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Awwwwww, poor Fluttershy.
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Suppose after reviewing the FAQ, should probably change the story back to Mature due to the less show-related content and bits of violence, though I try not to be too descriptive and just leave a vague mental image.
Does this seem fitting? Was originally going to add 'sex' tag due to the *ahem* excited moments, the FAQ describes that Teen should have 'Sex' if it is very heavily implied instead of full on explicit sex. Seems Mature is more fitting due to the violence-related bits, I don't intend for there to be explicit sex however, so I'm confused on where that lies.
Your take on it?
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Personally I would err on the side of caution; that is, if you find yourself wondering, add the tags/mature/etc, and if people agree that it's not as bad as you think it is (or perhaps ask a moderator?) then you can add/remove accordingly.
4822139 Good point.
Will ask a moderator first before I change tags.
4819023 idk I have read a few scenes where it has sexual situations and quite a few fanfics add it just in case, but its up to you really.
Liked this chapter although quite dissapointed daniel didnt feel more guilty about almost choking fluttershy. Could have potentially killed her and fucked everything up. Glad he'll at least think more before acting. Hate it when most HiEs have the human always act like that. Overall great chapter, I feel bad fluttershy making herself believe daniel might look at her in a romantic sense. At least more pinkie next chappy :3
4830190 Haven't gotten a reply from Meeester (Moderator) yet, so will add 'Sex' tag and change to Mature just in case if that's how it should be. Though I don't intend for any of them to get excited beyond, erm, getting excited or referencing it.
It took me a bit to figure out what HiE stands for, bit longer than it should have.
The
excusereason for him acting calmer than you'd think afterward is that he promised to himself that he'd think before acting, so he has the intention of keeping that promise especially if acting before thinking hurts some one; which unfortunately for him, doing so had cost him someone close before too. Daniel acted the way he did in the moment, he definitely regrets it, but he won't loom on it more than what's necessary (story-wise and meta reasoning).A big part being that she's forgiven him, but she seems calm about it, so vice versa he'd act the same and not overthink it or have it loom as regret. Falling back to the line above, he's made this mistake of regret and acting before thinking before and the result was..costly.
He was sincere when he said that he's grateful for her help, and that he's been astounded at the amount of understanding she's had with him since literally the beginning. Doesn't excuse it however, still a very bad thing to do, because as you say; it could have been worse.
Will say that bruising can't be swept under the rug, the severity it's described is that it's visible. :p I made that a bit of a focal point, though I will say I have no intention of making him hide it.
Edit: For making you read all of the above :p
https://derpibooru.org/695226?scope=scped0a28ce2a09780b2772fa47cd99a9ead544b7be4
4830882 yay strawberry pinkie!
prepare your buttocks because once ppl notice the sex tag its gon rain views and upvotes (maybe)
HiE with sex tag usually become popular >_> poor suckers will be expecting clop
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I guess Mature is more fitting than anything, so will leave it with that for now. I'll add the 'Sex' tag if a moderator finds it's appropriate, will ask a few others too so I get a bit of a faster reply. :) In the meantime, just Mature.I'll wait for a moderator's opinion instead. May be overthinking this, but just want it to be sure before I change anything :I
This story is pretty good, I am glad the nightmare's are, if not over, going to be less painful and mind messing now. Those nightmares really messed with Dan's relations for awhile. Hopefully now he can start making headway in Ponyville again,
I do feel bad for Flutters though, sure, he might understand her coming over a few more times in case he has a relapse, but them staying together is pretty much over now, and Flutters sucks at conveying her own desire's. With Pinkie being so much more open about what she wants, I don't see this ending happily for Flutters.
Not sure who to root for, as they are both great characters in this story, your Fluttershy definitely is on that thin line between creepy and caring. Looking forward to see how this continues now that the nightmare arc is pretty much done with *that I am aware of*.
4831257 Good to know you like the story so far :) Motivation, sweet, sweet motivation.
Though I will say the beginning of the story is rough when it comes to how it reads, so I appreciate you pushing through into the more recent ones. I plan to reformat the early ones once I'm done, to make it easier to read for other people if I can, but for now I just have to focus on finishing the story.
Thank you for the input! Good to see you being able to highlight some things, especially Flutter's and Pinkie's relations with Daniel and how they fare with their personalities. Pinkie being more bold with her approach, Fluttershy being more meek and subtle. :)
Another thing you (or others) may not be aware of, at certain points the mane six call him variations of his name based on their relation with him, such as Dan;Danny;Daniel. The same with Twilight, when she got mad with Rainbow Dash, she simply calls her 'Rainbow'. Daniel simply says 'Dash' or 'Flutters' for around the same reason, it's a quick name, though he doesn't call either of them that out loud passively without it calling for it.
It's not something I plan on exploring, as there's both no room or reason to explain it this far in the story; but I should say that story-wise (and meta reasons) he doesn't know Applejack, Rarity, or Rainbow that well compared to Twilight, Pinkie, or Fluttershy. I mean to say it now if it's not clear enough in the story, as little lines as they have anyway. So they, for the most part, simply call him either Daniel or Dan. Twilight is somewhere in the middle, either calling him Danny or Dan depending on their relation at the time.
Also, for making you read all of the above: https://derpibooru.org/102825?scope=scpe1062ec6bbe019523408a342881a08a005b8fba35
I imagine Daniel holding the side of Fluttershy's cheek would be something like the hand on the right, though less roughly shaped.
oh boy... Looks like Daniel and Flutters might switch places.
she seems to be getting all kinds of crazy. lol