The Duty of Love

by Midnight Sky2

Proposal

Spike and Rarity sat under a tree in the cool, damp grass. Spike had his arms around Rarity, her warm white fur practically glowing in the moon light. She looked up at him with her luminous eyes. His eyes met hers and he smiled.

It had been six years since they decided to be together, back when he was twelve and she was sixteen. He was now nineteen and she twenty four. He thought of the fond memories that they had shared. He had been smaller then, he had to look up to her, now she was looking up to him, he was just as tall as Celestia.

“Comfy My Lady?” he asked affectionately.

“Simply wonderful.” she said with a voice that reminded Spike of the smooth surface of a perfect gem. She broke the gaze and starred up at the night sky. Rarity hunkered down into Spikes warm embrace as they waited for the meteor shower to begin.

On a small knoll about fifty feet away sat another couple. It was Big Macintosh and Fluttershy; they had been together for about a month and were also on a date to watch the meteor shower. They sat curled up next to each other in the dew covered grass; helping to keep each other warm in the cool night air.

“Should start any minute now.” said Fluttershy softly. She was much more talkative around Big Mac because he was as shy as she was; he just chose not to show it.

“Eeyup.” he said plainly, looking up at the star laden sky. They turned to each other and blushed. It was their secret code for, “I love you.”

Back under the tree Spike and Rarity were talking about what to do afterwards. Rarity suggested that they go to Sugercube Corner and get some moon pies. Pinkie Pie only made them for meteor showers. Spike jumped at the suggestion; Pinkie Pie’s moon pies are wonderful.

Suddenly their conversation was interrupted by the first meteor streaking across the sky. It was soon joined by dozens more, flying, zipping, and glittering across the vast expanse of the night sky.

"Meteors showers always remind me of diamonds.” said Rarity in a dreamful state as she watched the great shimmering balls of light soar across the sky.

“Yeah. I wonder what they taste like?” asked Spike hungrily.

“Do you always think of eating gems?” giggled Rarity.

“No, but you’re the one that brought up the similarity.” said Spike. Rarity smiled. The meteor shower was nearing its most intense. Spike had to act now.

“Rarity.” he said breaking their embrace as he kneeled in front of her.

“Spike, what’s wrong?” asked Rarity worriedly, she didn’t know what was happening.

“Rarity, could you stand up please?” asked Spike nervously, blushing profusely. As she did so he took her right hoof. The worry faded off of her face and was replaced with an expression of pure joy as she caught on.

“Rarity. Ever since I met you I have dreamed of this moment.” tears began to fill the unicorn’s joyful eyes. “I’ve dreamed of holding you close, keeping you safe, being your shoulder to cry on, being your caring husband. Rarity, will you marry me?” asked Spike as he slipped a golden hoof band with an enormous diamond delicately onto his loves hoof. His hand shook with the nervousness.

“OF COURSE I WILL!” Rarity practically screamed as she tackled Spike and kissed him on the cheek. She was crying tears of joy. Spike returned her embrace, holding her in his big, scaly arms.

“Oh, Spike.” she gasped releasing Spike and looking at her wedding band. “Where ever did you get such an absolute master piece?”

“I made it myself.” said Spike humbly.

“Spike, it’s…it’s…it’s…magnificent.” gasped Rarity, still not over the shock of the proposal.

“Thanks. It took me two years to grow that diamond.”

“Oh Spike.” she gasped. She couldn’t think of anything else to say.

Suddenly all of their friends jumped out from behind the tree and shouted,“CONGRATULATIONS!” Spike and Rarity jumped and whipped around to see them standing there.

“You did good Spike.” said Twilight winking and smiling proudly at Spike. He blushed.

“Congratulations Rarity, Spike.” said Applejack, her emerald eyes luminescing in the pale white light.

“It’s about time. Congratulations guys.” laughed Rainbow Dash as she landed softly next to Applejack. Spike glared at Rainbow for her comment but she didn’t notice.

“Oh, Rarity. I’m so happy for you.” commented Fluttershy softly. The couple was still too shocked by the surprise congratulations to say anything.

“I’M SUPER EXCITED! WHENS THE WEDDING? CAN I PLAN THE RECEPTION?” asked Pinkie Pie as she bounced around the group excitedly.

“Th…th… thank you all.” Rarity managed to say through the utter shock of the moment.

“Yeah thanks.” said Spike lowering his head. They were both blushing.

“But, um. If you don’t mind we would like to be left alone for a while.” said Spike sincerely raising his bright green eyes to his friends.

“Oh, of course.” said Twilight thoughtfully. “Come on everypony let’s give them their space. See you at home Spike.” she smiled proudly at Spike and trotted off.

