Twilight journeys to Deerheim, an icy land ruled by proud reindeer warriors, to persuade them to stop raiding northern Equestria in their longships. On her mission, she forms a very intimate relationship with the reindeer king and queen.
Yes, this is short, but it's put me in a better mood than the majority of recent clopfics have. You can definitely tack a full plot onto this and create a stronger story. Fill in many more details and tell us why she went there and how they deal with things afterwards.
Your first clop is fine and you can make it finer if you choose to expand it, but that's up to you.
5920395 The moment caribou are in a story it would have the dark tags :P.
3540353 I think you should expand this story. What I would realy like to read is more about why she went there, her arrival and meeting with the king and queen.
Reindeer that are gender-equal (or female dominated, depending on how you read their relationship) and enjoy vanilla and proper courting. For that alone, the story gets a fave and an upvote from me.
I'm wondering: Did you write this with FoE in mind? Some things in the story seem like deliberate aversions or subversions, others almost like shout-outs (like when Furrypants fantasizes about raiding Canterlot).
59203955924095 I shall continue it! I'm going to backtrack to Twilight receiving the mission to act as ambassador to Deerheim, then her journey there, then this scene, and then pick up the story from here. This scene was the first thing I imagined, so I wanted to get it out there before expanding the story and world.
I don't know anything about caribou in FoE (and am very happy to keep it that way). These reindeer are inspired by historical records (and pseudo-historical depictions) of real-world Vikings, so murder and slavery and rape are going to rate a mention, but it's certainly not what this story is about, and I intend to keep the story free of any need for the Dark tag.
5924168 He's named Furrypants because he's basically the reindeer version of Ragnar Loðbrok, whose name means "Hairy Breeches". In-universe, he wears pants made from a bear pelt, because he's a badass that way. Storm Crow is based on Aslaug (aka Kráka, "crow"), a very wise and mystical figure who was Ragnar's third wife according to some legends.
5924513 The gender politics of my reindeer are complicated, and there are much more culturally defined roles for each gender than there are in Equestria. But does are certainly not oppressed, no, and they have certain rights that bucks don't (more on that as the story progresses). Nothing to do with FoE, just Viking stuff.
Glad you're enjoying it, gang! I'm certainly enjoying writing it.
She felt Furrypants thrusting into her for a few more moments before he let out a great grunt and held himself tightly against her for several seconds. His hooves gripped her flanks painfully hard, but she was beyond caring about pain. Soon, she felt him withdrawing from her, and his grip softened, turning to a warm embrace.
I'd normally expect a more explicit reference to him cumming there.
5925303 I like your version of the reindeer with a Vikings warrior and survivalist mindset that seek adventures in your story kinda remind me of the deers in Fallout Equestria: The Tartarus Contingency in the last chapter and like this pic: derpicdn.net/img/view/2014/6/28/663267__safe_solo_oc_oc+only_fallout+equestria_deer_tribal_artist-colon-thatdarnpony.png concept on the female variant of a deer in FOE. They're mostly nocturnal, as they have this fear of Luna. They say she causes them to go slowly mad during night-time dreams, attempting to convince them to do horribly violent things against others. Thus they wear dreamcatchers to stop her from entering their thoughts and avoid sleeping at night, when Luna was supposedly strongest. Then again, they are so survival minded they skin their dead and use them as clothing. Kind of like pseudo-cannibalism. Yikes.
I've deviated from real-life reindeer in a few ways. One is nomenclature - I just feel that buck and doe sound better than bull and cow, which bring to mind cattle rather than deer. Also, real reindeer cows do have antlers, though smaller than those of bulls. I made my reindeer does without antlers because it's an important social and magical distinction between the sexes.
Blood Eagle's antlers could block Twilight's blast-style spells, which is how a lot of her spells look in the show. Using levitation or teleportation would depend on whether the aura of her magic would contact his antlers and be absorbed. It was a matter of trial and error for Twilight, never having fought a reindeer before, and she probably would have tried an indirect levitation attack if her flying loop stun ray attack hadn't worked.
6113363 So... if their nomenclature is buck and doe... and the females don't have antlers... how are they reindeer and not just, you know, regular deer?
Oh, thank GOD it wasn't a fucking caribou!
(I had my concerns when I saw 'Reindeer'.)
Yes, this is short, but it's put me in a better mood than the majority of recent clopfics have. You can definitely tack a full plot onto this and create a stronger story. Fill in many more details and tell us why she went there and how they deal with things afterwards.
Your first clop is fine and you can make it finer if you choose to expand it, but that's up to you.
Twilight got bent over by a reindeer...
