I see, the link goes both ways between them, magic and mind...

Oh dear, Cadance with Chryssy's personality and vice versa...

6574979 Well, I'm very sorry to hear that you feel that way. I've tried very hard to make their relationship very real. It's complicated--to say the least--but they go through the ups and downs that any committed relationship will endure. At their core though, I feel that they have a true, binding love for each other.

Thanks for the feedback, still.

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Yeah...there's a chance that things are gonna get a little messy from that...

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Just the smallest of chances hmmm?

Celestia's rump sounds like it'll have some competition soon.

6583603 But still their relationship feels really off to me, I can't enjoy the story because it doesn't feel like they are in love. Plus I still have the feeling of a missed opportunity to turn this into Twilunestia, which would of fit absolutely perfectly for this kind of Story.

Yeah this series has inspired me to my own Princest story, but my one ends in tears and death because it's me, I don't like happy ending. But I am still not sure this story should keep going, it feels like it's been drawn out for the Princest (which feels very forced) and not the story.

But this is just my opinion.

6616425 I totally understand. And, for what it's worth, I am ending the series. This is the penultimate one. I'm just wanting to wrap up the plot threads that I have started. So, there is Riposte, and then one more after it, and then it is done. Much for the reasons you state, actually: I feel the story has run its course and it's time to bring it to a close.

And, btw, I am NEVER bothered by constructive criticism. I value it, actually.

Hahah, wow. Dat gun b gud.

And I wonder how will Selene react when she finds out what her arrival caused.

Cya
Raziel-chan

“Besides, who doesn’t like to eat sometimes?

needs end " marks.
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I'll actually be sad to see this series end. Unlike Derpy there I don't see it as forced. It's had a strong over-arching story, with the Princest thrown in there. That and we've still have yet to see Tirek. A conclusion on the Cold Heart story arc (What with the skin stealer there, and the Princess hate), there's still the Red Ling thing going on there. Things between Cadance and Shining Armor [that was brought up many stories ago], and there's still lots that can be worked out / done.

Still this is a good series, and if this is the penultimate one, I hope that it and the next one don't end to soon XD. Still you made quite the series, and it's been a good ride ^_^.

—though they did comes in a very close second—

The s is unneeded.

“Trixie hopes that the restaurant is good enough. It isn’t often that I go out to dinner. Mostly I eat backstage,”

Trixie knows that you like to be on display. And truthfully, I like to show off my prize possession,” she said with a wink. “Makes all of the other ponies rightfully jealous of Trixie.

“Trixie may be exaggerating slightly, but it seems that way, at least. Lots of ponies wanting to touch me as I walk past.” Trixie sighed. “I realize that Trixie is an impressive mare, but they should show restraint.”

The third to first person thing is still a little jarring.

The force of Rarity’s head hitting the table was strong enough to knock the champagne flute over, coating her hair in the sparkling wine, and slowly working it’s way to the edge of the table where it ran off to form a tiny puddle on the ground.

I have seen enough hentai to know where this is going.

Tisiphone held out her leg, holding the now half-empty bottle towards her new guest.

Poor girl is so depressed she tried to find solace at the bottom of several bottles.

She takes a deep breath. “It has been trying at times.”

You go into present tense here.

Mercysong pulled back far enough to allow herself to breath,

Missing e.

Twice more smaller loads shot out of Chrysalis’ cock, landing on Mercysong’s face, some of it finding its way into her open, panting mouth, which the nurse reflexively brought back with her tongue and swallowed down

"Twice" should be "two" and this sentence did not get its period, so it may be pregnant. (I will make that joke, whenever applicable, until the day I die.)

6617259 I am sad to see that this series is ending, but happy to know that this is not the last book. One more story to look forward to! Yay! Here is to hoping that that is a thing that happens!

I look forward to the part where Selene meets Cadance and Chrysalis.

~KBO.