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Twilight stepped into a bright room with nothing but a table and some chairs inside. The Walls were a dulled yellow that looked like the color of the dress that Rarity made her. Along the walls were bronze oil lamps with small flames flickering inside. The room smelled of Old leather and wood polish with the lingering scent of cinnamon in the air. Around the table in the center of the room were two chairs, one of which was occupied by the admiral who sat looking at a small square of a thin, clear material. At the first sign of her presence he snapped up from the object and stood to greet her.
“Welcome, Princess. I hope I am not being too forward, but I have provided a refreshing cup of tea for you. “ the admiral said as he moved to pull out a large leather armchair for her.
“Thank you Admiral. That was very kind of you.” She responded taking her seat.
“Not at all. We would like to make this as easy as possible; and, you can go a long way with a smile.” Admiral Von Starke said taking his own seat once more.
“Before we begin, I did say that there would be some required learning. We think that you need to know us as a species before you can speak to your government. We are a race called humans. Currently, the average lifespan for us is three hundred years, while the average life expectancy is 45.
We come from a planet more than 1400 light years away. It took us traveling for 20 million years to reach this planet. as it stands now, from one cause or another, there are only 300 million of us. At the height of our civilization on our home world, we numbered in the ten billions. We were the apex predators there. Top of the food chain is a hard place to get to without claws, fangs or armored shells. So being born without those, we forged ours in fire and fashioned them from steel.
Now, let me tell you a few things about humans; starting with a passage written more than twenty million years ago.
‘Human beings are scary.
We breathe a corrosive gas. Drink one of the most potent solvents. Our preferred method of hunting was persistence hunting, where we chased animals until their bodies simply gave up and died. We can eat just about anything we find, so we don't need to stop for food when chasing our prey. If we can't find food, that's fine. Our bodies will simply begin to eat itself so that we don't have to stop chasing our prey.
We walk upright, we sweat, we don't have much body hair, which allows us to radiate away our body heat. This means that excessive time or extreme environments won't stop our hunts.If the animal fights back against us, we can take massive damage to our extremities and lose half our blood, and still live. Our entire existence is owed to persistence, endurance, and determination. When we put ourselves to a task, it gets done, period. And this instinct is still affecting us today.
332 BC: Alexander the Great hits a stalemate with the fortified island city of Tyre. Instead of going back defeated, he builds a kilometer long bridge in order to raze the city.
49 BC: Caesar, after defeating the Gauls and invading Britain, turns a political fight into a civil war by invading Italy with only a single legion. He eventually becomes dictator, starting a world superpower whose engineering feats were only recently being broken when we left earth.
1804 AD:A charismatic French general declares himself Emperor and sets off to conquer much of mainland Europe. He is captured, exiled, and then escapes. The soldiers sent to recapture him instead lay down their arms and join him.
1961 AD: One man decides that we will go to the moon, despite much of the technology to do so not even existing yet. Just eight years later, two humans stand on the surface of the moon and look back upon the Earth.
2003 AD: A group of scientists mapped out the very building blocks of our species and made it possible to replicate it. Their first steps in that field made humans how they are today.
2032 AD: Advancements in the medical technologies came to a pinnacle when full body prosthetics were readily available to any and all persons of earth. Death by any means other than old age was now virtually impossible.
2057 AD: One man rose a corporation to such heights that it literally controlled the world's finances and thusly bought out all the world's governments. The owner forced all nations into one global government, and then just backed into the shadows as it took over and then faded into the shadows of history.
2105 AD: Realizing the impending collapse of earth's ecosystems, the previously uncooperative states that made up the Expanded Earth Government banded together to send the first of three massive colony ships out into space with a mere fraction of the then ten billion humans on the planet.
We made Railroads, Airplanes, Spaceflight,and the Internet. We made ourselves more machine than human and we built homes in the most brutal environments that nature has ever produced.
We are humans.
We fear no monsters or gods.
No, they fear us.’
We have already inherited the Earth and the stars and anyone or anything that stands in our way will be eliminated one way or another.
We forged our path from a dying planet more than 1400 light years away to what we hoped to be our new home.
We are a race of monsters, Princess, make no mistake. We are a violent, warlike race with technology far ourstripping anything your planet has ever seen. And we come in peace.”
