Andrew Duron, hardened by his life's many traumas. At the age of 19 his, and everyones, world gets turned upside down after a freak worldwide storm appears out of nowhere and changes the world forever. The Ponies have arrived..
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Bruh.
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This is a good story, but would be so much better with an editor.
I would offer editing for you, but I'm on vacation; thus, no proper keyboard.
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I find the pacing to be more of a issue myself
stayclassy![:moustache:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/moustache.png)
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hey Lyruil I was wandering when you are going to pump out another chapter for all to read?
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Soon...
Hopefully next week
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thx rot the reply
...I don't mean to sound like an @** but that cover story is one of the dumbest things they could've come up with and was way to hammy. It would have made more sense to explain it as a totem/guardian spirit considering his affinity for wolves from childhood which was explained to them and the fact that the shadow armor looks like a wolf. The way it's handled here means more likely than not they would be actively be searching around for a dangerous spirit. There's a lot of fallout that the way they acted would have and all of it would come back to them getting caught almost instantly.
Well I'll check the next few chapters to see how you handled that aspect. But seriously beings as old as them would be more aware of likely cause and effects.
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Ok so I'll try and address your concerns. The reason I didn't try to excuse his actions is because Luna knows what the 'guardian spirit' is capable of, and knowing that the person they protect has very little input on how it acts. Bael and Kor are extremely chaotic by Equestrian standards and would be too much of a threat to leave unmanaged. Being wrapped in darkness and shadow is something typically seen as evil, especially considering that is how the nightmare affliction seems to behave, Luna would never trust it. The best scenario that could of happened if I went that route was that Bael and Kor would be sealed by Equestrian magic and then Andrew wouldn't be able to defend himself. Which is very important for later. True Luna would be on guard and probably preparing for if this 'demon' reappeared but that is a minor detail to worry about when considering some of the events that will happen later.
Wow, I completely forgot about this series. I need to try and catch up.