ANYTHING?
7203184 Excellent
was listening to this when I got to the part about the song Vinyl started playing.