Lovely chapter, if I might offer one suggestion, and one opinion.
shoved his arm
Foreleg? Not sure if "arm" counts on ponies besides anthro.
his sex
I'm not used to make genitalia being referred to as their sex. It's probably correct, but it just doesn't sound right. I'm used to sex being feminine in that context. This is more a matter of opinion on my part though.
Oh, man... I was so excited when I went through my updated stories list to see that this had updated! And I was super-hyped about where the scene went, just like I had hoped for. But my hopes were dashed when it was so brief! I was really hoping for some (suggested water-breathing / air generation) spell that would let him really go spelunking. i.imgur.com/DMX9G1t.gif I see it still says incomplete. I hope you can find it within yourself to continue this story and have Shining do more exploration in this department. If not for your readers, if not for yourself, for ME!
IT UPDATED!!!!!!!!!
Shining should look up either a water breathing spell or an air generation spell. Also, maybe an acid resistance one for some full tour fun.
Nice to see a return of one of the better vore stories on this site. And even nicer that Cadence is asking for Shining's consent this time.
It's great to see more of this story, I hope to see more of this.
Lovely chapter, if I might offer one suggestion, and one opinion.
Foreleg? Not sure if "arm" counts on ponies besides anthro.
I'm not used to make genitalia being referred to as their sex. It's probably correct, but it just doesn't sound right. I'm used to sex being feminine in that context. This is more a matter of opinion on my part though.
Keep up the good work, you saucy author you
Oh, man...
I was so excited when I went through my updated stories list to see that this had updated! And I was super-hyped about where the scene went, just like I had hoped for.
But my hopes were dashed when it was so brief! I was really hoping for some (suggested water-breathing / air generation) spell that would let him really go spelunking.
i.imgur.com/DMX9G1t.gif
I see it still says incomplete. I hope you can find it within yourself to continue this story and have Shining do more exploration in this department.
If not for your readers,
if not for yourself,
for ME!