The chapter was sweet.

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How so?

5034730 the way they confessed their feelings and the fact that he decided to cuddle with Babs to show his commitment.

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And have seeeex!

Babs earned her cutie mark! Only Pinkie!

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Only Pinkie!

Only Pinkie what?

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Could know what Jacob was doing and would tell him to go back to Babs like that.

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And she knew they had seeeeeeeex!

So how do you like the story so far?

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You're doing good, keep it up!

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Anything I need to fix? Is Babs and Jacob's romance pacing a little too fast? More ISP crossover scenes?

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It is going a bit quickly, yes. Maybe you should make it so Babs is on birth control, I think they're a little young to be parents just yet. Maybe in a few years they'll be ready.

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Me and LF are deciding if she should get a morning after pill or just have a child now. But chapter 6 isn't complete yet, so we are probably going to do the former choice.

Babs IS 18 and Jacob is 25, so we should wait.

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Yeah, maybe they could try again in a few years or so.

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Suuuuuure.

Anything else?

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Well, maybe Babs could find a job or something? Because she'd be pretty bored sitting around all day while Jacob works at the pharmacy.

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Actually Babs is going to work at the record store with Dogg.

At first somehow it appeared a bit fast with their relationship, but i think there were a few weeks they are together already right? I mean since he had her.
In the end it turned out really nice and even if Pinkie was a bit weird, she is right. I like it to have her a bit shy or unsure, but i think about wanting to have her playing the bad guy again. I mean hhmmm...you know her usually tough personality, she has one in this fanfic right?

If i rememberit right she is 18 right? well yeah it would be probably good if she takes something to not get a child. I don´t think that it is too fast how their relationship goes, but after i read how fast they got to the sex after just one day they kissed, it is probably a bit to foward in the sex part. I was still nice, If i think about it, he accepted the fact to love her really fast, he was wondering at first, but in the next secondhe decidet to love her...well works for me, only the sex comes to early. Like i said, they kissed the mornig and at the evening they had sex right? Well she said she was only willing to go that far and then she had stil sex, that don´t fit that good maybe, but otherwise it looks good.

Just a suggestion, maybe she could act tough around everyone else or a bit less interessted than in Jacob and extra nice to him. I think i want that the other can see that he is way more important to her than the others. I somehow she her as a tough one.

PS: I just want to let you know, i always try to make a few suggestions if i like a fanfic very much, this one has the potential to be one of my future favourite fanfics. I sometimes just get a bit excited if it is a beautiful, nice or even cute story like adoption or something, and then i write a lot and start to wish for thinks,

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It's been about 1 or 2 weeks since they've met.

And Babs is 18, yes. The night that they made love was on her 18th, so it seems fitting, even if it was less than 24 hours since they actually kiss.

okay now... NOW! my body is ready my feels are fully set in place and im fully invested in this romance ... PLEASE DON'T MAKE THIS AN EMOTIONAL ROLLER COASTER!!!

5036949 well it is not that weird, after i read the whole thing i was ok with that, it is just the first think i had to think about. I could think of it as a part of her transformation in a real being, maybe a quick boost of her emotions or something like that.

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Roller coaster?

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Maybe it IS you ...

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you know ups and downs and loops that my heart isn't ready for! but the best tales tend to make hearts ache!