Interesting so far.

6790826

Thanks. Hope you'll like the rest of it

6790845
ok am hook I what to see more of this

Looks awesome so far, can't wait to read the rest.

6793473

Welcome aboard, my friend

This is awesome and you shoulds feel awesome.

6793718

Thanks

Your awesome too

6793473

Sorry for a late reply, but I'm glad that you like it

Well now, this is interesting. There may be a lot of stories with a humanized Chrysalis, but very rare are there stories like this with an EG universe Chrysalis. Would you be offended if I said that you're story has inspired a plot for my own EG Chrysalis story? (Because, you know, it's that good thus far.)

6803500

I'm an inspiration? wow... I never expected that. I'm glad you like the story so far.

Now as for your chrysalis EG story, if it's going to be like mine, you might want to make some changes

6803598

Oh, naturally. The last thing I want to be seen as is a plagiarist. Which is why I'm willing to bide my time to wait and see how your story unfolds before committing to anything.

6803853

Oh ok.

The next chapter will be out as soon as possible.

You're a life savor.

savior or saver?

"see you tomorrow, Jim,"

Capitalize.

The Zecora part could use some working on. Story wise that is it was a bit weak. I kinda need to see them falling in love but I find it hard to see why Jim falls in love with her for another reason other than her beauty. I am also a bit eeh on the relations with the main characters but mostly because it's not shown how they came to be.

6803957

"Sorry mustache, but you are becoming too thick,"