So after all the Mane 6 get Suited for Changeling Armor, will they be able to take control of the Changeling Armor and get out of it then or what, because I would love to see the look on Chrysalis and her Changelings faces when they see the Mane 6 break free of their control.
7048139 I think they would want to get out of it, after all aren't the Changelings using some kind of mind control on them, also I don't really like seeing Rainbow being the breeder and being Rarity's Pet, heck I think Rainbow should just kick Rarity in the groin and leave her crying from being kicked there.
I think they would want to get out of it, after all aren't the Changelings using some kind of mind control on them
Kinda... The only pony who has experienced Mind Control is Rarity and she broke out of it rather soon after it happened. Twilight for instance is not mind controlled at all but her judgement is impaired because she can feel Chrysalis’s drive to do the things she has been doing, if Twilight gained more control over the body then Chrysalis then the Changeling queen would start to see things more in line with Twilight, does that make sense?
7048269 Some what, but with Twilight being an Alicorn and the Alicorn of MAGIC shouldn't she be able to over power Chrysalis already, also like I said I don't like seeing Rainbow as a Breeder or Rarity's Sex Slave Pet, I bet Celestia would blow her top seeing one of the Elements of Harmony being used that way, heck if she finds out the changelings are back she might just fly down there with Luna, Shining Armor and Cadance and destroy them for good and free Twilight and Rarity then, of course she would do something to Rarity for turing a fellow Element into a Sex Slave Pet for who know's how long.
7048284 Its a good thing that Rainbow is not going to be a breeder then Rarity would not do that to her friend, sure she knocked her up NOW but Rainbow is all about flying around, she can be flying around while full of eggs all the time that would be ridiculous.
Rainbow will not become a breeder don't worry about that.
As for Twilight, yes she is much stronger then Chrysalis is currently, but there willpower is almost matched with the great buggy queen coming out just on top.
7048306 Okay, but what about the other stuff I talked about, what happens when Celestia, Luna, Cadance, Shining Armor find out, not to mention the CMC and the Families of the Mane 6, I think Twilight and Shinings Parents would be VERY upset as this, after all Chrysalis did nearly destroy their Son's wedding after all.
I hope AJ will be next along with her family and Caramel if he is in the neighborhood.
Also If Sunset Shimmer is going to be in this story, as a Nurse,then would expect to also see Flash Sentry and turn him into a breeder, the guys a pansy and he deserve a worst faith then that.
I think Doctor Whooves would be better a Drone seeing that he has always been a hooves on ponies and he really isn't into the whole fighting thing any way Derpy would be great company for him as would Dinky and star.
I would love to see Thunderlane get seduces by Rarity along with his brother Rumble.
Snip ans Snails might be interesting if they go along with TGAP Trixy I would think that she would try to argue to be as hight as possible in the pakking order, SnS would be her underlings of course.
Bulkbicep would certainly be a hive Guardian, probably for Fluttershy, pore girl alway need to be reassured
I have a sneaking (evil) suspicion that the Queen and her changelings are probably in for a rude awakening when the Mane 6 turn on them. Taking over, if not reducing the 'lings to kinky sex toys after Twilight makes Chrysalis submit, the rest of the 'lings falling in line like dominoes. Heh, Rarity has already gotten her 'partner' Dejda under her hoof, tho, not as firmly as she has Rainbow Dash.
It makes me wonder what would happen if they fired off the rainbow however. Would the magic of harmony even do anything to them? Well, besides mellow them out from their apparent ideas of taking over the world. And depending on where this AU is set, they might not even need the Elements to do it (having returned them to the Tree a while ago).
Might have been a strategic error of Chrysalis part to try and assimilate the Elements of Harmony. Fate does so love kicking the villain in the nads when they mess with them as seen in every Season of MLP.
What this needs now is for Pinkie Pie to sneak around, find out what's really going on, catch Twisalis off-guard, and then join in because it sounds like fun.
