When I finally shed my stone mold I’m going to have to really hold myself back from shoving my foot up the royal sisters’ royal asses.
Have you ever had a moment where after you made a decision you wonder if it was the right one to make? Said moment has been plaguing my mind for the past 20 odd years now. You see, the reason I’m encased in stone right now is because I let the royal sisters use the elements of harmony on me. Now, you may be asking yourself why I would let myself get imprisoned. Well… it was actually the best course of action. It all started back wh-
“Ms. Cherilee, what’s this statue?” said a rather obnoxiously squeaky voice.
Well I’ll be dammed, my 1500 plus some odd years plan might actually yield something. I wonder if they quarreled in front of Discord yet.
Quickly shifting my attention to the resident draconequus, I was happy to find cracks beginning to form along Discord’s frame. It would only be a matter of time before he could finally escape. Returning my attention to the squeaky voice I found Cherilee’s class gathered around my statue.
“This statue, Sweetie Bell, is Tactician. He was once a powerful user of elemental magic, able to bend wind and fire as well as other elements,” Explained the teacher
You make it sound like I’m from that weird anime, what’s it called… Avalar I think? Something like that.
“What truly made Tactician so dangerous, however, was not his magic, but his mind. He was considered to have one of the most brilliant minds of the era. In the past, he time and time again outwitted both of the princesses and the entirety of the royal guard,” continued Cherilee.
The entire class gazed upon my statue with awe, amazed that something could be smarter than their princesses.
It really wasn’t that hard to outthink them actually. They had a surprisingly one track mind during most of our early encounters. Wait… I just realized my statue is named after my field of expertise.
…
Well… I suppose it could be worse. Just goes to show how lazy Sun Butt and Moony are though.
“What’s that thing he’s holding?” Asked a random background pony nobody really cares about.
“That,” Cherilee began, “Is his weapon of choice. It supposedly holds the power of lightning within its metal.”
Ah yes, the Levin sword. It was currently pointed outwards towards the distance, the entire blade jagged, made to look like a bolt of lightning. Of course, the sword wasn’t the only thing I currently had on my person. I also had one of my tomes open in my palm, a seemingly random page selected. I was wearing a robe over of a plain looking shirt. The robe itself was black in color and reached just a little past my knees. I was also wearing some heavy duty boots, the kind perfectly suited for uneven terrain. I personally loved my look and wouldn’t change it for anything.
The teacher suddenly stomped on the ground with her front hooves, getting the attention of her students, “Alright class, this concludes our tour of the gardens. Let’s head on over to Donut Joe’s for a snack before taking the train back to Ponyville.”
A bunch of happy foals soon left the gardens, allowing silence to permeate the air once more. Said silence didn’t last long though as the audible sounds of cracking begin to pierce the air.
*Crack*
*Crack* *Crack*
Well, time for the moment of truth. Let’s see if I can pull this off and not screw it up. I never was the best at conversing.
Stone shards began raining down upon the wildlife as Discord finally broke free of his stony home. I mentally rolled my eyes at his antics, watching as he began stretching his body at odd angles that would normally kill a… well… normal being. Chaos soon followed with a snap of the draconequus’s claws as the grass suddenly became a checkerboard of mismatched colors. Trying to ignore the eye strain I mentally shouted in the direction of Discord.
Oi, Discord! I have a proposition for you I think you’ll want to hear!
I got the reaction I wanted as Discord’s head turned a full 180 towards my statue. He disappeared in a flash of white only to re-materialize before me, examining me closely.
“Well now… I don’t think I’ve ever seen a creature like you before!” He concluded, pulling out a pair of glasses from somewhere and placing them on his face.
I’m not exactly from around here. I, however, know quite a lot about you, master of chaos, and deity of bedlam.
“Oh stop it, you’re making me blush!” He exclaimed, fluttering his eyes at me. I internally grinned; glad to see I was making some progress.
What can I say, I respect your work. Which is why I wish to present a deal that is simply too sweet for you to refuse.
I could see the gears turning behind his eyes. He was most likely wondering if he should take me seriously or not. I need him to take the bait; it could be my only chance out of this hell.
“I suppose I can listen to whatever deal you have to offer me. Please do make it quick though, I have some wonderful chaos I need to spread,” He exclaimed, showering the area with confetti and cotton candy.
Let me free, if you should fall.
Discord furrowed his brow, my so called deal making little sense to him. I needed to pursue this, the time frame isn’t large and I can’t afford any mistakes.
