WAAAAAAAAAAA! I can only thumbs up this story once!
Moon, Sunset and Trixie! Talk about an interesting harem.

MAOR!

Not sure how I felt about the whole Sunset and Moon thing...

Seemed kind of out of place and thrown in there.

Other than that, hopefully it doesn't distort the rest of the romance of Sunset and Mal too much! Nice chapter!

5177714 Once you get to know our version of Nightmare Moon, it won't seem that out of place. As for interrupting the romance between Sunset and Mal, I don't think it does, but I'm sure someone will disagree with me about that.

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It's a great story so far, but could you put breaker lines to separate the transitions it makes it easier to see what is said to each new prospective?

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"Umm, sort of. I can sense her soul and it's not overtly wicked. So maybe we can convince her to give up that whole eternal night plan of hers." He told the two of them.
"And what if you can't?" Sunset asked.
"Eh.. om nom nom tasty soul." Malthael replied with a weak grin.

Tasty soul........

5277247 here gave some syrup for that

Interesting...
Sex
Violence
One-liners
Nobody gives a fuck
Discord went Mandela
Nightmare Whore
Racist ponies
Death with brain of a WoW player
And the list goes on...

"And what if you can't?" Sunset asked.
"Eh.. om nom nom tasty soul." Malthael replied with a weak grin.
"This is how Trixie is going to die, following an idiot who claims to be the Angel of Death."

Death with the brain of a WoW player

You made my bucking day

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then we should mobilize and eliminate her; and Malthael if he proves to be aiding her crimes.

You just admitted that Malthael is death itself, then you claim you ponies can eliminate him. Because your fight with him went so well the first time around. Hell, your parents were killed by him when he didn't even know how to use his powers.

Talk about arrogance.

sorry, i clicked dislike on accident . I just wanted to click next, i hope you can forgive me.

"Eh.. om nom nom tasty soul." Malthael replied with a weak grin.

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Om nom nom tasty soul indeed.

"Eh.. om nom nom tasty soul." Malthael replied with a weak grin.

I couldn't stop laughing at this. Everyone in the deli I was in was looking at me like I was nuts. Which isn't to far from the truth, but still funny.

"Eh.. om nom nom tasty soul." Malthael replied with a weak grin.

This is a funny om nom nom om nom nom om nom nom om nom nom

So am I the only one feeling like this is growing into a harem