“See you guys.” said Rainbow and the cyan Pegasus flew up into the night sky.

“Good night everypony.” whispered Fluttershy as she headed for home.

“Good night y’all.” grunted Applejack.

“But we just got here.” inserted Pinkie Pie who could not understand why Spike and Rarity didn’t want to celebrate their engagement right then and there.

“Come along now Pinkie. Give ‘em their space.” ordered Applejack as she dragged the stumped pink mare away by her large, poofy tail. Spike and Rarity giggled. That was so much like Pinkie.

The couple stared back up at the sky. The meteor shower was over. They went to Sugercube Corner and had some moon pies then Spike escorted Rarity home and then he went home to his bed to get some much needed rest.

Comments

[Red Glare]

So far so good brony. If I could make a few suggestions though:

1) Slow down with the discription of events. It seemed to me everything was happening too fast.
2) Add more detail. The more detail the better at least in my book.

Other than that I love what you have here friend. This deserves a favorite and a good old fashioned MOAR!

[McSqueakers]

You really need to expand. 1000 words may be a minimum, but it doesn't mean that if you have 1000 words, then you'll have a story.
There needs to be more emotions. More build up.
And the rest of the group popping up out of nowhere kills whatever mood there was. If that wasn't enough, the last sentence is ridiculously condensed. You wrote the events of a couple of hours in one sentence. It almost looks like something you'd find in a trollfic.
Seriously. Expand. One of the worst things a writer can do is rush to the part they want to write about. The build up suffers for that.

[Kenseirabbit]

I like what you did but for something this big....Well I didn't feel happy here. It was like watching one of those really old films that are sped up... It happened to fast and there wasn't enough emotion to it...

[discord7]

I agree with redglare, it does need a bit more details. eloquence is the key but I do like where the story is heading, I would have liked to see some kind of a cliff hanger at the end of a chapter though. I'll be watching. btw I notice you have a few spelling and grammar errors, don't worry I do the same thing when I het excited to write my fics too. just slow down a bit when you write and look over your work before you publish. I give it a TU

[deathtap]

D'aaaaaaaaaaaw.

Just wish there wasn't a 'Sad' and 'Tragedy' tag to this. Fav'd. I will thumb it up or down depending on how much I enjoy/abhor it. Good luck!

[Verbose Soubriquet]

So far so good.
I understand why this first chapter was short. You did not even know if people would like this.
Cannot wait for the next chapter.

[Link2541]

excellent. IT's so awesome /)(\ just needs more detail, like what everyone else says. MOAR!!!!!!!

[PeaceColt112]

Well, it's well written, substantial, and well narrated. You might wanna done down the whole rush, it feels like an action movie and not like a tender romance. all in all, you got me intrigued. I liked and tracked

[Arcturus115]

good job, but i agree with the majority of the comments. Take things slowly, describe any event that has even a pinch of importance to the story with a lot"of detail. Remember, nothing in a story can be "useless" every part of the story needs to be doing something, such as building emotional tension, foreshadowing, comic relief, character building, etc., etc. You want to make the reader sympathize and feel for the main character. Even though you know what the character is supposed to be feeling, the words have to convey that. You might want to get someone to proofread each chapter, and have them tell you what they think is happening to the story and the characters, that way you know you are getting across what you want to get across. Still, really good story, an amazing concept, and good descriptions. It just needs a little more.

I'm not saying your a bad writer, or that you made mistakes, I'm saying there is always room to improve, even among the best writers.
have some mustaches

[Path_of_cloud]

Add a extra enter after each paragraph it'll do wonders for the wall of text feeling. A little more would have been nice, it felt a little awkward they asked to be left alone just to get up and walk to Sugarcube Corner and see Pinkie anyways. I also would of loved some sort of explanation to how their friends knew I expected a Pinkie sense shout out honestly.

Over all I like the idea, I like the emotion, I love the Sparity, the begging of the chapter came out really great, but the end needs work. Still I think you have the potential for something really great here.

[Midnight Sky2]

sorry bout the rush. But I didn't know if anyone would like the idea. I am working on adding detail to chapter 2 though.

[AuditumMannis]

Will read later.

When this is finished, it will be in one of my narrating videos.

Please make it as good as you can, my series practically cries for a sad story now and then.

Good work btw,

AuditumMannis

[HighRoller]

I enjoyed reading this, but I agree with most of the sentiments regarding added detail. Even so, I like the little nod to FlutterMac there. :)

[Cows With Guns]

I like it, but may I suggest that you add some paragraphs. On more than one occaision I found myself loosing my spot because of the giant wall of text.