Let’s say you make a mistake in your quest for spreading chaos. Use me as the backup plan. Should you be defeated, release me from my stone prison. I can promise you that my presence alone will cause panic among both the royal sisters and the guard. It will be quite… chaotic.
Discord's eyes were practically glowing with mischief as I finished my explanation. I had hooked him, now all I needed to do was reel in the prize.
“I must say I like you line of thinking. Usually I just wing it,” I cringed a bit when he said that, “But perhaps some insurance would be helpful this time.” With that he snapped his fingers and I began to feel chaos magic settle against my statue. I shuddered as the magic film set and hardened, locking on to my own magical identity.
Proud with his work Discord waved goodbye before exploding into a shower of toads, the croaking mass scattering among the foliage. Because of the wonderful karma I have, I was horribly surprised when one latched onto my statue’s face, rending my vision useless.
… I think he’s mocking me…
As I suspected, Discord’s lack of planning and strategizing resulted him in being returned to stone. He was carted back to the gardens only two days after achieving freedom. I mentally facepalmed as I saw the horror etched onto Discord’s face. He had several millennia to make a plan and he screws up so quickly. I promised myself I wouldn’t make the same mistake. Shortly after small cracks had begun to puncture my statue and I knew Discord kept his deal.
I spent the next several hours recalling every plan I had thought up during my time of imprisonment. Several of them I scrapped right away as they would either result in unwanted deaths or send me back into stone. All my plans boiled down to two decisions: I could either return to solitude or I could make peace with the crown. Normally I would jump at the chance of being alone, but I was surprised to find myself shying away from the option. It would seem 1500 years of solitude had been enough for me. Happy that I could finally decide on a course of action I simply waited for my freedom.
The day after Discord's defeat there was a celebration at the castle, no doubt honoring the six mares that saved the day. I couldn’t help but feel giddy at the prospect of potentially meeting the six main characters of My Little Pony. I wasn’t a diehard brony, but I did watch the episodes. Believe me I had a friend who was obsessed with the show. I never saw so many plushies and dolls in my life!
It was around noon of the celebration when I finally felt the cracks begin to deepen. I had learned beforehand that the mane six were staying for the night in Canterlot. I couldn’t be happier with my stroke of good fortune. Hopefully Celestia and Luna would be distracted long enough for me to escape the city without incident. They were the only ones who made me nervous. While I may be able to overpower one of the sisters, together they could prove a problem. Not to mention they would have an edge of not being immobile for a millennia and a half.
I wasn’t immobile for much longer. Stone fell off my body like flaked paint as more and more of my skin was revealed. Within a minute I was finally free and able to breathe fresh air once more. Well, I would if the first thing I didn’t inhale was the dust from the falling rocks, so instead I was subjected to a fit of coughing. Turns out the second times the charm as I successfully took my first full breathe of fresh air after 1500 years. With shaking hands I sheathed my blade and secured my tome within my robe.
I closed my eyes and ran my fingers through my silver hair, brushing away any pebbles that remained. I enjoyed the cool mountain air, a small gust of wind dancing across my skin and causing my robe to flutter. My eyes snapped open, the irises glowing faintly before dimming to a natural brown. The corners of my lips twitched upwards into a smile as I looked towards the city of Canterlot.
Let’s see if Celly is still any good at playing ‘chess’.
Interesting.
I don't see why people have already put bad notation.
I'll wait and see what come next, and then, will give you my opinion.
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Yea, made me feel real warm and fuzzy inside when I saw two down votes and only one view when I uploaded it! Ah well.
I don't claim to be a good writer and I write for the joy of sharing my ideas.
The biggest issue I'm having right now with the story is how I want to go about implementing game mechanics. I plan on going with a hybrid version of sort, but I'm not sure how well it'll be received.
Anyway, thanks for giving me a chance. I hope I don't disappoint.
I am interested, especially to see if you fit your character into the whole 'Displaced' Thing, like I have. Plus, I fricking love Fire Emblem!
Interesting character. Let's see how he gets along with the Princesses.
5532469 write what you feel like and if you look back at it and say "I like this" your good to go
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Yea, this story is set in the displaced multiverse. I plan on doing some flash backs once in a while and a detailed description of the merchant. Not sure if anyone will want to do a crossover with me in the future, but we'll see.
