This was... interesting. Am I right in assuming that all of the Mane 6 will encounter the Moaning Crown at some point?
Because that seems a bit predictable. Maybe throw some other ponies into the mix. Like, say, Zecora. Maybe she knows about the Moaning Crown, and regularly... contributes?
I enjoy your story, it's really something that brings... the most inner feelings out. And I hope that, as has been said, more ponies besides the mane 6 are involved.
Now, though. I understand why do you do it, but honestly, the constant repetition about how the plant is safe and harmless kill it for me a little. It would be good to simply delve into the situation without care for nothing. I know you've been criticized for it, but with a story like this... Let it go wild! If they can't take it...
Skillfully done! Although I have to agree with Flutterash, the bulb seems to...nice I guess I could say. Maybe giving it more of an aggressive side could liven it up a bit. Or perhaps giving the (unfortunate?) characters more willingness to escape, even if they are finding the plant a bit alluring.
I would also think of adding some other characters to get "touched" by the Moaning Crown, like Lyra, Trixie, even Derpy possibly. Or you could go out on a limb and put in a male character, although the plant would have to be changed due to...certain characteristics. Even so, it would make it interesting to let ponies, besides the mane 6, interact with the plant.
I have to agree with Flutterash, and -Dragonwing- more aggression. I personally found the rainbow dash one the hottest of the three for that reason exactly.
884391 or maybe the plant just interact with males in a different way? maybe the first vines are just to see if its male or female and to see what way to continue? or maybe there is a different type of the same plant that feed from males insed of females? the posibilitys are just endless!
That is true, the plants we have seen so far seem to be...built I guess, for females (male plant?). Could there be a Technical female plant for a male victim? Could be. In any case, I think we'll have to wait and see what the author has in store. There are a lot of possibilities for the author to work with.
881247 I know, right? What a [Buy some [KIWI]s] tragedy it is. [youtube=jKBevaIttKA] ((to anypony that doesn't get the reference. also, Molestia is best pony, though those 1k hours must have been unbearable.))
Bout time
Loved it as always!!!
This was... interesting. Am I right in assuming that all of the Mane 6 will encounter the Moaning Crown at some point?
Because that seems a bit predictable. Maybe throw some other ponies into the mix. Like, say, Zecora. Maybe she knows about the Moaning Crown, and regularly... contributes?
The PEACH-furred Applebloom?!!
NEVER characterize an Apple filly using any other fruit!!
(I don't really care, but AJ or Bloom would probably react like that.)
881156 i was thinking of the ailcorn goddess my self but who knows
>weird but fun
lol
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Because apple-furred Applebloom just sounds silly.
I'm wondering what happens when a stallion get's caught in it. Blarg.
By using the law of indeterminacy, i figured this story would be getting updated soon since.
Wow who is next...
and nothing bad could cum if this could it
This is new... Innocent Pinkie?
Most make her out to be an mistress that enjoys taking command or just a sex starving slut to put it mildly...
I enjoy your story, it's really something that brings... the most inner feelings out. And I hope that, as has been said, more ponies besides the mane 6 are involved.
Now, though. I understand why do you do it, but honestly, the constant repetition about how the plant is safe and harmless kill it for me a little. It would be good to simply delve into the situation without care for nothing. I know you've been criticized for it, but with a story like this... Let it go wild! If they can't take it...
883082 Advice fully taken.
Skillfully done! Although I have to agree with Flutterash, the bulb seems to...nice I guess I could say. Maybe giving it more of an aggressive side could liven it up a bit. Or perhaps giving the (unfortunate?) characters more willingness to escape, even if they are finding the plant a bit alluring.
I would also think of adding some other characters to get "touched" by the Moaning Crown, like Lyra, Trixie, even Derpy possibly. Or you could go out on a limb and put in a male character, although the plant would have to be changed due to...certain characteristics. Even so, it would make it interesting to let ponies, besides the mane 6, interact with the plant.
I have to agree with Flutterash, and -Dragonwing- more aggression. I personally found the rainbow dash one the hottest of the three for that reason exactly.
Story is good though! Can't wait for the others!
881247 well he could have typed "Pale, light grayish olive" like the MLP wiki says.
884391 or maybe the plant just interact with males in a different way? maybe the first vines are just to see if its male or female and to see what way to continue? or maybe there is a different type of the same plant that feed from males insed of females? the posibilitys are just endless!
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That is true, the plants we have seen so far seem to be...built I guess, for females (male plant?). Could there be a Technical female plant for a male victim? Could be. In any case, I think we'll have to wait and see what the author has in store. There are a lot of possibilities for the author to work with.
889268 Aquatic and land one. now we just need a flying one for no reason.
I was waiting for my favorite pony. And I laughed so much realizing that she had no idea what sex was
And then she ran out of oxygen and died. The end!
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I LOL'd, I LOL'd a lot.
881247
I know, right? What a [Buy some [KIWI]s] tragedy it is.
[youtube=jKBevaIttKA]
((to anypony that doesn't get the reference. also, Molestia is best pony, though those 1k hours must have been unbearable.))
This plant sure knows how to have a wayto get what it needs and make sure to make its foodscorce return for more