The sirens use their remaining magic to get revenge on the Rainbooms. They use it on human Twilight and she turns into Midnight Sparkle again. But she isn't evil per say, just studious and a little mad with power.
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Haha, Midnight just made Rarity very happy.
Not bad. You have an interesting premise, and the first chapter is better written than the prologue. I'm curious to see where you're going with this...
I love these chapter names.
As long as your chapters have names rather than just "chapter 1" you can name them anything you want!
Honestly, the prologue wasn't that bad; It was a little rushed to get the story started, but many are worse than yours. As for the first chapter, it was great, and I can't wait for more.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
10:27_12/2/2015
It's official. Adagio is the worst.
Better...Better...I would HIGHLY recommend a editor and a few proofreader...you got the making of something but it needs refinement cause i like it...I just don't know where it is going. Have some sort of plan.
And word of advice if your gonna have Twilight or Midnight transform between demon and human...make sure she is demon most of the time or it will make the initial transformation kind of pointless.
6690995 Do not worry. She will be more Midnight, than Twilight, but the next chapter is still going to be mostly Twilight. However, I have something in mind to make it up.
6691068 Okay, you got a lot potential with this story, just take your time and think it through :)
There are a lot of good and funny parts like
But I'm sorry but I have to agree with the others the prologue was rushed a bit, but this chapter is a lot better perhaps if you separated the dazzling side and midnight side in later chapters that might help?
MAKE UP MONTAGE!!!!!
*Again, in the most Rarity/Twilight Sparkle way possible* "It's 'thinks', Darling."
You know, I can't help but notice that, while still clearly not herself, Midnight doesn't seem as bats*#t crazy this time around.
Hee we have all seen Garfield doing it