It's really tough to get Zecora's rhymes down, and while some of them were pretty good, some of them were... pretty bad:
“Mmm, now this is rather new, and given your fascination with breasts I certainly didn’t expect this from you.”
and on another note, I couldn't help noticing one paragraph where you forgot to not only add the second half of a rhyme, but separate Spike's dialogue from the paragraph that that starts with Zecora's dialogue:
“Glad to hear that you desire my rear.” Zecora moaned sweetly, ... “How’s that, Zecora?”
unless the rhyme WAS "hear" and "rear", which doesn't work that easily, since almost all of the rhymes so far have been pretty long, with at least a comma between the two halves, which is kinda harshly emphasized by one of the very next lines:
“Yes... Yes, I-I-m, aaah... going to cum, so hard my... my legs m-may go numb.”
Very hot. I love clops that have anthro Zecora doing anal. Although I thought Spike's first time doing anal didn't come until SpikeDash on Pleasure Island.
I've seen this a commented a few times, and provided this has been out there for at least six months based on the comments for it, this is a bit of a refresher.
Spike's Odd Jobs is the prequel to My Little Pleasure Island. Therefore we have to remember that the things that show up in MLPI are AFTER the events in Odd Jobs. Also, Spike and Pinkie, as well as Rarity are in a FWB relationship--Pinkie because she's the first to experience Spike in a sexual nature, and Rarity afterwards in some event in Canterlot. Pinkie knows about Spike's double dragons that showed up in the penultimate chapter of MLPI where Spike did all the mares at the same time because she experienced them first-hand. (Still surprised that Spike didn't accidentally knock Pinkie up from it.)
Also, as you can see in a previous chapter of this, Celestia (who is Spike's mom in this) did get down and dirty with Spike even though she did it under an alias (I'm pretty sure it's Comet Swirl, I can't remember well). She confirmed it in the epilogue of MLPI. In Odd Jobs, the other mares of the Mane 6 haven't admitted their feelings for Spike, much less getting intimate with him, only Pinkie and Rarity had shown feelings for him.
Hope that clears up a few things.
And I would love to see that Fleur is one of Spike's clients. Or maybe Countess Coloratura or Sapphire Shores. Another one I think would be pretty cool would be Spitfire, Fleetfoot, or any of the female Wonderbolts that probably could know who Spike is though Rainbow Dash. There has to be something there for the CMCs as well, even if there isn't a scene or chapter for them--they are basically tracking Spike's steps as he does his thing, and it's not that much of a secret that they have feeling for the drake as well.
8393189 I know all of this. I was just commenting on how in SpikeDash Spike says his first time doing anal was with Dash. And that is proven untrue in the Zecora x Spike chapter.
My bad, then. Sometimes we have to remember the comments and the context that they are from. I just thought it was a oversight as well, honestly. But then again, we could have forgot things like that--though it would be really hard to actually forget Spike's first experience with anal...
Very nice I enjoyed this. But didn't spike say his first time doing anal was with rainbow dash in my little pleasure island.
That was a chapter and the next one shouldn't take as long right? And who was the potion for.
It's really tough to get Zecora's rhymes down, and while some of them were pretty good, some of them were... pretty bad:
and on another note, I couldn't help noticing one paragraph where you forgot to not only add the second half of a rhyme, but separate Spike's dialogue from the paragraph that that starts with Zecora's dialogue:
unless the rhyme WAS "hear" and "rear", which doesn't work that easily, since almost all of the rhymes so far have been pretty long, with at least a comma between the two halves, which is kinda harshly emphasized by one of the very next lines:
This chapter must've been a pain to write. Just for the way Zecora talks.
I love every word of this chapter!
Hey take your time and let the creativity flow. I know this chapter is hard for you to make and I commend for you for it.
Just take one step at a time were not going anywhere.
RIP Zecora's butt in the morning.
Great chapter, can't wait to see more. I wonder who will be next. I hope it is some mare with some kinky or unique fetish lol
I applaud your writing of Zecora. I believe that's three. Two more to go.
Another hot one. Keep 'em coming.
Very nice and interesting!!! Ever thought about Spike doing an Odd Job for Fleur?
Very hot. I love clops that have anthro Zecora doing anal. Although I thought Spike's first time doing anal didn't come until SpikeDash on Pleasure Island.
plz continue!
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I've seen this a commented a few times, and provided this has been out there for at least six months based on the comments for it, this is a bit of a refresher.
Spike's Odd Jobs is the prequel to My Little Pleasure Island. Therefore we have to remember that the things that show up in MLPI are AFTER the events in Odd Jobs. Also, Spike and Pinkie, as well as Rarity are in a FWB relationship--Pinkie because she's the first to experience Spike in a sexual nature, and Rarity afterwards in some event in Canterlot. Pinkie knows about Spike's double dragons that showed up in the penultimate chapter of MLPI where Spike did all the mares at the same time because she experienced them first-hand. (Still surprised that Spike didn't accidentally knock Pinkie up from it.)
Also, as you can see in a previous chapter of this, Celestia (who is Spike's mom in this) did get down and dirty with Spike even though she did it under an alias (I'm pretty sure it's Comet Swirl, I can't remember well). She confirmed it in the epilogue of MLPI. In Odd Jobs, the other mares of the Mane 6 haven't admitted their feelings for Spike, much less getting intimate with him, only Pinkie and Rarity had shown feelings for him.
Hope that clears up a few things.
And I would love to see that Fleur is one of Spike's clients. Or maybe Countess Coloratura or Sapphire Shores. Another one I think would be pretty cool would be Spitfire, Fleetfoot, or any of the female Wonderbolts that probably could know who Spike is though Rainbow Dash. There has to be something there for the CMCs as well, even if there isn't a scene or chapter for them--they are basically tracking Spike's steps as he does his thing, and it's not that much of a secret that they have feeling for the drake as well.
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I know all of this. I was just commenting on how in SpikeDash Spike says his first time doing anal was with Dash. And that is proven untrue in the Zecora x Spike chapter.
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My bad, then. Sometimes we have to remember the comments and the context that they are from. I just thought it was a oversight as well, honestly. But then again, we could have forgot things like that--though it would be really hard to actually forget Spike's first experience with anal...
Nice that we're on the same page though...
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Yeah.
Please finish this?! :(
Progress on the next chapter?
Hello? Is this still going?…
Spike x Vinyl x Octavia was my favorite part so far. I hope you can get this done so we can get the sequel you've been obviously hinting.
It's been one year since the death of a great series. Rest in Peace
quite mysterious.
most excellent.
Is this story dead?
This was the best Zecora erotic fic I read in so long Oh man I am so glad I checked it out I enjoyed it sooo much
Hello Slam-Manian
I have been waiting for a long time for a new chapter, is there still hope?