5321917 Ugh... double o isn't it *facehoof* sorry about that, I'll fix it, thanks.

So. I've been reading the story.
It is over all well done! So far, that is.
I did spot some mistakes but i can look away from them.
Even though its a OC story its well done. Good work.
It also reminds me of "spice and wolf"
Continue the good work :3

5358316 Why does everyone say its reminds them of Spice and Wolf, is that bad pun so well know? XD

If you spot mistakes can you copy the line and tell me what's wrong, I want to get better at spotting and fixing mistakes and that only happens if people show me them, I try my best to find them but as my own editor I sometimes miss them.

Thanks I will continue, glad you like it! :)

5358345 i'll be sure to do that the next time i read a chapter :)

5358362 Thanks :)

Well, this is kinda both their fault. Bolt willingly agreed to it as Ruby took it to far.

I can hypnotize with my eyes but it's more like making them face their fears

but couldn’t even twitch my head in her coils,

a farm that ran apple based produce