<-- That thing. Maybe pick up something more iconic than ponycreator. Unique, so people can recognize you at a glance. Part of getting recognition. You deserve some more attention, with stories like this.
“You are my Goddess.” Twilight said as her body continued to shiver.
“Just because it makes you put your knees to your ears and say ‘oh, Gods’ doesn’t make it a religious experience, Twilight.”
On a serious note though, how is this sitting on 34-3? That would mean maybe a few hundred views tops, barely any exposure at all. You honestly deserve much better.
“You are my Goddess.” Twilight said as her body continued to shiver.
“Just because it makes you put your knees to your ears and say ‘oh, Gods’ doesn’t make it a religious experience, Twilight.”
“I’m pretty sure I saw the face of God.”
“I hope not. My dad watching us have sex would be mildly disturbing.”
her dad is god? and that would be mildly disturbing. could it not be her mom? dont forget that god is some omnipotent being that does not have a gender.
Twilight rolled away from her as Celestia collapsed onto the bed. She spread a wing and drew Twilight close to her, giving her a peck on the cheek. Twilight snuggled into her wing.
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You forget in a world of physical deities. Like every Alicorn ever, and Discord. Deities have gender, so her dad would be God if not a God. That simply decided to say "Buck it! You mortals are on your own, and Tia no sending your sister to a sororicidal rampage. You know how she gets when you steal the last cookie from the cookie jar." Then left.
With their mom having left ages ago because the Heavenly Planes have the best spas, and she decided to take a Spa Eon (like a spa day, but lasting a billion years.).
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This was very sweet. Also loved the 'bellyrubs' reference...
This was actually kinda heart-warming. Could use some work on a couple of typos, and you totally need a new avatar image, but I liked the story.
6164825 Thanks for the review. I couldn't find a Safe-for-work cover for this story.
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I meant your actual avatar.
<-- That thing. Maybe pick up something more iconic than ponycreator. Unique, so people can recognize you at a glance. Part of getting recognition. You deserve some more attention, with stories like this.
I enjoyed this. Helped brighten up my rather dreary world. Definitely putting this diamond in the rough up on my bookshelf.
On a serious note though, how is this sitting on 34-3? That would mean maybe a few hundred views tops, barely any exposure at all. You honestly deserve much better.
" forearms"
I've been looking for something like this for my "clop library" for quite some time.
This right here... this was truly wonderful...
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Best part ever.
her dad is god? and that would be mildly disturbing. could it not be her mom? dont forget that god is some omnipotent being that does not have a gender.
From here on down needs indentations.
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You forget in a world of physical deities. Like every Alicorn ever, and Discord. Deities have gender, so her dad would be God if not a God. That simply decided to say "Buck it! You mortals are on your own, and Tia no sending your sister to a sororicidal rampage. You know how she gets when you steal the last cookie from the cookie jar." Then left.
With their mom having left ages ago because the Heavenly Planes have the best spas, and she decided to take a Spa Eon (like a spa day, but lasting a billion years.).
So far- Very great!