19 year old Brandon is brought to Equestria and well, many things happen

Glad we know what we're getting into.

19 year old Brandon is brought to Equestria

19 year old Brandon is brought to Equestria

19 year old Brandon

Well...

...fuck. I'd rather not go to Equestria right now.

Will am going to keep a eye on this I like were it going

19 year old Brandon is brought to Equestria and well, many things happen

That doesn't give off an air of Gary Stuness. (Sarcasm)

The summary/synopsis on your story is the second thing your readers will see about it after the title. "Stuff happens" does not make a good summary or synopsis.

Come on, man. You've gotta at least TRY to make a detailed description. That one barely tells us anything, except that it will probably be another typical HiE story with nothing interesting happening.

-Edit- Much better than it was. Nice job.

I tried to get past the very obvious gary-stu description. I decided to give this a read without prematurely judging it. But holy tap dancing batman on pogo sticks, this was incredibly dull! First off, your opening was so bad on grammar, sentence structure and pacing that I wanted to close the tab right then and there. Secondly, nothing in this seemed to even hint that this wouldn't be your basic HiE self-insert, wish fulfillment bullshit. Guy gets sent to Equestria somehow, meets Mane 6, befriends said Mane 6 while also having somewhat of a misunderstanding on something or another.

Boring! I normally like HiE, but this was so full with every single stereotype of the genre that I just can't bring myself to torture my eyes and brain with this atrocity. Best thing you can hope for is to get readers who don't mind reading the same plot for every HiE out there. That's my honest opinion.

I don't want to be mean, but there isn't a whole lot of detailing going on here, at least in my stories I try and be detailed as I possibly can be, as well as entertaining.

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as well as entertaining as well.

And redundancy is redundant. Though I do agree to your statement, it does have the quality for foundation that needs to be slightly reworked with the inclusion of spelling and grammatical fixes. However, aside from any negatives, it is a rather nice story.

what what what at the beginning you didn't know anyone and at the end you think you know princess Celestia and as well know Rarity's a seamstress i was enjoying the story until you contradicted yourself i can excuse the grammar no one's perfect.