How is this possible?!?!
"What is this spell going to do?" Fluttershy asked nervously. She had been at Twilight's house for awhile, helping her with some spells and Twilight was wondering what they did, which was strange, because Twilight knew every spell.
"I'm not sure. That's why I'm trying these out. Again, are you sure that you're ok with me practicing these on you? I could reactivate Flutterbat, or turn you into a succubus or some other kind of sex demon," Twilight said.
"Yes, I'm sure. That's just a risk that I'm going to have to take, ok?" Fluttershy said.
"Ok, If you insist. Hopefully none of these spells destroy the castle. Well, here goes!" Twilight said nervously. She casted the spell and nothing seemed to happen.
"Seriously? It was a dud?!" Twilight sighed. "Well, lets take a break. Want some food? I think I have some candy corn from Nightmare Night."
"Sure," Fluttershy responded. Twilight got said candy corn out and put them in a bowl and put it on the counter. Fluttershy picked one up and popped it into her mouth, and immediately spit it out.
"What's wrong?" Twilight asked.
"Ugh, I think it's spoiled. It doesn't taste right," Fluttershy said.
"Really? Dang it! In that case, I better throw these out," Twilight said.
"I'll do it," Fluttershy said.
"Really? You know you don't have to, right?" Twilight asked.
"Yes, but I was the one that spat it out. I can't make you do that!" Fluttershy said.
"Ok, I can't argue with that logic," Twilight said.
Wow, Twilight gave in rather easily. She must be tired, Fluttershy reasoned. She picked up the slightly saliva covered candy corn piece, and was about to throw that and the rest of them away when the one she almost ate started to smoke and shake.
"Um, Twilight? I think I know what that spell did!" Fluttershy said nervously.
"Really? What?" Twilight said, starting to come over, but at that moment, there was a bright flash of light, the candy corn piece became really heavy, and Fluttershy and Twilight were knocked out.
About an hour later, Fluttershy woke up.
"Ugh, what happened?" she asked aloud. There was a squeak, and she heard someone small moving. She opened her eyes in time to see a small white and orange hoof disappear behind the counter.
"Who's there?" she asked, starting to get nervous. There was some more squeaking and movement, and then a head appeared around the corner of the counter. Fluttershy's jaw dropped. The person was female, and had ears the same color as candy corn (they were even striped!) Her eyes were some kind of stunning blue, and had short, wavy hair. It was mostly yellow, but had some orange streaks in it.
"W-who are you?" Fluttershy asked. The mare opened and closed her mouth a few times before she finale responded.
"I'm not sure. Where am I? And are you my mommy?" she asked. Fluttershy's hair stood on end.
"Your mommy? You think I'm your mommy?" Fluttershy asked.
"So you aren't?" the mare asked.
"I didn't say that. So, do you remember anything?" Fluttershy asked.
"No," the mare said.
"Not even a name?" Fluttershy asked. The mare shook her head. Just then, Twilight started to groan. The mare's head disappeared behind the counter.
"Fluttershy! Are you ok?" Twilight suddenly popped up yelling.
"Woah, I'm ok, and right here. Don't yell," Fluttershy said.
"Ok, good. Wait, what about the candy corn?" Twilight asked.
"Um, she's behind the counter. You can come out now!" Fluttershy called.
"What?" Twilight started to say when the mare poked her head around the corner. Twilight's jaw dropped.
"What?! How?!" Twilight exclaimed.
"What do you mean, candy corn?" the mare asked.
"She can speak?" Twilight gasped.
"She can also understand you perfectly," the mare asked.
"Do you have a name?" Twilight asked.
"No. What's a name?" the mare asked.
"We have to figure out exactly how that spell works," Twilight said to Fluttershy.
"Yeah, we do. Um, you can come out from behind the counter now," Fluttershy said to the mare. The mare stepped out and they got their first view of her body. She was a Pegasus, and didn't have a cutie mark. The bottom of her hooves were white, but above that they were orange.
"Do you think I could have some of your DNA?" Twilight asked suddenly.
"My.... what?" the mare asked, confused.
"Your DNA. Some of your skin," Twilight said. The mare paled.
"It doesn't have to be skin, it can be something like your saliva," Fluttershy said, not wanting to freak the mare out.
"Oh, ok," she said. "Do you have something that would safely hold it?"
"Yeah, give me a second to find it," Twilight said. She exited the room in search of something to hold saliva.
"So, do I need a name?" the mare asked.
"Yes," Fluttershy said.
"How about.... Candy Burn!" the mare said.
"Candy Burn?" Fluttershy asked.
"What about a candy burn?" Twilight asked, walking in with a petri dish for the saliva.
"That's name that she chose for herself," Fluttershy said.
"Really? Interesting choice. Anyway, can you please spit into this so I can analyze your DNA?" Twilight asked.
"Sure," Candy Burn said, spitting into the petri dish.
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I would like to see where this is going. I find it very interesting
6803365 Nice! Thanks!
Cute start although this could shoot off in several directions, from light and fluffy as cotton candy to... the dark side. I'd choose the cotton candy side myself. Even better if there was a cotton candy pony (wait, can't, Flufflepuff's already copyrighted).
I'll upvote you for now. This could turn into something really interesting...
so she doesn't know what a name is but she apparently understands the risks of DNA contamination and the need for a container?
seems legit
6803922 I didn't think of making different food characters! Also, yes, this should be a relatively bright one.
6803928 Thanks!
6804299 What would a fruit cake pony look like? Or a Candy pumpkin pony?
I really like the concept but the dialog is pretty stilted and inconsistent. The pace is also just a little too fast for my tastes as well.
6804904 I'm not sure, but that would probably be interesting to see.
This mare is adorable already, I wants more
6806151 Nice!
I want to like this, because the idea is cute, but your writing honestly isn't that good.
This could turn out... sweet.
6807527 Hahaha!
6807298 I agree. Sorry Dylan, but I think its a great I dea, just poorly exhibited. maybe you should try doing what a lot of people in groups do and give story ideas instead of writing stories yourself. I have seen many stories go wonderful places with this kind of working together.
the idea for this hold a lot of promise but the story lacks a lot of detail, the pacing is very rushed and the characters are very OCC at some points and there are a few logic issues.
i'll read on for the sake of the concept but I do recommend looking into writing tips and such to improve as a writer.
discord would be quite proud of twi and shy right now i mean the look on his face XD
Odd... a story about inanimate becoming animated.
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I dig it so far,
7530587 I think he'd be more jealous that shy had a inanimate turned animate kid. Twilight might get the overprotective friend speech.
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Thanks! I'm glad you like it and hope you continue to enjoy it and the others in its series!
the idea is novel but, well the writing- the characters are written rather blandly.
i really expected more of a freak out and just more mayhem in general in the face of having created literal fucking life out of candy