743086 hay if you want to get the comment and return to go through then there is a little box with double speach bubbles in it that you can click that'll put up >>[insert random post number] this will basically reply to the person and notify them that you've replyed to them my reply to you consists of>>[743086] excluding brackets will turn into >>Ecko7 which basically is the reply. also to add on to what tailsopony said about readability if you want your paragraphs to be easyer for the reader to understand read and like rather than be overwealmed by what they think is a massive wall of garbled unmodified raw text then you might want to double space your paragraphs
as for the story the muse is awsome i really hope you continue it also i do wonder how your taking these simple engrish lessons i mean i suck at new languages, i try japanese but fail i'm doing somewhat good at the dead language that is latin other languages i've tried was deutsch and russian русский(Russisch) anyway my forayes into foreign languages has been quite appealing and fun. anyway another way to unconsiousely improve your grammar is to read plenty of works written in the english language. if you need a pre reader there are plenty of people here willing to help. otherwise your doing fine other than the ocasional gaff here or there which can easily be pointed out otherwise there really isn't much to worry about so please keep up the good work also theres not enough nmm fiction in this world.
hopefully i dont come off as condescending or worse... sry if i do. i only wish to help ja
Edit: finally on the last chapter gah my eyes i might have a head aich for a few days but it shall be worth it.
Edit#2: finished damn eyes i want to rip them out ...bloody friggin headaich anyway good story so far if you want help with grammar and spelling send me a pm
I glanced over the story and i am sorry to say i wont be reading it i can deal with bad grammar but the formatting is just horrible. break up the walls of text and i will come back to it.
I will say that I like the idea of the Story, there is -not- enough Nightmare Moon fics out there, and I will give you a like for it. However, if I were to judge the story on it's quality, I would give it a dislike, due to the fact that the main bits of the story is one, great big WALL-O-TEXT, make spaces between the paragraphs! And a few grammar issues, but I wont complain much on that, due to it being your secondary language. Good luck Comrade.
sweet celestia you've made tremendous improvements to the first chapter good job and congratulations i also no longer need Alvera for the eyes so that's another plus your working your way up friend grats now i cant wait for the next chapter to come out
I've to say, when you first released the story, while I found the concept somewhat interesting, the unedited writing made me to lose almost all interest in following this story. After finding the story again I don't know what drove me to check it out again, and I've to say I'm glad to have given it a second chance. A proper editing makes a big difference, as of this comment posting date it's still noticeable on the rather abrupt change from the first two chapters to the third, I'll be waiting for the updated version of that one. It's unfortunate that the previous rating and pre-edit comments will probably keep some people from even giving a fair chance, but personally I'll be watching were are you taking it. On another note, “Just... Nightmare is fine for right now, Twilight,” while I don't expect Nightmare Moon to start calling herself Luna, wouldn't it be more appropriated to ask Twilight to call her Moon, or even the full Nightmare Moon instead of Nightmare? I mean, the nightmare part of the name probably came from a desire to intimidate those who didn't love her night, with her "new" personality, one more akin to Luna, if what Celestia think she saw on her eyes is true, asking to be called Nightmare alone seems a little odd to me.
Great opportunity for a rebound relationship. I'm gonna laugh if Celestia discovers her feelings for Twilight were more than familial after seeing her and Nightmare making out, only to realize her chances are completely shot. Hope to see this one updated soon!
3547031 Celestia was pretty much in a state of panic when she struck Twilight. A lot of people out are guilty of doing things that they normally wouldn't do when they were in a state of panic.
Im liking this......and maid idea...>.>....but grammar .....im not that nitpicky about it but yea the grammar..
>> Trot C. Foxy
I tried, i tried....
