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I am bored and hungry so I tell how ya messed up.
"Why do I have a felling......"
should be feeling
"Jay smiled and setting his glass and the wine next to Celestia's glass before he sat on the bed and sunk deep I to soft bed before he took off his boots."
setting and before i two different tenses. pick a tense and use it. past, present or future. also the who is the "I" person? short monkey boy or sun but?
"soft silken fur on things caressing her cutiemark."
wat things? makes no sense.
"with a vary check grin before giving her flank a squeeze."
ya mean cheeky right?
"tho he"
normally slang is only used when its in dialogue
"tho still"
same as above
5734319 It was the auto correct I was to be in
Tho is not slang.
5734319 looking back at I 're worded the tho out as it was not needed
5734562 ya sure tho isn't slang/sort/lazy hand for though?
5734772 ..... Not sure I just know the auto correct recognized it as a word when it doesn't for most slang.
5734813 lol really?
5735410 yeah. I am also writing on site with a kindle fire that's 5 or 6 years old.
5735414 damn the search i did said tho was slang for though and most slang comes from a sort/lazy way of saying or writing something
5735420 that's nice to know.
5735423 yep the bored is real
5735428 lol plan on getting a another chapter or two real soon but need a editor.
U nice litte hot chaper i think the door guard's wil se as dee here the door rattel
Left door guard: dit you here dat
Right door guard: yep the princess hes u good night too night
Still u good chaper
5735732 they just don't comment on it.
5735742 Or dat you never now right
5735748 lol yeah, glade you liked it. Did you see it coming? I gave hints of them being something. But then again there are a lot of couples in this.
5735433 i dont mind helpin out a bit
5735783 Ok I'll pm you when I'm done writing the next one.
5735796 roger roger
5735776 the moment Jay and tia went in the room and tia lock the door
And the guard's talking over u genraal and blauwblood so ya
i saw it coming in the short run i stil think it's u good chaper
5735877 oh it gets better wait till the morning after.
5735901 hmm hangover and training the greenhorn's dat is gowing to by good
i hope luna dus not wake the two in the mording scrap i hope luna wake damn up
Yeah, about that. You will be super disappointed with the canon timeline. Unless of course that you set this story to have the Zeon's actually won the One Year War in the end?
10965334
they where at Jabrow they dont know anthing beyond the fall back order there