7049791 Great idea! Though i would say that Spike should be converted aswell to cut off any Magical Messages, but he could just being gobbled up when he is asleep ^^
7048216 Also, her reasoning about Rainbow Dash just planning on coasting by with a few trick before Rarity got her is blatant lies, given Rainbow's clearing the sky in ten second flat show high speeds and a ludicrous turning ability. Also, I'm pretty sure if Rarity was like this, "breaking her in", controlling her life, finances, and sex life in a horrible example of an abusive relationship, she wouldn't have been a fit for the Element of Generosity.
However in a twisted logic the argument could be made rarity sees herself as generous by fixing rainbows minor flaws. A twisted mind could say she spend all her free time nappng and not perfecting her skills while in reality the time rainbow did train she trained for hours a day and only has the energy left to nap. So rarity, who we know exagerates and dramatizes, could see her napping for an hour and says "That mare needs to shape her life up of she plans to get into the wonderbolts and im just the mare to help her do it." And that doesnt even go into her own twisted sense of perfection.
So really the question falls to how the element of generousity chooses its wielder. Does it choose it based on a preset mental definition of the value with known limits or does simply run a strong desire to give to and help others. If its the latter then rarity would still qualify for the element in this fic if she did what she did in an effort to "help" her friend.
7051971 Yes, my readers have to remember that my characters are rarely telling the full story or being honest, sometimes they are just pain wrong. Rarity did what she did because she honestly thought it was best for her friend, in chapter three Rarity makes a comment about doing the same thing she did to Dash to Twilight.
The Elements of harmony are the elements of HARMONY. They are not the Elements of goodness and snuggles and sweet kisses, they Harmonise things, they balance things out.
7049527 She sees it as a means to an end, and remember she got a lot of information out of Dejda so she might feel more secure in her position then she would otherwise.
Comment posted by JackMueller deleted Mar 24th, 2016
7054317 No, no you did not, there is plenty you could have done to actually help me but putting a video like that is hardly one of them, also please put the video under a spoiler.
7079335 I think you are missing the point of my expertly crafted narrative and moreover the point of a narrative in itself. But please, continue to be a delightful source of well written commentary drivel.
If you make enough comments you might just write something worthwhile.
Other than chapter 2, every chapter has advanced the takeover by the changelings plot. You could complain you don't like how it's written, but it's not bad for a clopfic.
I find the way the characters act a bit unbelievable, and it needs an editor, but what about the plot is there to complain about? If you don't want to read about fetish-based conquest then why are you reading this at all? You're complaining about the central premise of a story.
A "real" story that happens to have sex isn't a clopfic, and the author clearly set out to write a clopfic, and presumably you decided to read one.
Interesting story, as for who goes next. I think Lyra and Bon Bon should go next. Lyra goes missing and Special Agent Sweetie Drops goes looking for her friend...
So after all the Mane 6 get Suited for Changeling Armor, will they be able to take control of the Changeling Armor and get out of it then or what, because I would love to see the look on Chrysalis and her Changelings faces when they see the Mane 6 break free of their control.
7048128 I mean... They COULD do that
Would all of them want to however is another question
Rarity's relationship with Rainbow is one I find very disturbing.
Oh well, who's next?
7048139 I think they would want to get out of it, after all aren't the Changelings using some kind of mind control on them, also I don't really like seeing Rainbow being the breeder and being Rarity's Pet, heck I think Rainbow should just kick Rarity in the groin and leave her crying from being kicked there.
7048216 Yeah total domination is on the extreme side of the spectrum. As for who is next, Flutterbutt... Probably.
7048246 Oh my.
7048241
Kinda... The only pony who has experienced Mind Control is Rarity and she broke out of it rather soon after it happened. Twilight for instance is not mind controlled at all but her judgement is impaired because she can feel Chrysalis’s drive to do the things she has been doing, if Twilight gained more control over the body then Chrysalis then the Changeling queen would start to see things more in line with Twilight, does that make sense?