When he had finished, Twilight found herself to be a little scared. “I don't mean to be rude or anything admiral but that was quite the intense……. lesson.” She said as she shakily tried to pick up her tea cup. It was then that she noticed that the admiral didn’t have a cup of tea, but rather a glass of a strange reddish brown liquid with a few cubes of ice in it.
“What are you drinking Admiral? That certainly does not look like tea.”
“No, my dear Princess, this is something far stronger. This is a glass of Armagnac Brandy, made in the traditional French style. This is one of the purist alcohols you can get aboard our vessels and is a pure luxury. Honestly, it is my first glass of it in over a century. Why, would you care for some?”
“You said it was alcohol? After what you just told me I do believe that it would help, so yes I will take one if you do not mind.”
“Very well, then let me pour you a glass and we can move on to the better parts of my race.” The admiral said, reaching beneath the table for the bottle.
that's one way to introduce the human race
Hmm, 21kps is awfully slow for an interstellar trip.
Not exactly the sort of introduction I would preface "we come in peace" with, myself, but YMMV I guess...?
6621648 all math on that is based on the voyager 1 spacecraft and the assumption that humans would make things faster as they went. they cut the travel time from 26 million years down to 20 million years. id say that shaving 6 million years off your voyage is pretty good.
6621692 while in the same time building a fleet of ships raising the population, having a civil war and that almost killed then all and then rebuilding...
THIS HAS GOT TO BE THE VERY BEST INTO TO THE HUMAN RACE. I FEel bad for Twilight tho, such a scary intro.
6625603 many things are made by 3d printing but the materials are still needed to forge the base to print. food is all bio matter. you will see more on that later. other things like metals are mined from asteroids and space debris. some of the most valuable resources are tungsten and carbon.
Peh.
Well, this was unfortunately the worst chapter so far. It was awkward all the way through, disjointed, and poorly formatted.
It had a few glaring problems, but one prime example is this:
Life expectancy and lifespan are the same thing. What the hell does that sentence even mean.
Secondly, the spiel you went into about 'the scary, scary humans'. It was terrible. I don't know if I'm more upset about the abuse of a cliche, or the sad tangents you delved into while abusing said cliche. He said he wants her to know about humans? He wants peaceful relations?
Fine. But immediately attempting to use obvious scare tactics, and yes they WERE scare tactics, is not how diplomacy works. Telling a race about your capabilities is one thing, making an effort to make them fear you and telling them next to nothing about your actual species is another. All he did was give her random information on some technological advancement, useless historical lessons for a species that has no readily available analog to compare to, and dramatized physiology . There was no emotion. No ambition. Just a cold, calculating desire on the author's behalf to spout endless rhetoric about 'the scary, scary humans'.
This is where I leave the story.
The Human ship is going 46,872 MPH if They are traveling a total distance of 1,400 Light Years in the time span of 20 million years.
*Math is rough estimate and done on calculator.
186,000*3,600
=669,600,000*24
=16,070,400,000*365
=5,865,696,000,000*1,400
=8,211,974,400,000,000/200,000,000
=410,589,720/365
=1,124,928/24
=46,872 MPH
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Yes, there are problems with the story's delivery. However, this statement is rather clear in its meaning and wouldn't necessarily be all that far fetched.
Average lifespan being 300 years, give or take is how long they would normally live if some artificial cause of death didn't kill them first. Accidents, wars, occasional plagues and the like kill most people before they're 45.
Look at our own history. Most history books go out of their way to point out the average life expectancy of people in the 1700s was like 30 or 40 years. But most of those that died did so before they were 5. Then there were things like accidents, crime, wars, more bugs like that which killed most folk before they were 5, more wars, etc. What isn't evident from those history books is that it wasn't all that uncommon for someone to live into their 90s -- Look at Benjamin Franklin, 84 when he died or John Adams, 90.
“Welcome, Princess. I hope I am not being too forward, but I have provided a refreshing cup of tea for (you. “ the) admiral said as he moved to pull out a large leather armchair for her.
“Welcome, Princess. I hope I am not being too forward, but I have provided a refreshing cup of tea for you”, the admiral said as he moved to pull out a large leather armchair for her.
(as) it stands now, from one cause or another, there are only 300 million of us.
As it stands now, from one cause or another, there are only 300 million of us.
We walk upright, we sweat, (we) don't have much body hair, which allows us to radiate away our body heat. This means that excessive time or extreme environments won't stop our (hunts.If) the animal fights back against us, we can take massive damage to our extremities and lose half our blood, and still live.
