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Well from what has happened. It still says that it is either a psychological "nightmare" or something "alive". But my bits are on the "nightmare" since under his panic caused the EMT's to look similar to the "nightmare" which means that under his trauma the "thing" alter his sight. All that could a demon also do which makes it hard to see which is right. But his dreams also tells that it could be both. The only thing i see that a psychological "nightmare" usualy dont do is asking to be "realesed" which is weird on ots own. And now i need to take a little break since all this have caused me a minor headache
oh wow i LOVE dan an pinkie's relationship thus far! they really complement each other so well
all these warm feels!media.giphy.com/media/yEVs27oMkj9zW/giphy.gif
Is it a coincidence that after i read chapter five and fell asleep i had the weirdeiest dream of my entire life and it was så filled with inceptions and dececptions that i actully scared me....
Hmmm I'm not usually fond of the whole amnesia and/or evil demon entity thingy in the main characters head plots but here it's kinda interesting
4677829 I'm trying to make it a little different each time, the 'abomination' or 'nightmare'. Will say it's trying to antagonize him and a knife to the gut is a pretty good way to antagonize him. There's a pattern, if you can spot it.
I wanted to tone it down in this one honestly, figured I'd work a bit more on the 'romance' part. I didn't want to drag out his recovery, so I just fast forwarded in time with some important bits to a keynote in the main plot, which is being medically examined in Canterlot.
4677176 I tried, I actually don't know how Pinkie would be in a relationship, so just went with the keyword,
'Playful'. And just rolled with my own interpretation of Pinkie showing her affection.
I appreciate all your positive and negative feedback below :D Did not expect so many comments, been itching to see them though.
In Chapter 2, my e̶x̶p̶l̶a̶n̶a̶t̶i̶o̶n̶ excuse for the confusing parts was me writing it while having a headache all day. Apparently writing a few lines about diarrhea and headaches caused me to have them (literally). Will probably have to rewrite it to make a bit more sense later on, I imagine it's pretty jumbled up.
Edit: An important note would be to watch the time line, such as 1 month 1 day, and such. The first chapter is 2 months ahead of when he arrived.
4677986 yeah playful sounds about right. You really nailed her personality in how she would act to show affection. The boop thing? Genius and cute as fuck.
As for the month thing, yeah i realized it by chapter 3 that you were writing it from 1 month in the past so it would eventually catch up to the first chapter which was at month 2. I thought you were going for flashbacks each night he went to sleep showing his past days. It was just a bit confusing.
I didnt expect the pinkie relationship though tbh. You really nailed it thus far. Shes not super over the top obnoxious but shes still playful in her own way, which I really like. I people wrote pinkie like you did she would one of my faves. Theres not many human and pinkie stories around.