7048269 Some what, but with Twilight being an Alicorn and the Alicorn of MAGIC shouldn't she be able to over power Chrysalis already, also like I said I don't like seeing Rainbow as a Breeder or Rarity's Sex Slave Pet, I bet Celestia would blow her top seeing one of the Elements of Harmony being used that way, heck if she finds out the changelings are back she might just fly down there with Luna, Shining Armor and Cadance and destroy them for good and free Twilight and Rarity then, of course she would do something to Rarity for turing a fellow Element into a Sex Slave Pet for who know's how long.
7048284 Its a good thing that Rainbow is not going to be a breeder then Rarity would not do that to her friend, sure she knocked her up NOW but Rainbow is all about flying around, she can be flying around while full of eggs all the time that would be ridiculous.
Rainbow will not become a breeder don't worry about that.
As for Twilight, yes she is much stronger then Chrysalis is currently, but there willpower is almost matched with the great buggy queen coming out just on top.
7048306 Okay, but what about the other stuff I talked about, what happens when Celestia, Luna, Cadance, Shining Armor find out, not to mention the CMC and the Families of the Mane 6, I think Twilight and Shinings Parents would be VERY upset as this, after all Chrysalis did nearly destroy their Son's wedding after all.
7048390 I can't tell you all that things will happen as they happen and you will have to read more to find out.
Just giving stuff away in the comments would be awfully boring.
I hope AJ will be next along with her family and Caramel if he is in the neighborhood.
Also If Sunset Shimmer is going to be in this story, as a Nurse,then would expect to also see Flash Sentry and turn him into a breeder, the guys a pansy and he deserve a worst faith then that.
I think Doctor Whooves would be better a Drone seeing that he has always been a hooves on ponies and he really isn't into the whole fighting thing any way Derpy would be great company for him as would Dinky and star.
I would love to see Thunderlane get seduces by Rarity along with his brother Rumble.
Snip ans Snails might be interesting if they go along with TGAP Trixy I would think that she would try to argue to be as hight as possible in the pakking order, SnS would be her underlings of course.
Bulkbicep would certainly be a hive Guardian, probably for Fluttershy, pore girl alway need to be reassured
Bated breath. Short for abated or stopped.
7048139
I have a sneaking (evil) suspicion that the Queen and her changelings are probably in for a rude awakening when the Mane 6 turn on them. Taking over, if not reducing the 'lings to kinky sex toys after Twilight makes Chrysalis submit, the rest of the 'lings falling in line like dominoes. Heh, Rarity has already gotten her 'partner' Dejda under her hoof, tho, not as firmly as she has Rainbow Dash.
It makes me wonder what would happen if they fired off the rainbow however. Would the magic of harmony even do anything to them? Well, besides mellow them out from their apparent ideas of taking over the world. And depending on where this AU is set, they might not even need the Elements to do it (having returned them to the Tree a while ago).
Might have been a strategic error of Chrysalis part to try and assimilate the Elements of Harmony. Fate does so love kicking the villain in the nads when they mess with them as seen in every Season of MLP.
You should do some gender swaps
Rarity overpowered her changeling yet is all aboard the changeling takeover train?
7048284 as Chrysalis has observed, Twilight isn't really trying all that hard.
What this needs now is for Pinkie Pie to sneak around, find out what's really going on, catch Twisalis off-guard, and then join in because it sounds like fun.
7049791 I like this idea...
7048419 I very much agree with these idea's
7049791
Great idea! Though i would say that Spike should be converted aswell to cut off any Magical Messages, but he could just being gobbled up when he is asleep ^^
7048216
Also, her reasoning about Rainbow Dash just planning on coasting by with a few trick before Rarity got her is blatant lies, given Rainbow's clearing the sky in ten second flat show high speeds and a ludicrous turning ability.
Also, I'm pretty sure if Rarity was like this, "breaking her in", controlling her life, finances, and sex life in a horrible example of an abusive relationship, she wouldn't have been a fit for the Element of Generosity.
This is the best clop story I've found in quite a while.. buh..
7051290 thats why its a clop fic.
