When Twilight was born, Princess Celestia summoned a Guardian to protect her, knowing the filly will be in danger in her future. Though, the guardian she chose isn't... The White Knight of Justice one would have predicted. But a Night Lord!
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Looking at the description has me interested. That said, some of the typos have me hesitant to read it, as I am a bit of a stickler sometimes.
I'm still going to give it a shot but based on the description, I strongly recommend a proofreader/editor. :3
1: This is past-tense and ties into 1a.
1a: The bolded 'will' would be better as 'would, since a previous bit {see 1} insinuated past-tense.
2: Removed this one {it was a suggestion, not a typo} but was too lazy to change the numbers.
3: 'chooses' would be better as 'chose' for the same reason as 1a; I've found consistency when using present and past-tense to be far more important than many would think.
4: Removed this one as well; another suggestion, not necessarily a typo.
5: This feels...incomplete? I think that's the word for it. It certainly doesn't read terribly well {when read aloud in particular} but I suppose it's technically not a typo either. Maybe add 'is... by not knowing' but even that feels incomplete; by not knowing what? Ah well, a minor gripe.
6: Just missed a space between 'with.(I own nothing)
Apologies if these all seem really minor; I find that it's the small things that tend to bother people the most. In any case, I look forward to seeing what your story has to offer. :3
~Sober {most of the time!}
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That was when things got interesting
Holy throne! Things just got crazy!! And I'm seriously rocking that bolt pistol!
7131284 Warhammer 40k XD Night Lords are Chaos Space Marines
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Okay, who pissed off Iron-Man with the Hulkbuster armor on?
Shining Armor you DON'T want to know.