I love Fire Emblem as well and Robin is easily my favorite character of the entire series. There's just something about him and his personality I enjoy.
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Trying to give him a realistic personality is one of the issues I'm going through. He's smart, cunning and plans ahead. He can be, however, egotistical and enthusiastic.
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True enough! If the writer doesn't enjoy their own story then how will the reader?
5532617 Exactly!
Interesting...
I'll keep an eye on this story, see where it goes.
And for the record, so far so good
The story seems to be coming along just fine, for now. It's nice to see another LoHAH'verse story come to light. I'll be following this one, me thinks, if not just for the Fire Emblem. Only issues I have so far are a few minor grammar errors and the use of Discord as just a measly plot device. I'm also a bit confused as to how long Robin has been conscious in his stone statue. He states that he's been thinking about his actions for 20 odd years now but also mentions a plan from 1500 years ago, which I presume is to have Discord free him and that the plan was also made before he was petrified by the Elements. 'Course there was no guarantee that he would be turned to stone in the first place, as the Elements seem to do something different based on what the target is and what the intention of the user is.
Of course it's only the first chapter and things still need to be presented and settled, that much I can admit. As for Robin's powers and the strength of such as well as his 'duel' with Celestia, I'm waiting with bated breath for the next installment.
Needs a comma after past.
A comma after free and some puncuation at the end.
Sounds awkward, I suggest, "Discord's eyes were practically glowing with mischief as I finished my explanation."
Comma after have.
Apostrophe on Discord.
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Thanks, hopefully I can maintain a sense of decency!
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I'm glad I caught your interest. Hopefully I can keep it sustained. Thanks also for pointing out the grammatical errors. I already made the changes and it means a lot to me you'd go out of your way to point them out. In regards to some of your questions, allow me to shed a little light without ruining too much of the story. For starters, Robin knew that Discord would one day be released. From this he was forced to make a highly dangerous and risky move.
As far as Discord being a measly plot device, it actually pained me to do this. Discord is one of my favorite characters, but I had to take into consideration my character's personality and ideals. Robin loathes Discord due to his random and wild nature. He's a creature that Robin can't mentally pick apart and put back together. In Robin's eyes, this makes Discord a wild card and a liability. So he used him as a means to an end to escape and refused to warn him of his imminent imprisonment. He was killing two birds with one stone.
tracking, not good enough for a fave...yet. We'll see how this goes first.
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Fair enough! I want to earn those stars!
lots of promise.
...hopefully he is able to give Sunbutt and her sister a massive "reason you suck/what the hell hero" speech when they meet again.
keep up the good work
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I do have something like that planned. The reason Robin was imprisoned in the first place was simply due to the Royal Sisters fearing what he could do, not necessarily what he did do. Needless to say he's a bit peeved at the alicorns and would jump at the chance to knock them down a peg or two.
Don't know what you mean by the '/what the hell hero' part though.
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http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/WhatTheHellHero
"When characters In-Universe call out one of the heroes for doing something clearly unheroic, if not outright heinous. "
I'm trying to write a Fire Emblem: Awakening crossover fix as well. I really like your so far, though. Keep it up!
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Yea, that kind of revolves around Robin.
Let me put it this way: Robin can use Dark tomes
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It's a crossover, yes, but it's set in the Displaced multiverse. Robin will not have the same personality as the one from the games.
Interesting.
Solid start.
Keep up the good work.
I will want to see more before I make a judgement.
Now~
TRADE PLACES!
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Thanks!
The beginning needs to catch the readers attention.
I won't let you down!
Of course, I have a long way to go!
eh?
Bwah~!
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I've never heard of the Displaced universe theme. Although, I'm trying to make my story's Robin character have a sort of different personality as well.
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dark magic?
dark? or EVIL? because sometimes... there is a difference...
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Dark magic, and yes, I believe there is a difference, but the Royal Sisters may not see it that way. Dark magic exists in Fire Emblem and contains some of the more... violent attacks of the series. This ranges all the way from draining a victims life force to raising the dead.
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I highly suggest you check it out, it's easily my favorite theme.
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wouldnt both have non evil uses?
i.e. drain SOME of a healthy ponies life force (i'm assuming if you take small enough amounts, it regenerates) and give it to one thats dying?
necromancy could be used to bring back murder victims so that they can tell the police who the murderer was, as well as make sure the killer cant kill themselves to escape justice.
