I'd like to where this goes now.

Not bad at all.

Allow me to help you spread this story a little.

Take out the thing for zebras that pinkie said. Pinkie Pie didn't even know what a zebra WAS at this point in time.

The writing is pretty good, but I couldn't help but be bored throught the entire chapter. It might be because the chapter is just a rehash of canon events with a few original splashes mixed in, as well as the Living Darkness stuff, but regardless it was still a long and drawn out repeat of the first and second episode.

5307831 Don't worry, next chapter should deviate quite a bit and provide a bit of the reason for the gore tag The reason I only referred to Deathweaver as the "Living Darkness" for most of the chapter was because I wanted to wait until I finally revealed him until I give him a true name. I thought it would be more ominous .

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Dude, that was a damn nice synapse on the 'cover'. Can't wait to read this.