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For me this story is getting a bit too sweet. I like that Bolt's town is fairly progressive, and they've accepted Bolt and Ruby but I kind of expected more resistance. Lamia's are predators and their biology alone should trigger some innate fear on an individual basis. But besides that accepting a new race is one thing, openly accepting a new mixed relation should put more than a few ponies ill at ease. On top of which any sort of mind altering would be red flags to many, I'm hoping this is just the calm before the storm and more conflict is in the winds because social change just doesn't happen so smoothly. My problem is the towns reaction, I guess it would make more sense if the town had a culture of dealing with Griffons and intermarrying. Lamia are more pony than Griffons, so if Griffons are easily accepted why wouldn't Lamia.
Also I find the Lamia's are becoming less hostile with visitors to be rather hard social adjustment to swallow. I kinda feel that its rather too soon to just open the borders and let ponies just wonder into the badlands. The Lamia still have an ingrained culture of male slavery that was only removed a month ago. Something like this would be an extreme culture shock to the liberal ponies. While I don't doubt they would rather have willing males to share rather than having to subjugate quite a few would still resent the idea of male freedom. Maybe this will be a conflict in the future, but the idea of safely traveling to the Lamia city shouldn't be encouraged yet IMO.
5946858 Whoa... *puts on lenseless glasses to look smart* Okay I can answer this now! XD
To an extent your right, the town is suppose to be hinted as a hub for foreign visitors so they are quite adapt to the new these ponies, there will possibly be a few but I won't touch on them here, I plan to use another city for Ruby and Bolt to be shunned and eventually driven from... Manehattan to be precise
As for the lamia town...There will be a battle chapter
Does this answer how this will work? :)
oh so it's happening again XD too much to drink, wow i like this chapter. great work
5946880 WAY to much to drink... I look forward to doing Note's spin off... ooopppsss spoilers :3
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Yes, for some reason a small town does not fit the profile of a multicultural hub of innovation. So take care to emphasize this aspect in the future, maybe I was too focused on Bolts conflict with his parents to notice the town. Another pit fall is that big cities tend to be more blasé about mixed relations as they are hubs of foreign trade and mixed culture. So for them to be out right against the pair there should be a focal reason (ex. Hate of Lamia or Hypnosis phobia) that is ingrained into the culture. Such a thing would stem from some incident in the towns lore, or gost stories created for one reason or another.
Despite my hazyness over the town I really liked the chapter and I do look forward to more.
5946909 Well I imagine when griffins first immigrated they weren't widely accepted, Oakbark's history is that it has simply been a small town sine founding and most ponies move away so new buildings are rarely needed, and fewer ponies could make it easier to befriend them all rather than large quantities.
As for the idea of the large city hating Ruby, their rich, snobbish and generally racist to anything that 100% pony... I reckon I can work with that, somehow. XD
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I guess the most logical reason Griffons would frequent the town is if it was rest stop between Griffon lands and Canterlot. Because it's only a way point and not a hub the towns economy is solely based off housing and feeding travelers.
As for snobby big city folk, meh seems ligit. Whatever reason you decide, consider that ever side has a motivation. And the most important side is the antagonist, because it is the reason for the conflict in the first place. Someone does not get out of bed and simply decide they are going to go out of there way to make someone's life miserable just because they feel like it. Hate is just as involved as love, the level of hate required to mobilize a mob would be akin to the love someone would need to fight said mob. But it's not just hate, it could be fear, jealousy, greed, anger any manner of negitive emotion could be the basis in the antagonists reasoning. The protagonist may never truly know what the motivation of the antagonist is but it should be considered when writing. To avoid dialog from seeming wishy washy. Insults and slurs sound better if emotion is attached to it.
5946999 I'll try to keep this all in mind and try not to disappoint. :)
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I definitely look forward to it.
This was great. Continue the great work and looking forward to more.
5948213 Next chapter is ready for proof reading, look forward to it. :)
5950136 Great.
couple random corrections:
"And I could see the pink love tunnel"
Surprised he was so keen on avoiding that given he's already seen one. ZING!
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XD