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You're correct on both accounts, but it's a bit more complicated in Fire Emblem. While I don't want to ruin too much of the story, I will say that Robin has had a LOT of time to study his magic. It's not purely bound by the laws of the game world since this is supposed to be real life. So he may be able to take the life force of a pony and transfer it to a wounded pony.
Necromancy in Fire Emblem is not so forgiving. Even in the games, those who summon the dead are looked down upon. The Dark magic brings back the body, but it does not return the soul. The magic amplifies the dead's skin and muscles, toughening it, turning the corpse into a weapon. It is nothing short of defiling the dead.
Interesting. He's pissed at the Princesses for rashly declaring him an enemy of the state but seems to at least not be petty enough to go "revenge time now." Or maybe he's just farsighted enough to know that making ammends benefits him more in the end.
I'm interested to see what the source of conflict could be here, aside from obvious "I don't trust you problems." I'd also like to know mor about his personality. Is he brilliant but easygoing? Is he in intellectual snob who likes to show off his superiority? Is he a troll?
Looking forward to more.
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Robin wouldn't miss the chance to destroy the Princesses with words, but he'll never initiate violence against them. He wont, however, have any problems retaliating with force when threatened. Robin conducted multiple plans during his time in stone, leaning towards the goal of remaining free once released(Thinking of doing a side chapter in the future highlighting some of his major plans). Robin is heavily farsighted, always thinking of future gain rather then short term goals. Hell, he went through with a plan that was 1500 years in the making. He's either brilliant, stupid or lucky.
Robin's personality will be brought to light during the second chapter as well as his power and use of magic. I should be able to get it uploaded by tomorrow night!
Well hope at least the two bitches get what they deserves, a good painful humiliation which followed with death !!!
5533634 every time I hear people fearing dark magic in fire emblem, I think of Canas from Fire Emblem Blazing Sword.
"I have skill in a form of Elder magic. Some call it dark magic, a rather biased term if you will..." Canas to this day is my favorite dark mage in the entire series, because he defies all of the dark magician cliches in Fire Emblem, not to mention he's among the best characters in the whole game too.
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Your avatar fits very well with what you just said. Don't know why you want to see the Royal Sisters dead though!
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This isn't the world of Fire Emblem though, where Dark magic is semi-common. this is the tutti-frutti world of Equestria. Dark magic is practically unheard of and any practice of it will label you as a villain.
5535977 like I said before canas defies the dark mage cliches in every fire emblem game. Most are more like Tharja.
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If I didn't decide on Robin as being the main character I would have chosen Henry. His attitude would have been perfect for Equestria.
Finally! A GOD DAMN TACTICIAN! After all this time, we finally got one like this!
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What, you mean the type of human who is smart, powerful and able to outwit almost all of his enemies?
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More like someone who will plan ahead an ungodly amount just to make sure their goals are met, unlike most who just *cringes* wing it...
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It seems like most HiE stories revolve around 'just winging it'. It'll be harder to write a character to plans so much, but It's something I want to see happen.
Interesting. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
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Working on it right now! It required some serious revision so I might not get it out tonight.
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Well, take your time on it and make it quality.
I made the mistake of rushing one of my chapters and it was really bad.
I like the concept, but many authors follow the same line
turned to stone by a confucion or because they really deserved it
is broken by discord
he wants revenge
forgive princesses and are best friends
etc
I would recommend that at least not end up like best friends princesses, after all sealed in stone for 1000 years, and that's one of the worst torture I've seen this sort of thing should be done with demons, gods Fallen , when there is no choice, and seeing that your protagonist is a decent person exceeded
in the best case, civilized behavior
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I used this concept because it's the norm for a displaced story. most displaced stories have the main character trapped in stone or sealed away (that I've read).
As far as forgiving the princesses, that will take some time. He will never be best friends with them, but he won't go out of his way to harm them either.
I will wait to like or dislike this, but I'm definitely intrigued with your way of representing Robin. While the method used here is commonly used, I can overlook that since I am a very huge Fire Emblem fan. However, due to Robin's superior mind, I believe that he would have had more options than just the two you pointed out.
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Robin did have other options, but he discarded them early on. He could have left Equestria and traveled to the Griffon kingdom as one example. He didn't want to because he knows Equestria well at this point and has made the Everfree his home. I'm thinking of doing a side chapter detailing his time in stone including all his plans and bouts of crazy over a 1500 year period.
Oooh, this looks really good!
were, I make that mistake a lot...