Andrew Duron, hardened by his life's many traumas. At the age of 19 his, and everyones, world gets turned upside down after a freak worldwide storm appears out of nowhere and changes the world forever. The Ponies have arrived..
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Oh my god this is amazing. Said using a caboose's voice from red vs blue
I... no, that's not correct at all. As its mostly used as a like and dislike feature which how good the writing and concepts is is an important deciding factor, but it is far from being the only reason people chose either to like or dislike a story.
7323584 Adusk is right, that is what I meant. Say, care to tell me more about the story you're planning on writing after this one?
Lightning spears! Dark Souls ftw!
This sounds like some Chicago shit; nice city with a bad underworld. At least it ain't dirty south. Lol
Okay, where in all this:
Do we get any hint at what is magic was? Then again, even with this guy using an electric sword on the slimeball, I still couldn't figure out what his power was. I just assumed it was just part of his 'dark side'.
7750768 If you look back through the previous chapters you'll notice I used lightning or described things as electric in many of the major events that occurred. The word zair is an inside term, if you can figure out where I got it from props to you. Bael's true full name, as said in chapter, is Baelzair and it's meaning is 'Guardian of Lightning' or 'Lightning Guardian' depending on how you want to translate it. I hid it in plain sight, don't blame me if you didn't notice.![:ajsmug:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajsmug.png)
7750793 When did he use anything electric? I only remember him using speed and strength Bael came out to play?
7750877 It wasn't something he could use until he learned Bael's true name. It was more a theme I used in the story when major things happened to him. Well, until now that is.
Scratch that last comment. This reminds me of Bioshock.
7790239 Glad you like it so much, I know my other story hasn't had anything for a while and I probably should have put hiatus status on it for a bit, but I plan on getting a chapter out this week for it. So if you haven't gotten a chance read that one too.
And hell yeah I'll support you man, if you'd like some help with ideas or editing PM me I'll give what help I can.![:eeyup:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/eeyup.png)
Ok so far so good but i have a few questions for you one is why lighting didn't he use a black aura earlier in the story and two is why didn't you explain to the guard in a little more detail to explain the things you did to fine point so he would take you to Celestia and Luna to see what is happening and if they could teach you to control your magic or if they could put a limiter on it and decrease the influence of it on your body and mind so that you have less nightmares also you need to read to be able to see your mistakes in grammar in some of the lines you need some work from chapter one all up to now so I need you to see what you can do and if need be ill be your partner in writing you book to help you out with grammar and all new script schemes also your book has a great feature of gore mixed in it!!!!!!
While you admit this is your first story, at this point he shouldn't even be coming close to just walking away as if nothings wrong.
If you have some disembodied voice with a clear plan for something that requires your consent (or lack thereof) and a clearly evil entity connected to you with seemingly no way of escape without your help, you normally should either
A. Tell someone whod beleive you (Luna would be ideal here)
B. Open the cage and screw the consequences (if your a dick)
C. Ignore the voice and force it to deal with being made to wait more (though this makes it someone else's problem eventually)
D. Initiate MAD and ensure that it ends as a zero-sum game. No offspring to move itself to, nor for the evil entity to tempt, or just commit suicide and end it all and ensure nothing gets a chance to mess things up)
8297712![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
I do understand what you're saying and so does the main character. But as you'll find, Korvin isn't completely evil, more of just an embodiment of emotion. He and Bael are one of the key tools I use to progress the story. As for the fact about telling Luna about them, the princesses wouldn't understand. Human magic functions on a principal of chaos while Equestrian magic comes from harmony. Eventually it will be made known, but I have a story to tell before we get to that. Hope you keep reading.
So Andrew's become a conduit?
...Shocking
I'm completely shocked