5920395 The moment caribou are in a story it would have the dark tags :P.
3540353 I think you should expand this story. What I would realy like to read is more about why she went there, her arrival and meeting with the king and queen.
i havnt read this story ....yet ...maby but i understand why this reindeer king is ruthless and bloodthirsty..
he just hates his parents SERIOUSLY? king FLUFFYPANTS!!!!
your parents must hate you something bad to name you fluffypants
(oh god it hurts to breath)
Reindeer that are gender-equal (or female dominated, depending on how you read their relationship) and enjoy vanilla and proper courting. For that alone, the story gets a fave and an upvote from me.
I'm wondering: Did you write this with FoE in mind? Some things in the story seem like deliberate aversions or subversions, others almost like shout-outs (like when Furrypants fantasizes about raiding Canterlot).
I'll be right back. Class starts soon.
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Oh god... I can't breathe....
5920395 5924095 I shall continue it! I'm going to backtrack to Twilight receiving the mission to act as ambassador to Deerheim, then her journey there, then this scene, and then pick up the story from here. This scene was the first thing I imagined, so I wanted to get it out there before expanding the story and world.
I don't know anything about caribou in FoE (and am very happy to keep it that way). These reindeer are inspired by historical records (and pseudo-historical depictions) of real-world Vikings, so murder and slavery and rape are going to rate a mention, but it's certainly not what this story is about, and I intend to keep the story free of any need for the Dark tag.
5923760 And his wife helped!
5924168 He's named Furrypants because he's basically the reindeer version of Ragnar Loðbrok, whose name means "Hairy Breeches". In-universe, he wears pants made from a bear pelt, because he's a badass that way. Storm Crow is based on Aslaug (aka Kráka, "crow"), a very wise and mystical figure who was Ragnar's third wife according to some legends.
5924513 The gender politics of my reindeer are complicated, and there are much more culturally defined roles for each gender than there are in Equestria. But does are certainly not oppressed, no, and they have certain rights that bucks don't (more on that as the story progresses). Nothing to do with FoE, just Viking stuff.
Glad you're enjoying it, gang! I'm certainly enjoying writing it.
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Well, your reindeer are certainly far closer to the actual historical vikings than FoE's caribou are.
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Very glad you're enjoying writing it. I just didn't want the early influx of downvotes to influence your mind on writing more.
Okay, I liked just for Fuzzypants not pushing her to do it. Also for the sheer grin worthiness of his name.
Are they compatible? Is she part of his herd now? Will Twilight return home walking funny? God so many questions!
That was cute. I like these reindeer.
I'd normally expect a more explicit reference to him cumming there.
Pretty nice overall.
Very nice story. Well done. Surprised it doesn't have more likes.
The tone reminded me a lot of "In the Garden of Good and Evil".
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Oh damn, you're turning this into a story?
Well I loved the one-shot, so I can't wait to see where you're gonna go with this.
5925303
I like your version of the reindeer with a Vikings warrior and survivalist mindset that seek adventures in your story kinda remind me of the deers in Fallout Equestria: The Tartarus Contingency in the last chapter and like this pic:
derpicdn.net/img/view/2014/6/28/663267__safe_solo_oc_oc+only_fallout+equestria_deer_tribal_artist-colon-thatdarnpony.png
concept on the female variant of a deer in FOE.
They're mostly nocturnal, as they have this fear of Luna. They say she causes them to go slowly mad during night-time dreams, attempting to convince them to do horribly violent things against others. Thus they wear dreamcatchers to stop her from entering their thoughts and avoid sleeping at night, when Luna was supposedly strongest.
Then again, they are so survival minded they skin their dead and use them as clothing. Kind of like pseudo-cannibalism. Yikes.
Finally got around to reading the new chapter/expansion. I think I love this story already.
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Thank you, I'm glad you're enjoying it!
I've deviated from real-life reindeer in a few ways. One is nomenclature - I just feel that buck and doe sound better than bull and cow, which bring to mind cattle rather than deer. Also, real reindeer cows do have antlers, though smaller than those of bulls. I made my reindeer does without antlers because it's an important social and magical distinction between the sexes.
Blood Eagle's antlers could block Twilight's blast-style spells, which is how a lot of her spells look in the show. Using levitation or teleportation would depend on whether the aura of her magic would contact his antlers and be absorbed. It was a matter of trial and error for Twilight, never having fought a reindeer before, and she probably would have tried an indirect levitation attack if her flying loop stun ray attack hadn't worked.
6113363 So... if their nomenclature is buck and doe... and the females don't have antlers... how are they reindeer and not just, you know, regular deer?