However in a twisted logic the argument could be made rarity sees herself as generous by fixing rainbows minor flaws. A twisted mind could say she spend all her free time nappng and not perfecting her skills while in reality the time rainbow did train she trained for hours a day and only has the energy left to nap. So rarity, who we know exagerates and dramatizes, could see her napping for an hour and says "That mare needs to shape her life up of she plans to get into the wonderbolts and im just the mare to help her do it." And that doesnt even go into her own twisted sense of perfection.
So really the question falls to how the element of generousity chooses its wielder. Does it choose it based on a preset mental definition of the value with known limits or does simply run a strong desire to give to and help others. If its the latter then rarity would still qualify for the element in this fic if she did what she did in an effort to "help" her friend.
Twisting logic and values is fun.
7051971 Yes, my readers have to remember that my characters are rarely telling the full story or being honest, sometimes they are just pain wrong. Rarity did what she did because she honestly thought it was best for her friend, in chapter three Rarity makes a comment about doing the same thing she did to Dash to Twilight.
The Elements of harmony are the elements of HARMONY. They are not the Elements of goodness and snuggles and sweet kisses, they Harmonise things, they balance things out.
7048419 Sexy ideas WOOOO!
7048970
7049186 Yeah its on my list!
7049527 She sees it as a means to an end, and remember she got a lot of information out of Dejda so she might feel more secure in her position then she would otherwise.
7054317 No, no you did not, there is plenty you could have done to actually help me but putting a video like that is hardly one of them, also please put the video under a spoiler.
7048306 Wait wait wait... Rainbow's not a breeder? Then what is she?
7054585 Find out next chapter
7054704 Hmm... I wonder who might be the breeder. (I nominate the spa sisters) I can't wait to see. Pregnancy is #1 fetish.
Eh, thought this might actually do something with its concept and backstory, but nope... turned into typical cliché clop fetish pretty much instantly.
7055573 Go on then, tell me how its cliché.
What is the next chapter going to be?
7055944 Weeeeeell, it pretty much focuses all about the next sexcapade, has the typical oviposition stuff, and now has thrown in a submission fetish.
It's pretty much half the furry pr0n fics on Furaffinity.
7058435 so because I have changed the fetishes up each chapter its cliché? What do you want me to do the same thing each time?
7058948 Maybe craft an actual story around it?
The flash animation was better.
Sorry.
It was.
Can you do more chapters please
7060200
This complaint makes no sense; the plot has become more apparent with each chapter.
7078398 The plot: entice ponies into getting Venom-ated sexually and get swarm going.
Yeah, got it.
That's a fetish masquerading as a plot.
7079335 I think you are missing the point of my expertly crafted narrative and moreover the point of a narrative in itself. But please, continue to be a delightful source of well written commentary drivel.
If you make enough comments you might just write something worthwhile.
7079375 That must have been sarcasm, since you referred to this rather prototypical fetish fic as possessing a well-crafted narrative.
7079335
Other than chapter 2, every chapter has advanced the takeover by the changelings plot. You could complain you don't like how it's written, but it's not bad for a clopfic.
I find the way the characters act a bit unbelievable, and it needs an editor, but what about the plot is there to complain about? If you don't want to read about fetish-based conquest then why are you reading this at all? You're complaining about the central premise of a story.
A "real" story that happens to have sex isn't a clopfic, and the author clearly set out to write a clopfic, and presumably you decided to read one.
7079394 Expertly crafted! The quality of this fic is legendary, forged in the very same fires as Excalibur! Many bothans died to bring us this fic.
7079597 They died in vain...
(Cuz they just built a bigger Death Star! Oh... they still forgot to cover the exhaust ports... NVRMND...)
anymore?
7104187 I am working on the next chapter, just took a slight break to get some other stuff done.
7104663 ok
Can you do more please
Interesting story, as for who goes next. I think Lyra and Bon Bon should go next. Lyra goes missing and Special Agent Sweetie Drops goes looking for her friend...