It is really strange and normally i would hate it, but i am really okay with it. I have to be honest, i know what she is doing there more or less, but i would like to be sure. Has this insane mare just take one or both of his presoius jewels? And is he still a stallion or is this .....no you know what, i am pretty sure she take one of his balls and closed the wound painfully... right?

For a moment i wanted to be sorry for him, but i think it helps that he tried to save his sister. Right now i think he could not be helped in this moment, i think he has no choise probably. No one powerfull enough was near there, but i like to think with a little bit training, Trixie can learn to be stronger too. She can´t really be that week how she sometimes looks.

Still a favorite and you are able to make something good for me which i normally would not like. Right now i notice that ironic headline

5172372 I'm gald you liked it. It was actually my first time. see what I did there? And no he's a stallion he only lost one his jewels and his manhood is still intact minus one jewel. I actually have plans for this family of ponies and plan to make a side story. As long as I don't get raged at by people. Honestly I thought I went to far with the whole cleansing with fire, but that's what I wanted.As for alicorns, screw that idea. I'm not touching a new alicorn I promise.

Still honestly thanks for staying so positive about my story. I'm actually happy for that. I agree villains appear to often at the end of stories of romance, but spoiler they're not villains in my story. I pinkie promise. I don't want to spoil anything so I'll leave this at that.

Have a ball. ha I crack myself up sometimes.

Yeah...This felt completely unnecessary and honestly just came off kinda dumb. That's just my own thought. Just the idea of making an entire chapter for this. Sorry. It just felt really bleh. I feel like this part could have been either completely kept away or explained later.

I know I sound harsh and I apologize for that but that's just how I see this chapter. I love the rest of the story though.

5173041 Don't worry that's what constructive criticism is for. I know it wasn't important, but the ponies in the story will be important later. I was actually planning on making a side story for them specifically. But that'l come later if I feel like it.

I'm actually curious what you think of the rest of the story since you commented. You thoughts if that's OK?

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I love new Trixie ships so that's a huge plus for you XD

I can't really say anything against the story so far aside from what I already said in my last chapter but that I'm excited for you to continue Trixie, Fleet and Spit Xd

It was a good idea to put an authors note at the start to warn of what the chapter involved.

I read it, but I won't be going through it with a fine comb. I don't have the stomach for this.

Looks like gryphons are involved too. Not sure how they fit into this yet.

5176440 The PoV thing I'll explain that first. It's was what all my Professors called readers analytic reading or something. Basically, when I write something the way I have as a flashback specifically, when changing perspectives from one character telling the story in his flashback, to another character, it's up to the reader to know the difference in the two and relate relative information based on the characters PoV.

I don't use it too often for this very reason. It really was just an error in judgment on my part to use that technique without proper implementation if it confused you. Sorry.

On another note, the 'continuity error' has been fixed Lyra only heard about the incident at Ponyville from a letter she got from Sweet Drops or Bon Bon as I'll call her. So, she wasn't there Bon Bon was. Good old Pette is a pony, and he owns Pette's Pie Bar. There we go no mistaking the name now, I was just being a dunderhead.

The helmet from a royal guard was not the same helmet the Ruby was wearing. Ruby's helmet looks like and Covenant Rangers helmet from Halo Reach. Two completely different ones.

Back to the fight scene I forgot to tell how Trixie dispelled her candlelight spells after she nutted Ruby. Being a guy I actually felt what I was writing too. O.o Poor Ruby. Don't worry Blaze made it all better. I actually have a story for these ponies as well as their relationships, and family that'll be explained later. Good guess on the Saddle Arabians though but spoilers iitdllthem! Well, not coasjhlly atagway. But I wont say any more!

I'm actually surprised no one raged at me for the family bonding chapter. I was really expecting a lot of hate for that chapter. Huh. Well the more you know.

Actually while I'm on the subject of the Kindle Trinity, now they not be villains. They're classified as antagonists currently, but i hold the right to change that in the future. That being said they're the Team Rocket of my story, just not a bunch of idiotic morons.

Glad you liked it. Was it worth the wait?

I want my MAUD BUTTON!!!! MAUD IS BEST TRIXIE SHIPMATE!

See what I did there?

5176473 Why you hate my Family Bonding Time!?! It wasn't incest is wincest! It should have been.
It wasn't that bad.... Was it?
So, what do you think of the Starfall Clan Watson?

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I never said I hated it.
Fine, fine. I will take another look at it tomorrow.

For the record, wincest is fine (though i am a terrible sexist, cause im kinda sad Ruby is a colt now).

The more ballsy part of the chapter, i had little desire to read closely. Cause ouch. *cringe*
I skimmed through it to get the gist of what was going on, so i couldnt take nuts... Erm, I mean notes.

Edit:

"Please, bis sis,

Big Sis*

5178190 Yay! You make me a happy panda!

Geez look at the stuff this kid needs to go through. One of his sisters molests him while the other tortures him. For a second I thought Blaze was going to get the worst of the punishment because she was more in charge of that mission than Ruby, but you went out on him even though you generated audience sympathy for him in the last chapter. I hope that the sympathetic antagonist isn't turned into a big punching bag for everybody

8060514 Ironic you should mention that Ruby was a punching bag. he's not a punching bag kinda but just submissive. I'm sure you'll get to the part where this chapter is more relevant if the speed you read this is any indicator.