What everyone needs is an orgy just to have a night to let go. They could invite Twilight and Trixie and maybe Fluer. Afterwards, they may be more willing to talk about what is bothering them.
As for what happened in the chapter, I'm looking forward to what Selene does for her vacation. I'm hoping she meets Twilight who discovered what happened to the stallion she loved, I'm sure Twilight would be interested to learn about Tartarus.
Why does it feel that Luna and Celedtia arnt in love, it just seems like hey are sisters with benefits and its always been that way, it seems the love bit is forced which I hate.
Sorry it took me so long to get to this fic XD. I look forward to it though, this has truly been an amazing series. Although I wonder how the dying love between Tia and Luna, and Caddy and Shiny will be handled.
“Trixie has recently hired her to be my new agent.”
Trixie referring to herself in the first and third person in the same sentence is a little jarring.
Well, it is a delight to meet you miss Light,”
Since it is being used as an honorific, "Miss" should be capitalized here.
Summer continued, seemingly still oblivious.
Shortening Summer's' name to Summer is a... an interesting choice. ...Though seeing it there with the apostrophes on either end of the s, I can see why you made it. It would be easier with Summer's' possessives and the other things that would just look odd, weird, or silly with a possessive apostrophe s before it.
I do hope that we get to speak again before you get out of town.
"Get out of town" sounds more like a threat than an invitation. Perhaps "leave town"?
Trixie understands. Really understands. A long-distance relationship isn’t easy, but I’ve spent enough time on the road to make it easier to take.
“Rarity, what did Trixie tell you that first night? When I came to your boutique?”
It may not be the same sentence, but the third and first person speech pattern change is still a little jarring.
The lead mare nodded and lit up her horn.
Ha! Heteronyms.
The stayed that way for almost a full minute, staring at each other with a tender touch holding them together.
"They".
“Yes, quite a bit,” Luna answered. “The chef never fails to disappoint.”
I am not sure if you were trying to make Luna ironic or not, but "never fails to disappoint" means "always disappoints".
Celestia chuckled. “More than just think it, my love. You might think I’m the most beautiful mare in the world, but no pony—or griffin, or dragon, or anything—could ever hope to be as primally sexy as you are. You are not only gorgeous, but everything about you is just amazing. There is a raw sexuality to you that goes beyond simple words.”
This reminds me of that scene from Malcolm in the Middle where Lois realizes that Hal loves her more than she loves him. Hal has known for years he loves Lois more an she loves him and is okay with it because if she did love him as much as he loves her, they would never leave the bedroom. Celestia is Hal, of course.
As Luna pulled away, she paused for a moment to let her horn drag along the length of Celestia’s in an idyl caress.
"Idle". Or was it a very poetic caress?
The smile on her face grew steadily brighter.
And just out of view from Celestia, the smile that was on Luna’s face slowly faded away.
Chollima (or bat ponies as most still called them),
I thought they were called Thestrals...
I am glad to see this. I had no idea that this came out. I only found out about it a few days ago when I suggested to someone to read the Who Rules? saga. Just think, if I was not trying to get other people to read your stuff, I never would have found this. I am happy I did. Unfortunately, I am not sure when I will be able to get to the next two chapters. I know if I cannot get to the next chapter later tonight, I will not be able to get to it until at least Tuesday. However, I will get to it eventually.
*squees* Yes! New fic oh yes,yes,yes,yes, Yes!
What everyone needs is an orgy just to have a night to let go. They could invite Twilight and Trixie and maybe Fluer. Afterwards, they may be more willing to talk about what is bothering them.
As for what happened in the chapter, I'm looking forward to what Selene does for her vacation. I'm hoping she meets Twilight who discovered what happened to the stallion she loved, I'm sure Twilight would be interested to learn about Tartarus.
Hmm, what does the devil herself do for vacation?
And how will a Princess devoted to peace and harmony handle a place devoted to torment and despair?
oh shit that description , making things sound like they're going to get back to a 10 again....
Why does it feel that Luna and Celedtia arnt in love, it just seems like hey are sisters with benefits and its always been that way, it seems the love bit is forced which I hate.
Aww yeah, finally changelings being mentioned living in Canterlot.
Wow, that plan... Chryssie, you may want to rethink it.
Oooooh, Selene's back!
Cya
Raziel-chan
Sorry it took me so long to get to this fic XD. I look forward to it though, this has truly been an amazing series. Although I wonder how the dying love between Tia and Luna, and Caddy and Shiny will be handled.
Trixie referring to herself in the first and third person in the same sentence is a little jarring.
Since it is being used as an honorific, "Miss" should be capitalized here.
Shortening Summer's' name to Summer is a... an interesting choice. ...Though seeing it there with the apostrophes on either end of the s, I can see why you made it. It would be easier with Summer's' possessives and the other things that would just look odd, weird, or silly with a possessive apostrophe s before it.
"Get out of town" sounds more like a threat than an invitation. Perhaps "leave town"?
It may not be the same sentence, but the third and first person speech pattern change is still a little jarring.
Ha! Heteronyms.
"They".
I am not sure if you were trying to make Luna ironic or not, but "never fails to disappoint" means "always disappoints".
This reminds me of that scene from Malcolm in the Middle where Lois realizes that Hal loves her more than she loves him. Hal has known for years he loves Lois more an she loves him and is okay with it because if she did love him as much as he loves her, they would never leave the bedroom. Celestia is Hal, of course.
"Idle". Or was it a very poetic caress?
I thought they were called Thestrals...
I am glad to see this. I had no idea that this came out. I only found out about it a few days ago when I suggested to someone to read the Who Rules? saga. Just think, if I was not trying to get other people to read your stuff, I never would have found this. I am happy I did. Unfortunately, I am not sure when I will be able to get to the next two chapters. I know if I cannot get to the next chapter later tonight, I will not be able to get to it until at least Tuesday. However, I will get to it eventually.
Here is looking forward to further adventures.
~KBO.