743086 hay if you want to get the comment and return to go through then there is a little box with double speach bubbles in it that you can click that'll put up >>[insert random post number] this will basically reply to the person and notify them that you've replyed to them my reply to you consists of>>[743086] excluding brackets will turn into >>Ecko7 which basically is the reply. also to add on to what tailsopony said about readability if you want your paragraphs to be easyer for the reader to understand read and like rather than be overwealmed by what they think is a massive wall of garbled unmodified raw text then you might want to double space your paragraphs
as for the story the muse is awsome i really hope you continue it also i do wonder how your taking these simple engrish lessons i mean i suck at new languages, i try japanese but fail i'm doing somewhat good at the dead language that is latin other languages i've tried was deutsch and russian русский(Russisch) anyway my forayes into foreign languages has been quite appealing and fun. anyway another way to unconsiousely improve your grammar is to read plenty of works written in the english language. if you need a pre reader there are plenty of people here willing to help. otherwise your doing fine other than the ocasional gaff here or there which can easily be pointed out otherwise there really isn't much to worry about so please keep up the good work also theres not enough nmm fiction in this world.
hopefully i dont come off as condescending or worse... sry if i do. i only wish to help ja
Edit: finally on the last chapter gah my eyes i might have a head aich for a few days but it shall be worth it.
Edit#2: finished damn eyes i want to rip them out ...bloody friggin headaich anyway good story so far if you want help with grammar and spelling send me a pm
I glanced over the story and i am sorry to say i wont be reading it i can deal with bad grammar but the formatting is just horrible. break up the walls of text and i will come back to it.
743086 one question do you plan on still updating this story?
>>Xaldon ajide
Yes, i will updating, i only have a lot to do. I continiue so fast i can.
Ecko. I am Heavy Weapons Guy,
I will say that I like the idea of the Story, there is -not- enough Nightmare Moon fics out there, and I will give you a like for it.
However, if I were to judge the story on it's quality, I would give it a dislike, due to the fact that the main bits of the story is one, great big WALL-O-TEXT, make spaces between the paragraphs! And a few grammar issues, but I wont complain much on that, due to it being your secondary language. Good luck Comrade.
sweet celestia you've made tremendous improvements to the first chapter good job and congratulations i also no longer need Alvera for the eyes so that's another plus your working your way up friend grats now i cant wait for the next chapter to come out
cheers
I've to say, when you first released the story, while I found the concept somewhat interesting, the unedited writing made me to lose almost all interest in following this story. After finding the story again I don't know what drove me to check it out again, and I've to say I'm glad to have given it a second chance. A proper editing makes a big difference, as of this comment posting date it's still noticeable on the rather abrupt change from the first two chapters to the third, I'll be waiting for the updated version of that one. It's unfortunate that the previous rating and pre-edit comments will probably keep some people from even giving a fair chance, but personally I'll be watching were are you taking it.
On another note, “Just... Nightmare is fine for right now, Twilight,” while I don't expect Nightmare Moon to start calling herself Luna, wouldn't it be more appropriated to ask Twilight to call her Moon, or even the full Nightmare Moon instead of Nightmare? I mean, the nightmare part of the name probably came from a desire to intimidate those who didn't love her night, with her "new" personality, one more akin to Luna, if what Celestia think she saw on her eyes is true, asking to be called Nightmare alone seems a little odd to me.
Interesting continue
great chapter i like Moonlight more then Twilestia
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I've wanted to change Nightmare Moon's name for a little while, but that's up to Ecko7.
been 34 weeks since my last post MOAR
Great opportunity for a rebound relationship. I'm gonna laugh if Celestia discovers her feelings for Twilight were more than familial after seeing her and Nightmare making out, only to realize her chances are completely shot. Hope to see this one updated soon!
ouch much , that didn't seem right at all though , pretty sure celestia wouldn't hit twi no matter what she did.....
3547031
Celestia was pretty much in a state of panic when she struck Twilight. A lot of people out are guilty of doing things that they normally wouldn't do when they were in a state of panic.
Ok, this might be because I haven't read the 1st chapter in a while, but why are the quotations italicized?
5112786 simple its how this author writes dialogue