We walk upright, we sweat, and we don't have much body hair, which allows us to radiate away our body heat. This means that excessive time or extreme environments won't stop our hunts. If the animal fights back against us, we can take massive damage to our extremities and lose half our blood, and still live.
One man (rose) a corporation to such heights that it literally controlled the world's finances and thusly bought out all the world's governments.
One man raised a corporation to such heights that it literally controlled the world's finances and thusly bought out all the world's governments.
Don’t worry much about such minor typos. Just a few days ago, I wrote “leaf of bread” when I meant to write “loaf of bread”.
I would have written: “I’m sure you are asking yourself why humans have come to my home world? The answer is that many generations ago, human industry created climate change on my home world that caused a warming world, followed by another Ice Age. To save a fraction of humanity, my ancestors built a great spaceship, that later become a fleet of spaceships. My ancestors could have found a new home world sooner, but a number of hostile aliens have chased this fleet away from several promising worlds.”
“The universe is filled with life hostile to each other and to humans. For example, humans of my fleet have found a world that once supported life, but most of the surface was turned into molten magma by powerful weapons. It seems like several different species of aliens outside that world wanted that world for themselves and would not share it, so they made it uninhabitable by warfare. The fleet spent seven Earth years investigating the dead aliens’ technology found on the surface of that world, in orbit around that world, and around their solar system. Despite generations of research, some of that alien technology is still beyond our understanding. So, perhaps your scientists could examine those things sometime? We can work out a mutually beneficial agreement to share any benefits discovered by your scientists.”
“Human history is marked by good people and evil people. For myself, I would base my future actions with your species on American statesman and soldier George Marshall and create a new Marshall Plan that will create a new surface home for humans, while uplifting the natives of your world.”
“Humans have created medical science that decreases the fight or flight response of our reptilian brains and increased our influence of our logic frontal lobes. We are still having debates on how much change we humans should make to our brains and bodies, but that is for another time.”
Okay i would want to make out several points. Firstly, is my First Contact Protocol rules (Which is probably universal i think)
1. Any humans who have made contact with extra terrestrial, would have to give the authority to the government to continue further talks. Check
2. First contact meeting's would have to be of peace or war (depending on the situation) Check
3. Sum up the overall positive thing's about the human race, further talks would allow any diplomats to explain the aliens our dark past. Ummm, this is where it has it's overall problems at. He sums up the entirety of Mankind in a single talk.
A suggestion to this problem would be this.
"Good morning/afternoon/evening, (Diplomat or Head of State) my name is (State the person's name and authority plus their allegiance) We come in peace and would wish to form a joint cooperation of friendship between our people."
(Once communication and the language barrier is smashed, talk's would continue as planned)
"Though we have speculated the probability of your race's 'elites' talking about how 'unknown' our (name of race) is. So before we could form this pact of friendship, it is imperative that you must know the basic fact's about our species"
(Example: Humans)
"We originated from the planet of (Name of planet, in this case: Earth), (say how far it is from Earth: 1400 light years) and are hoping to colonise foreign planet's to continue our species survival. (or any goals, though in this case i would take the Idea of the story with me to help me) For thousands of year's, humanity has and always will be driven by curiosity, determination and conflict. (Tell them the current census of your species and possible, how long have they been a space-faring civilization?) We have achieved many technological advancements over the past thousands of years and each time we fall, we always rise 2 steps higher, due to the sheer determination of our species,"
"Of course our species isn't perfect; we have condoned many sins in our history and it will always have an everlasting impact to our race- both scientifically and militaristically. (explain a short bit about the downsides of your species.) We hope that this wouldn't be a problem for any further talks or encounters (offer them gifts to improve your image if thing's go south) As a token of our friendship, we would like you to have this. We hope that we can both co-exists peacefully."
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I think my first contact diplomacy talks is actually kind of shitty
Well... First Contact was not the best, but it is better than nothing I suppose.
for so many years and have not found a way to be non monsters? stupid
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What's wrong with being a monster? It is what represents us and there is nothing wrong with it, there will be peaceful species and other violent ones, it is part of nature.
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that was the gratifying thing a rather passive aggressive way of saying "we'll have peace whether you want it or not" and they're not really negotiating nor is it a diplomatic treaty it's kind of willing to crush another for control of their world whether they want to or not that simple is the same as the English and the natives of the USA